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AS I LOOKED AT YOU" IS ONE OF MY BEST POEMS FEEL FREE TO CHECK IT OUT.

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    Fernando dhyverposted 2 years ago

    I remember that one day
    As I looked at you
    You were standing on the bay
    Looking at the crew
    The ship on the ocean floating away
    The wind blowing the leaves
    From the nearby trees
    No matter what you do
    I should never give up on you
    The one time the thought was new.
    I remember you like never before
    The sweet, gentle, happy girl.

    Every time my heart would skip a beat
    The heart; some say it’s the strongest and complex muscle in the body
    But in fact it’s quite soft and gentle
    It lets in deep feelings such as  love.

    The heart doesn’t stop there
    Or at least my heart doesn’t
    Because every time I think,  talk , or even see you,
    Mine skips a beat.
    It skips a beat not because of cholesterol ,or high sugar or, a heart condition
    It skips a beat because of you.
    Every time you come up on me
    On any shape size or form
    My heart skips a beat in content and excitement
    For as I looked at you, I thought I would never be for you.

    1. Arthur Keyword profile image59
      Arthur Keywordposted 2 years ago in reply to this

      can i say something, where do you get the words put poem together? where do you get your inspiration from. I really love poetry but i can't find ways to put the words together.

      Is there something that you are doing different that i do not know? please share it with me

    2. KenDeanAgudo profile image75
      KenDeanAgudoposted 2 years ago in reply to this

      Why did you post it here on forum when you can post it as a hub poetry??

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    Fernando dhyverposted 2 years ago

    When people ask me this I say if you can't write a poem is because you are thinking and trying too hard.  Try and think of something or someone that you love or has done something for you.  DON'T THINK OF THE WORDS TO WRITE DOWN. Think of a meaning that you want to express and let the words flow. Trust me the words will come to mind as fast as a lightning bolt touches ground.

    1. Arthur Keyword profile image59
      Arthur Keywordposted 2 years ago in reply to this

      thank you

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        Fernando dhyverposted 2 years ago in reply to this

        Hey Arthur just checking with you Budd. how did your poem go? Did my advice work?

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    Mary Guimontposted 2 years ago

    it could make a good hit song

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      Fernando dhyverposted 2 years ago in reply to this

      You think that it could be a hit song? It's was originally meant to be a poem. I did have some trouble trying to find it a beat .

 
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