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I Felt It Die

  1. DomShadows profile image61
    DomShadowsposted 7 years ago

    My finger tips are numb from defeat

    There’s blood on everything,

    Watch me slowly as I fade

    Into something evil

    Maybe tomorrow, not on this day..

    Watch as the womb I will eat

    As something evil creeps Into the darkness  =-=

    It..Needed to be stopped..

    A disease that flows strong

    Not even a real man can top..

    Stand on our battleground

    Kneel and pray AS I smash You down..

    Sunlight in your hair,

    Cutting myself of all things that bind myself of you

    I heard you cry. And that’s why we felt it Die..

    I heard you scream So delicate, so desirable

    It wasn’t a dream

    I felt you cry on the inside that night,

    A certain kind of passion

    No other man will feel..

    Not even in the face of deceit..

    Will he ever see the real you

    I felt it die,This love inside

    Fades away..To a new place I could wish to find

    This haunting will linger This mourning, it will stay..

    I felt it die Again

    In the darkest of places

  2. TINA V profile image81
    TINA Vposted 7 years ago

    I suggest you can make this as your first hub under Poetry category.

    Welcome to hubpages!

    1. christalluna1124 profile image78
      christalluna1124posted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Beautiful and deep. I look forward to your next posting. I love poetry and yours was really touching.
      Christal

    2. AEvans profile image72
      AEvansposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      I agree with all other hubbers beautiful, deep and make it your first hub. Welcome to HP:)

  3. KCC Big Country profile image83
    KCC Big Countryposted 7 years ago

    I agree with Tina.  You're "wasting" it the forums.  Post your poetry in a hub.  More people will be able to find it because of the categories, etc.

    I welcome you to HubPages too!

  4. Hmrjmr1 profile image79
    Hmrjmr1posted 7 years ago

    I too concur with KCC and Tina make some hubs you have a lot to let out and you're good at it.

  5. pioneer_writer5 profile image61
    pioneer_writer5posted 7 years ago

    your poem was captivating.

  6. Beth100 profile image85
    Beth100posted 7 years ago

    This really should be your first hub -- very powerful, drawing the reader in.  Welcome to the hubbing community!

  7. DomShadows profile image61
    DomShadowsposted 7 years ago

    Everyone thank you so very much. I appreciate your words and the info./help.


    Thanks,
    Dom

  8. donotfear profile image92
    donotfearposted 7 years ago

    I feel such depth and despair from this reading. You are a worthy human being deserving of love and health. May God bless you always, be with you and guide you in your journey!

    1. DomShadows profile image61
      DomShadowsposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Wow, thank you.

  9. XTASIS profile image61
    XTASISposted 7 years ago

    I like the words, and the way they're put.
    But I don't understand what you're talking about.
    I'd like to know.

    1. DomShadows profile image61
      DomShadowsposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Well, when I was growing up I had not alot of things I felt no love. I grew, came to Arizona and I met a women with a lil' son that took me for granted and took it all away. You ever felt so great about something than it was ripped from you?

      1. tantrum profile image60
        tantrumposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        thanks for explaining.
        the poem is beautiful!
        I'm Xtasis  as well . smile

        1. DomShadows profile image61
          DomShadowsposted 7 years ago in reply to this

          It's really nice to know you have multiple Personality Disorder. NOW, that is cool..smile

          1. tantrum profile image60
            tantrumposted 7 years ago in reply to this

            lol

  10. eyeofh profile image59
    eyeofhposted 7 years ago

    Great Poem!

  11. BEAUTYBABE profile image85
    BEAUTYBABEposted 7 years ago

    Hi Dom, Welcome to Hubpages.
    I read your poem and could feel and see in your words how you    would have felt being let down so badly that it took everything away from you. I felt your pain and despair. You are a gifted poet. I have written some poetry myself, nothing terrific, as I am not a writer but a singer. I too have had despair in my life and I know how it feels to be let down so badly that you feel your life if over, but you soon realise that it is not the end of the world, pick yourself back up and get on with life again. I think this is a good start for you on Hubpages. I would be pleased for your opinion on my attempt at lyrical poetry. I look forward to seeing more of your poems. God Bless BB

    1. DomShadows profile image61
      DomShadowsposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Thank you so much for those kind words and I'm going now to see.. If I never responded to this before I apologies.  Wow, those words made me feel better. I mean I moved on, but how far can you move on from love?

  12. prettydarkhorse profile image64
    prettydarkhorseposted 7 years ago

    beautiful poetry,,,

    1. DomShadows profile image61
      DomShadowsposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Thank you very much.

  13. profile image61
    mistrunnerposted 7 years ago

    different dude but it touches truth continue on...

    1. DomShadows profile image61
      DomShadowsposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      What do you mean by different? THANKS thou but what do you mean?

 
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