Poem - Dancing Leaves

Dancing Leaves



dancing leaves in a grand waltz wind

little vortices of symmetry

sway my way

as I escape the mundane world

along an October path of yellows and browns

I am lost in the hypnotic swirl of colour

the green of the leaf sacrificed

to the march of autumn gold


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I am getting the too short message with this poem, jeez it's a short poem folks..


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Paul Edmondson 10 years ago from Burlingame, CA

Beautiful and Well said.


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Drax 10 years ago from NYC.... Author

...now would be good time to talk Official.. grin...

Drax


Olivia 9 years ago

Beautiful picture and really nice!


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Drax 9 years ago from NYC.... Author

thank you Olivia...


TiffanyK 8 years ago

That was so buituful and i am writeing a poem to hope you like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Fall Leaves Fall Flowers away

Do you think you could help me with the rest? Please help cell phone 7123108073


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Drax 8 years ago from NYC.... Author

Hey Tiffany thanks, I have very poor connectivity right now but when I'm back in civilisation I will...

Thanks again Drax


EYES CHAMbERS 7 years ago

Love love love the last two lines. Very nice. I liked it. Sometimes short and simple can be so much more enjoyable.


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Drax 7 years ago from NYC.... Author

thanks very much Eyes... I like short poems to try and capture events that are self contained and anyone reading it can just get it without having to spend half a day wondering what was it about... Drax...


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broteem 6 years ago from KHARAGOUR

Beautifully composed.

I, too, love to get lost 'in the hypnotic swirl of colour'

when the green of the leaf is sacrificed to the march of autumn gold.

Congrats!


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Drax 6 years ago from NYC.... Author

Hi Broteem, thanks very much for the nice comment.. :-)


Vicki 6 years ago

Hi Drax :)

love your poems, they really do talk to you.

well done, fan dabby dozey work ;)


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Drax 6 years ago from NYC.... Author

Hi Vicki

thanks very much lovely of you to say... :-)


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sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

Great imagery and gun-toting women. What's not to like?

Green sacrificed for gold on a white altar cloth -sounds like a nice design for a flag to me. Cheers.


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Drax 6 years ago from NYC.... Author

sligobay... that design did not work so well, better to have went with the Starry Plough..


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lafamillia 5 years ago from Soutcentral Europe

Beautifully, vote up and keep it writing like this. You surely have it.


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Drax 5 years ago from NYC.... Author

Hi lafamillia... thank you, it is kind of you to say so... and it is great to receive a positive comment such as this... :-)


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ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

Awesome poem. I am not sure I understand the picture even though the pic is definitely provocative. Also, I can relate to the "too short" message, but a poem has a life-the ultimate goal is to say a lot in as few a words as possible-and yet one does seem to get the HP warning if the piece does not meet the HP word count rule-which I am still trying to decipher. Voted UP!


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Drax 3 years ago from NYC.... Author

@ocfireflies... thanks for vote up.. the photo - if you watch leaves blowing in the wind inevitably gravity brings them back to the ground so they tend to swirl and twirl down low... this photo made me think of leaves as almost an enemy invading, hence the 'reception committee' :-)

..this is from 6 years ago and now HB tends more towards complete articles that have a particular word count, this is the evolution of the medium and I guess poetry perhaps needs special consideration..

Thanks Drax


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ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

Now I get it. Very cool. Are you aware of any other sites where poetry is still loved?


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Drax 3 years ago from NYC.... Author

@ocfireflies... I think over the longer term it is good to build awareness of a site that the writer owns since social networks can be used to generate direct traffic and interest, poetry is loved everywhere :-)

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