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For Brenda S. who asks me constantly if I wrote another poem.

  1. wesleycox profile image82
    wesleycoxposted 7 years ago

    Yes I did write another poem.  As I have stated I am in a tough spot right now and have figured out how to word this emotion.

    The Beast within
    has always been held
    by a veil, so thin
    its fury unstoppable
    its rage burns unfueled
    ready to commit acts of sin.

    The Man, just a shell
    no longer in control
    It is another.
    Go to Hell!

    Red vision blurs
    shirt ripped off
    veins poppin and bulging
    all teeth are bared
    the battle begins
    no pain, just violence
    until all men are down
    and there is nothing left but silence!

    The End.

    I hope you enjoy it.

  2. frogdropping profile image85
    frogdroppingposted 7 years ago

    wesley you should have hubbed it - added some beautiful art.

    It's very graphic and I'm sure Brenda will love it big_smile

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      I have others so I am not too worried about that.  Thank you for liking it frogdropping.

  3. frogdropping profile image85
    frogdroppingposted 7 years ago

    Funnily enough I was just doing one for brenda that has odd words in it, as per her other thread about new words.

    I didn't know you'd written more poetry. I shall go look - though I know nothing about it and don't understand the nuts and bolts of it smile

  4. I*n*v*i*c*t*u*s profile image59
    I*n*v*i*c*t*u*sposted 7 years ago

    awesome poem, wesley! Line for line drives much intensity and depth. You are quite the poet! smile

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Well, thank you Invictus, it is the third one I have ever written.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 7 years ago

    oh i do really really love it, i can't believe it as you thought you could not write poetry.....  well now you know you can..... you seem to be a very sensitive feeling kind a guy but tough also, does that make sense.... so i am thinking your poetry is going to be among my favourites on here...... i just like your style....

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      You are very welcome, I am glad that it made you feel better and that you liked the poem.  I thought of hubbing it after some gentle prodding from frogdropping but I don't know.  Anyway, thanks for the virtual high five.

  6. AEvans profile image70
    AEvansposted 7 years ago

    That is great my perception is what you are feeling and experienced when you were sent overseas. That was wonderful! smile

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Um, actually not really.  It is how I feel right now after coming back.  If you remember I was going to attempt to win my wife over again before I went on leave.  This poem expresses some of those emotions and is clue to how it went.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 7 years ago

    I   AM    SO   PROUD   OF   YOU

  8. Robin Layne profile image79
    Robin Layneposted 7 years ago

    I liked that poem. I wondered if the image you were drawing was of a werewolf. And then I thought of the Incredible Hulk.

  9. Robin Layne profile image79
    Robin Layneposted 7 years ago

    I noticed someone new this was about experiences overseas. I take it you were in the military? I have a poem you might like to read that compares someone in the Vietnam war with myself during a period of depression and oversensitivity. If you like, I can post it here, or somewhere else and supply you the link.

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Whatever you want to do Robin.  All is fair in love and war right.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 7 years ago

    oh yeah absolutely hub it... go on google images and get some good pictures,,,,,,, you are a star

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      I think I will write a different one to hub.  One about lost love and such.

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        \Brenda Scullyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        o.k. as long as you keep writing, looking forward to your next hub.... i promise not to pester you this time.... just published a poem 5 minutes ago...

        1. wesleycox profile image82
          wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

          Oh, I will get over there as soon as I am off work.  I am actually working right now.  I'll be over in awhile.

  11. Jane@CM profile image60
    Jane@CMposted 7 years ago

    I think its a good poem!  I'll have to go check out your other ones, I love good poetry smile

    1. wesleycox profile image82
      wesleycoxposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Yes please do.  Thanks.

  12. Robin Layne profile image79
    Robin Layneposted 7 years ago

    Okay, I posted the poem. I can't believe it's impossible to paste anything in these forums! I had to retype the whole thing in. Here is the link, also retyped:
    http://hubpages.com/forum/topic/22646
    I'm going to add some other poems to that thread when I have time.

 
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