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Can anyone think of a title for this?

  1. DogSiDaed profile image60
    DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago

    I left the tunnel for the light,

    Forever it seemed our lives in darkness dwelled,

    You pushed on for the greatest heights,

    I was confined by stone.


    Throughout our blissful ignorance we swayed,

    The colours fading on our days,

    This life’s too small for us to say it all,

    And so we part without a word.


    Blinkered by each other’s shadows,

    We fought to hide each other from the world.

    Let falling stars not block our path,

    We chanted through our minds.


    (chorus)


    Forget the fallacious part we played!

    Two lovers fighting each other,

    We wielded our love against one another.

    I turned my cheek ten thousand times,

    You beat me down with gentle rhymes,

    The laughter and the flowing tides;

    The place where love and hate collides.







    Hi, I put this up for two reasons, one to maybe provide a small sample of what I do, but mostly for the purpose of deciding upon a title. All suggestions appreciated ^^

    1. aware profile image72
      awareposted 7 years ago in reply to this
  2. mega1 profile image80
    mega1posted 7 years ago

    "Turned my cheek ten thousand times"  sounds great to me.  Nice, very nice.  I like it.

  3. pay2cEM profile image88
    pay2cEMposted 7 years ago

    Where love and Hate Collide

    or

    Shadow Boxing

    1. profile image0
      Crazdwriterposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      I agree with pay...Where Love and Hate Collide would make a nice title for this one

    2. Google Gal profile image60
      Google Galposted 7 years ago in reply to this



      The first idea seems perfect to me, since it would wraps things up nicely and bring the entire poem together wonderfully ,

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    Poppa Bluesposted 7 years ago

    Rubicon Romance

  5. wrenfrost56 profile image82
    wrenfrost56posted 7 years ago

    Don't know about a title sorry, although the other suggestions are good. Great piece though. smile

  6. Daniel Carter profile image90
    Daniel Carterposted 7 years ago

    I love
    "Rubicon Romance" but I don't think that many people would get its meaning. However, that may be all the more reason to use it.

    I like "Where Love and Hate Collide" but it's a bit predictable, isn't it?

    Poppa's suggestion seems to be consistent, to me, with the kind of images you use.

    Great poem, btw.

    1. DogSiDaed profile image60
      DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      The only issue with that is I don't understand its meaning XD
      True, it is predictable, I'll leave the discussion open and think some more myself as well XD I'll decide tomorrow smile

      1. Daniel Carter profile image90
        Daniel Carterposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        I've heard the phrase but was unclear myself, so I looked it up. Rubicon basically means "point of no return." Here's the dictionary definition if it helps you decide:

        Rubicon is a 29 km long river in northern Italy. The river flows from the Apennine Mountains to the Adriatic Sea through the southern Emilia-Romagna region between the towns of Rimini and Cesena.

        "Crossing the Rubicon" is a popular idiom meaning to pass a point of no return. This phrase is often used by journalists in newspapers. It refers to Caesar's 49 BC crossing of the river, which was considered an act of war.

        Since the river has changed its course many times through the years, it is impossible to confirm exactly where the original Rubicon flowed when Julius Caesar crossed it.

  7. dyonder profile image80
    dyonderposted 7 years ago

    Dunno, tombs, duet, or screaming epitaph - maybe. Enjoyable to read, thanx 4 sharin.

  8. aware profile image72
    awareposted 7 years ago

    you and me equal we

  9. Haunty profile image82
    Hauntyposted 7 years ago

    I think, if you know what the poem is about, then you might want to think up a title that comes closest to describing that, instead of asking others. IMO

    1. DogSiDaed profile image60
      DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Yes perhaps, but regardless it's still interesting to see what it makes people think of, and there are a couple of good suggestions smile

      1. Haunty profile image82
        Hauntyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        I like the poems, as I said earlier. And it's interesting that we both think that Lyrics to a friend doesn't sound like a sufficient title for this.

        1. DogSiDaed profile image60
          DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

          Lyrics to a Friend isn't a title tongue They literally are lyrics I wrote for my friends band, although I don't think he's going to use them any more. No matter eh?

          1. Haunty profile image82
            Hauntyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

            Hey, do you ever explain your poetry? I'm very curious what stone means in 'I was confined by stone.'

            1. DogSiDaed profile image60
              DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

              I don't usually, for two reasons. One is that sometimes the true meaning could be quite specific to me, but mainly I like to leave poems open for people to take what they want from it; and interpret it how they wish. Although if you really wanted a breakdown I could probably explain it in a message smile

              1. Haunty profile image82
                Hauntyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

                If it's not very personal and you have the time I'd like to get that message. Then I could tell you what I make of it myself. smile

                Oh and btw, Janetta has just this to say about her poetry. I once nagged her to explain her poem 'Waves' too. big_smile

                1. DogSiDaed profile image60
                  DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

                  I sent a brief message to you on the first verse... Although it pained me hmm Imagine some loose tangled string. Those are my thoughts. To write the poem I tie the string in such a way that it can only be undone by cutting it. When I analyse parts of my poems, it's like cutting out one of the loops, and it goes back into my head as random mess... I hope you understand what I meant by that XD

                  1. Haunty profile image82
                    Hauntyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

                    I do. And you know there is always the option of sending me to Hell when I ask such a thing. wink Btw, I got your mail and was about to reply. I just came back to read the first verse once more before I do it.

  10. WriteAngled profile image91
    WriteAngledposted 7 years ago

    I wouldn't dare suggest a title, but just want to say I was bowled over by this poem. I hope you are a known name in the poetry world; you certainly deserve to be.

    1. DogSiDaed profile image60
      DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Thank you! smile I'm not a known name XD This is the first time I've shown anything on a broader scale than to a few select friends, just to see what people think, I'm glad you like it smile

  11. DogSiDaed profile image60
    DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago

    How about 'Mercurial Love'?

    Kinda appeals to me...

    1. Haunty profile image82
      Hauntyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Much closer than those suggested before  in my interpretation of the poem.

  12. bill yon profile image57
    bill yonposted 7 years ago

    Whisper

  13. Countess Batula profile image60
    Countess Batulaposted 7 years ago

    I am new to this forum not sure how to 'quote' yet but I thought I will reply my interpretation of this poem.

    It seems 2 lovers - one was happy and doing what they wanted - maybe successful, and the other one was not happy. While they still loved each other, they had too many differences so they parted ways. So if this was correct then I'd suggest a title which would describe "to love but to war" or "we love - but we are being pulled apart but other forces".

    I hope I don't sound dumb LOL n totally off track tongue

    1. DogSiDaed profile image60
      DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Thanks for taking the time to think about it, I really appreciate that smile

      Well, if that's what you get from it then it's what it means to you smile That's why I wrote it the way I did, everyone can take their own twist on it, perhaps personal meaning even. I like giving people the chance to imagine, rather than always being set strict boundaries to think to smile

      Thanks for the title suggestions by the way. I have now in fact settled for 'Mercurial Love' but thanks again for taking the time to try and help a fellow hubber out big_smile

      1. Countess Batula profile image60
        Countess Batulaposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        Testing to see if I can quote LOL - ok congrats on finding a title for your poem!

    2. DogSiDaed profile image60
      DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Oh and under the comment you are viewing there is a small button marked 'quote/reply'

      clicking that quotes that comment, then simply write yours underneath smile

  14. HubCrafter profile image69
    HubCrafterposted 7 years ago

    You might try "Heartsleeve Romance".

      The attraction of opposites leads to passion, romance and conflict.

    HubCrafter

  15. AEvans profile image68
    AEvansposted 7 years ago

    " Two Lovers" smile

  16. Ron Montgomery profile image61
    Ron Montgomeryposted 7 years ago

    "Man From Nantucket"

  17. DogSiDaed profile image60
    DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago

    Thanks very much to everyone for their suggestions, I have decided upon 'Mercurial Love' for the title, but all your suggestions are brilliant too and much appreciated! smile

    1. Haunty profile image82
      Hauntyposted 7 years ago in reply to this

      Mercurial Love is completely off. What made you think the poem was about mercurial love? wink

      1. DogSiDaed profile image60
        DogSiDaedposted 7 years ago in reply to this

        Hahaa, well it was actually a good friend of mine looking over my shoulder who suggested it. (Not that I should have been on here I should have been working) He just said it, kinda offhand, and I thought, yeah I like that! XD

  18. BEAUTYBABE profile image75
    BEAUTYBABEposted 7 years ago

    I thought you might like to think about these titles:
    "Parting of the ways"

    "Our Wounded Hearts" 

    ""Two Hearts in Jeopardy"

    I don't know whether you like these or not but they just came into my head. BB

  19. heart4theword profile image53
    heart4thewordposted 7 years ago

    a thought  "To Let Go, and Love!" 
    "To Let Go, in Love!"

    "It's Time To Live and Let Go!"

  20. Daniel Hicks profile image60
    Daniel Hicksposted 7 years ago

    I vote for Where Love and Hate Collide.

    Very nice job.

 
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