only debris hit the ground

First,

there was an exploding sound,

everyone looked around,

then the plane was going down,

the captain heard

his co-pilot utter a curse word,

but before he could take another breath,

and prepare himself for death,

the plane exploded in a cataclysm of light and sound,

and moments later,

only debris hit the ground.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I always think of this happening when I fly. I try not to but it always creeps into my mind.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

same here Susan.. thanks for reading :)


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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Neat! You expressed it perfectly in a few words. The image reminds me of the TV series "Lost"


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shimmering Dawn 4 years ago

This is awesome.. you used such few words to fill my mind with so much drama and action. Great work. Be a blessing. Shalom!


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

I knew that you will prevail and create your own style of Haiku. I tell you what the reality of a plane crash would definitely help one, keep his head on the ground.

Love this style.

Now I need to know whether you had a Dream!

Up and fly away with yhis beauty.

Bless.


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Fullerman5000 4 years ago from Louisiana, USA

Such a powerful poem with just a few words. Great work. I really enjoyed this. Keep up the good writing.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you for reading Senoritaa.. and thanks for coming back to another one of my writes Shimmering dawn.. Sky I keep my feet on the ground my friend thanks for your comment and welcome fullerman5000 for sharing your comment bless you all :) Frank


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Descriptions so real that I saw the plane crash just before me.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much VG for stopping by :)


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

This is a great one Frank. Voted up and awesome my friend, Joyce


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

This was fabulously written! Unfortunately, great visual. It just reinforces my fear of flying....(which I'm constantly working on.) Oh, well :-)


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

Up, awesome, and interesting. Wow Frank, powerful poetry. It makes your heart jump for sure. Best wishes.


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Oh my frank...great poem...but so sad because it happens all the time..voted up...have a great evening...debbie


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

This is such a scary moment for all people traveling.

But, i think it was good that the pilot did not get to announce to the passengers. Fright would have caused more havoc amongst them all...in other words...not knowing that I am going to die is easier to accept death than knowing.

btw...just a week back one of the flights of British Airways, accidentally turned on the recording stating that the flight is going to crash...lol

later on the crew apologized for the accident and handed out apology letters :))


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poetvix 4 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

This is why I'm afraid of flying! Well, that and the pit bull body searches they do now...what fun. I'm impressed at how you conveyed such with so few words. Rock on!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Writer20

and Cyndi10 and thelyricwriter..plus the beautiful Our Ms Brooks.. thank you Ruchira.. and you Poetvix you thank you all for reading my debris..bless you Frank


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CrazyGata 4 years ago from Puerto Rico

My former husband is an Air Traffic Controller. He tells me that he rather take a boat than a plane. Whenever he flies, is because he has no other choice.

He says this is because he knows what goes on while the plane is on the air. Pilots mostly focus on take-offs and landings... in the meantime is the ATC or the auto-pilot doing the flying.

He once showed me a map of the routes they have to memorize... I could go on.

So yes, nice poem, I certainly saw it as a movie in my head. Voted up and if there was a scary button I'd press it.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for sharing your little bit of bio Cat.. and thank you for reading my debris bless you :)


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

whew...the image leaves an imprint in my mind...you have a way of creating vivid images in your readers' mind Frank...


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Denise Handlon 4 years ago from North Carolina

Wow Frank-this was quite a statement here! Powerful images in a few short lines. And, who of us have not thought of those final thoughts in that final, 'exploding', moments of our lives-be it plane or other...

Thanks for sharing-voted up and awesome.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

First,...and last. Another cementing of your power to tell a story in a poem Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Raci for commenting on my Debris.. and you too Denise Handlon and of course who can forget the wagon master Alastar Packer thanks for reading bless you all :)


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank,

This one has great impact. I think most people are a little aprehensive when they fly.

I had a dream a few years ago. I was at work and looking out the window when I saw a plane explode and vanish into thin air.

Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

wow bad dream..but Sue thanks for reading my debris :)


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duffsmom 4 years ago from Pacific Northwest, USA

Powerful as I have come to expect from you. I have never flown--this is among the reasons why! That, and I am a coward! LOL


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for the comment duffsmom LOL :) Frank


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

Wow... it reminds me of that space shuttle that came apart when it tried to return to earth.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Oh yeah nice Phoebs :) thanks for stopping by


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Express10 4 years ago from East Coast

I enjoyed this poem but vow to not think of it when I fly.


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Frank Atanacio 7 months ago from Shelton Author

Express10 flying is still the safest way to travel :)


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Harishprasad 7 months ago from India

Frank, so bold and straight ! A simple stark truth dazzles too hard, but it's life and its turns.


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Frank Atanacio 7 months ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Harish :)


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CrisSp 7 months ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

You know, I am an emergency specialist at 37 thousand feet right? But, even if I am, it'll be hard for me to stop this from happening, even if your script is only a metaphor.

Awesome write.


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Frank Atanacio 7 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you for sharing CrisSp.. :)

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