TELL ME HOW IS IT? just some bubbling thoughts from inside of me

  1. prateek rustagi profile image60
    prateek rustagiposted 5 years ago

    The True I

    The feeling inside me...
    it says tons about its ambitions...
    but being moulded into submission....
    it powers off every imaginative thought...

    versatile and adept, each moment....
    it drudges with the waste of it...
    sampling nuance by nuance...
    it wants to burst into creativity...
    It will...one day.....
    if i'll remove the diplomay cloak....
    and think what i should.....
    think what deserves the contemplation...
    without any apprehension for the tyrants...

    That day..i'll realise my self worth .....
    and perhaps make myself count...
    or else....time would suppress this feeling...
    and i'll be none other than a vague part.....
    of the hoi-polloi.

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    Poetic Foolposted 5 years ago

    It's a nice piece about the struggle between individuality and conformity, creative expression and oppression from outside. I liked it. It sounds like it came from the heart.  May I suggest that you make this into a hub?  That would be a better place to get the feedback you are looking for.  Good luck with it!

  3. MysticPrince profile image83
    MysticPrinceposted 5 years ago

    That's what i call a good piece....well i like it...wink
    The voice of a Rebel...A rebel Heart...a creative Heart, but with those bits of optimism...the voice of the Heart shall prevail...

 
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