red breasted: poem

RED BREASTED: A POEM

by Justin W. Price


Jerky movements,

the head of a robin,
as it bounces on
insecure legs
towards
the dropped bread crumbs.

With yellow beak
it hunts and pecks—

freeloading for survival—

forsaking its wings.




all rights reserved. copyright Justin W Price 2011



Red Breasted: Explained

The older I get, the more I notice nature and, specifically birds. I have also always found it somewhat amusing that a bird gifted with flight would choose to forage on the ground for sustenance. The awkward legs and the vulnerability to predators (like a cat, for example. My mom's cat has left her plenty of gifts on her porch, birds, or at least parts of them) makes me winder they wouldn't fly above the clouds all day long.

After a long period of not writing, I took a poetry class at my local community college. This was one of the first poems I wrote and I wrote it at the same time as one of my other short observational poems, The Mouth. I was sitting, eating a taco and I saw this robin outside pecking at the ground, foraging for discarded food fragments and the words just flowed.

In spite of its brevity, I have always liked this poem. It is featured in my debut poetry collection, published by Sweatshoppe Publications, and available using the Amazon link included in this thread. Thank you for reading and I hope that you enjoyed this piece.

Do you like this poem?

Then check out my poetry book,Digging to China, released by Sweatshoppe Publications. This poem is in it, along with fifty others. Signed copies are available through Sweatshoppe Publications. It's also available on Barnes and Noble and Amazon.com.

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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks for the kind words, Rahul!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much Susan!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thansk fennel. Vulnerable indeed. But, such is nature


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Dinkan for the kind words!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Audra. I certainly did. I still remember where I was when I watched the robin and composed this poem.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Susan, the older I get, the more I enjoy watching birds.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Cyndi. I appreciate your readership


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Till, it's certainly not a freeloader, but sarcasm doesn't come out well when I'm not reading it :-)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks a lot Michael. I've always enjoyed this one.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Ardie, the best time of year is right when summer is ending and that first crisp of fall is hitting the air, but I see your point :-)


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

nice pic! and beautifully described!


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi PDX

Love the imagery. Beautiful

Voted up and away

Take Care :)


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Fennelseed 4 years ago from Australia

Lovely poetry, PDX, I love the way you have painted a picture of the robin:

"as it bounces on

insecure legs"

fagile and so vulnerable on the ground, but having to survive.

My votes to you!


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dinkan53 4 years ago from India

Beautiful words. Yes each and every one in this universe is fighting for their survival. Like the Robin too.


iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

I like how you used mindfulness to create this poem! You really observed the Robin in detail! Very wonderful poem! Voted up as high as I could!


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

This morning I was out in my back yard and saw red breasted robins, cardinals and blue jays. I love to watch all the birds.

Enjoyed your poem!


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

This was such a nice poem. I read it a couple of times. I don't feel sorry for the robin; it's just being a robin. Enjoyed.


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

You've captured the robin in just a few lines. I'm not sure the robin is a freeloader per se, but he does eat what he can. Very nicely done as always! Voted up and awesome.


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CloudExplorer 4 years ago from New York City

Outstanding PDX, wow a great deal of potent impact in meaning in your poem here, and not to many words. Not sure how you pulled it off, but you done an outstanding job here. Nice!


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Ardie 4 years ago from Neverland

This makes me think of spring, the best time of year!! :)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Rolly... it certainly is


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Rolly A Chabot 4 years ago from Alberta Canada

Wonderful and it tis the season again...

Rolly


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Kimmie! I appreciate that!


Sunnie Day 4 years ago

Very Nice..I love the robin..so creative :)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, Linda. I've been seeing lots of robins lately. spring must be around the corner


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Sunshine625 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

I love birds. They have the life. Come and go as they please. Fly here, there and everywhere.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

TR, I dunno but it's been up for a long time and I've seen many shorter poems. I'm okay with it. Thanks for liking this!


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Trsmd 4 years ago from India

I wonder such a small poem is allowed here...no limit on words..but nice poem you have posted..thanks for SHARING:)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Jami, indeed, but, I was watching a robin when I wrote this poem.

Thanks Chris!


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chrisam01 5 years ago from Los Angeles, California, USA

Nice little poem! A bittersweet sentiment.


jami l. pereira 5 years ago

Very sad , but not only the robin pillages , most all birds do , the robin was just chosen as the focal point , i voted this up ,awesome, beautiful and interesting ..as it is :) Have a great evening PDX!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

How did I never respond to this? Thanks for replying to this. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate your comment!


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No_Clue 5 years ago

It strikes me as sad that a robin forsakes its wings, and walks on insecure legs, freeloading for survival. This created a vivid image, and evoked pity...I love poetry that does that.

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