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FOR YOU ARE SHE

  1. you suggest one profile image60
    you suggest oneposted 6 years ago

    As the sun sets behind distant mountains
    And darkness descends upon the wilderness,
    Bounderies between man and nature become less clear.
    Then she appears
    Scattering visions of heavenly beauty
    Through the light of a full moon.

    As circles of moonlight surround her
    Highlighting the beauty of her very soul
    Swathed in shades of soft blue light
    Gently flowing through the twilight
    Over the very edge of life itself
    Softly howling so she can hear but never to fear.

    So gentle is the darkness
    Softly caressed by her beauty
    Soaring in the night sky so graceful and serene
    Gentle wings to carry her soul flowing through the night
    On the loving breeze of darkness,as only darkness
    Will ensure she returns safely to me.


    For this is she,the one I love
    She is with me now never more to leave
    Returned to me from the darkness of life from above
    Once taken given to the beauty of light causing me to grieve
    Darkness now caresses me once again
    With the love that once was mine
    Gently easing the pain of loneliness.

    As the darkness lifts and the warmth of her beauty
    Outshines the sun
    The meaning of life is once again mine to hold,
    Should I grasp it firmly with love
    Yet caress it with care
    For loving her is life itself to me
    Yet if I grsp it,this life I love,
    Shall I once again lose this beauty which is SHE.


        TONY MARTIN 3-4-1995
    (written on the birth of my grandaughter,the most beautiful
    creature I have ever seen)

    1. Chaotic Chica profile image82
      Chaotic Chicaposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    2. Mentalist acer profile image61
      Mentalist acerposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      A thoughtful and very meditave poem..

    3. northweststarr profile image79
      northweststarrposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Not my cup of tea, but you haven't done all that much revision on it yet, right?  It's always sweet to hear about people writing things for births, deaths etc.  I've written a few myself.  big_smile

      1. you suggest one profile image60
        you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        It would really be a shame if we all drank the same tea,at least you read it and it prvoked a reaction,unfortunately or fortunately for me I am not into revision I write what I write and then it is done.

      2. Rafini profile image86
        Rafiniposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        revision on a poem?  really?  lol  I guess I really need to get to college, I thought poems were written the way they were written. smile

    4. MyValentine profile image60
      MyValentineposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Beautiful, very beautiful and well written!

      1. you suggest one profile image60
        you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        thank you, I am sure I have a valentine that I wrote somewhere,maybe I will post that,glad you like it.

    5. NettaMart profile image62
      NettaMartposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Very beautiful.

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    JeanMeriamposted 6 years ago

    Absolutely beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing this. You should put it in a hub so it doesn't get lost in the forum.

    1. Art 4 Life profile image60
      Art 4 Lifeposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      OMG...what a wonderful tribute to the birth of your granddaughter....beautiful poem...I agree with JeanMeriam, put this in a hub, so it doesnt get lost in the forum....
      Thanks for sharing....you have such talent~

      1. you suggest one profile image60
        you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        your comments are extremely welcome you are too kind,look for the hub

    2. you suggest one profile image60
      you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Thank you for your very kind comments,look for the hub

  3. George J Hardy profile image77
    George J Hardyposted 6 years ago

    I liked the poem but thought you were referring to a lost or a love about to be lost.

    1. you suggest one profile image60
      you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      THANKS George, the poem  refers to who or whatever the reader wants it to for me the first thought was my grandaughter,then thoughts turned to the only woman I have ever loved,to me there is very little difference,whatever is written only the writer ever knows the true meaning,

      1. alternate poet profile image76
        alternate poetposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        Hi - just have to take issue with this - the writer only knows what they intended to mean, it means what the reader reads the words to say.  A lot of writing says more than the writer ever intended or knew they had written and many writers think they have said something which they have not.

        I have to agree with northwestar, you should revise a little.  There is a thin line between a deeply meaningful poem and a bunch of platitudes.  My feeling is that there is a good poem in there, but maybe half as long.

        1. you suggest one profile image60
          you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

          alternate poet ,your comments are warmly recieved,I agree whatever is written is interpreted differently by every reader,if it wasn't then what would be the point,I just do not revise, what I write is what I write,most of my thoughts probably coincide with yours,life,but we interpret them differently
          that is what makes it so worth living.keep up the good work,we may speak again.

  4. Ben Evans profile image74
    Ben Evansposted 6 years ago

    I like the use of the moon in poetry.  I think it is beautiful to describe and carries a lot of spirituality of both the past and the future.  Very nice Poem.

    Ben

    1. you suggest one profile image60
      you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Glad you like it Ben, such a strange sight the moon,never the same,creates many different feelings and holds many secrets never to be told.

  5. urbanbutterfly09 profile image60
    urbanbutterfly09posted 6 years ago

    I love this ...very nice!!

    1. you suggest one profile image60
      you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      so gratifying to know that my thoughts are appreciated,thank you.

  6. Gigi2 profile image60
    Gigi2posted 6 years ago

    This is beautiful. I am about to become a grandmother and this moved me beyond words. Thank you for your wonderful thoughts.

    1. you suggest one profile image60
      you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Gigi2,it is so gratifying to know that people read the thoughts that we put to paper,if only one of those readers enjoys what is written then it is all worthwhile,I sincerely hope you enjoy your grandchild,they bring such joy and heartache and I am sure you will treasure every moment.  LIFE IS NOTHING WITHOUT THE ESSENCE OF LOVE.

  7. susanlang profile image60
    susanlangposted 6 years ago

    What a warm and beautiful poem!

    1. you suggest one profile image60
      you suggest oneposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      thank you susanlang for your appreciation,warms the heart in these troubled times to know we can make others smile.

 
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