got rained on first


Bagged drugs littered the ground,

and the dealer was laying face down,

on a basketball court

at the housing project,

everything came to a halt,

his torso covering the loaded

9MM Colt,

he never had a chance to use it,

it was a gang hit,

the gun was cocked,

with a live round in the chamber,

his drug world was rocked,

someone was looking for him,

and he was looking for someone,

what’s done is done,

he couldn’t fight back or run,

it was a killing thirst,

but the drug dealer

got rained on first.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Great sad poem.

Happy New Year to you my friend.


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Ha hA he is toast, probably made the most of his time . No way !

Love when you put it together that way because it's a reminder that you will reap what you sow.

Another thriller brethren Frank.

Great poem with your twist.

Bless.


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justateacher 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Great poem...just had some gang violence in our neighborhood and it, too, was all because of drugs...


Poetic Fool 4 years ago

Frank, another awesome, gritty write. If you live by the sword, you die by the sword ...


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

I agree--gritty write--I love that about this piece!


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

you'll reap what you sow...if you have lived your life at gun point then you'll also die from it...this is a very wonderful poem Frank that people need to reflect upon...


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Mr. Frank another great poem... sad but great..always love you writing.

I voted up and awesome

Happy wonderful and safe New year...

Debbie


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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Well.. not going to hit a moral comment on how much the drug dealer deserved this sticky end, but the way you write it surely depicts the scene as if I am standing right there, watching his body that lies in a pool pf blood.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Happy New Years to all you guys.. thanks for reading Writer20, Sky, Justateacher, Ms Brooks, Senoritaa, Audrey, and Racinawa.. Poetic Fool ..bless you all!


time2rite 4 years ago

Wow, Frank, you've done it again: took a story and turned it into a great poem; awesome! It's raw and gritty...I really like it!


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

It is a sad reality that many young people do drugs and they fall into crime.

Happy New Year my friend


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epigramman 4 years ago

...always love your writing Frank - it inspires the epi-man greatly and I often come away from here wanting to write one of my own because of you - got rained on first is a great title and I first heard the expression in a song 'Small change got 'rained on' by his own '38' by one of my favorite songwriters Tom Waits. A big influence on my writing and another great one too - Warren Zevon.

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much time to write:) always good to see you.. and VG thank you for the continued visits you are one of the tops.. and Epi man.. when it comes to great work look at your own.. :) it is you that inspire..:)


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sofs 4 years ago

Grim tale skillfully told. Great narrative poetry here Frank.. now I want to write some too :) Have a wonderful day :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL thanks so much sofs :) as we use to say in the projects.. get your grim on LOL


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Someone was going to die this day. Sad though. Great write Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Sue that means a lot coming from you.. hey.. is that a Haiku?


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank

"it was a killing thirst,

but the drug dealer

got rained on first."

I wonder how many deaths he was responsible for. Payback time.

Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Evening Sue and thank you for stopping by the projects :)


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Up, awesome, and interesting votes. Great poetry. Very dramatic. Sadly, I am sure this happens a lot. Perfect title pick Frank. Another awesome poem.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

Good to see you again thelyricwriter glad you stopped by

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