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A Verse On Life

  1. jessica.hendy profile image57
    jessica.hendyposted 6 years ago

    email me at jess_ak@hotmail.com


             The 19th century Victorian dancers

                   Dances and in their hands
                    They're clutching roses.
                          She dances,
                      And he suddenly says
                  Buda bu ba in my bed today?
               Pretending what she heard him say
           Holds up their roses and tickles their noses.
                   Dressed in Partied fancies

           Belly chuckling and wide smiling faces as if
           There were gum; stuck in-between their teeth.
          Gently, casual eyes softly shy off every other.
          And nicely they pass each others hands to hands.
                  Bows down, curtsies so politely.


    Hello, goodbye.
    Hello, goodbye.

    Impolitely slaps his hands.
    Clasped them together for looking; cheeky,
    Cheeky
    Cheeky.


    xx

    1. A la carte profile image60
      A la carteposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      em...this sucks

      1. WryLilt profile image87
        WryLiltposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        Care to elaborate?

        It's certainly a different style of poetry...

        I would say that Jessica needs to work on her rhythm as well as her grammar.

        Some parts shine while others are mired in bad punctuation and incorrect use of words.

        1. A la carte profile image60
          A la carteposted 6 years ago in reply to this

          include bad grammer...shine well ok maybe I was a bit harsh..I liked this
          Gently, casual eyes softly shy off every other.
                And nicely they pass each others hands to hands.


          but
            Buda bu ba in my bed today?
          sheesh.

 
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