long time ago i died

long time ago i died

Its a long time ago i died, with my eyes open wide,

depicting the matter that i have lost my pride.

now the wounds on the surface of the skin can't be hide,

its a long time ago i died.

dreams were washed away with a sudden tide,

i couldn't run for i had no place to hide.

with almost all the energy exhausted but still on ride,

it was a long time ago i died.

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chanroth 5 years ago from California, USA

This is really sad...very sad...I enjoy your hub! :)


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Matthew Weese 5 years ago from Auburn

It is ok....Needs a little fluffin but has the potential to be a great piece.


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thank chanroth for reading my hub,i am glad that you liked it..


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thanks Matthew Weese for reading my hub..i appreciate your comment..


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thanks matthew weese,i respect your comment i will try to bring about changes to make my hub more interesting..


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Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

Hi prashant, a very powerful yet sad poem, I enjoyed reading and thanks for sharing.


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thanks movie master,i was graced by your visit..


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Dim Flaxenwick 5 years ago from Great Britain

I´ve rated this hub up and beautiful. I think the concept of what you´ve written is brilliant.

You have the makings of a very good poet.


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thanks Dim Flaxenwick for dropping by,thanks for commenting.


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blondey 5 years ago

Wow! nice read...


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ubanichijioke 5 years ago from Lagos

A great poem from prashant. I can feel the mood. So sad. I hope you find a place for your dreams here on HP. Great piece


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thanks ubanichijioke for dropping by ,i am glad that you felt the mood.


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emichael 5 years ago from New Orleans

Interesting one, prashant. Short but very effective. Well done. Voted up, interesting, and beautiful.


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prashant angiras 5 years ago from shimla(india) Author

thanks Emichael for dropping by,it is such a pleasure that you liked the poem.


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

This poem definitly stirred a few heartstrings of mine.

I vote up without a doubt. You are indeed a very talented poet.

Take care

Eiddwen.

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