Revenge, Inc. Part 14: A Short Story

Author's Note

Hello, everyone and welcome back. Yes, yes, I know I'm late and am kowtowing before you as I'm writing this.  For anyone of you who read Revenge, Inc. Part 13 within the first two days of it's initial publication, you'll find now that a few lines have been added to the last scene titled, "A Hero Falls" in which Master Akira Watanabe loses his life. Here's what you missed:

"In your training, you have been forged in the fire of anger and once you have taken form you were cooled by the water of wisdom. You are reborn. You are Cody-san no more...You are now Marak."

After rushing to finish this installment as fast and as best I could, I left this part out by accident. It was only when I was editing it again the following Monday that I realized what I was missing. Indeed, this is very important to the entire scope of the story (otherwise I wouldn't be making such a big deal out of it). There is something in a name, in a word, that transcends the story entirely--at least that's what I believe. Thank you for coming back and as always, I thank you for your loyal readership.

-ODP

Of course, if this is your first time here and are new to this series, I urge you to take the time now to play catch-up, starting with Part One of Revenge, Inc. Please click on the link below to get started.

Revenge, Inc. Part 1

Revenge, Inc. Part 2

Revenge, Inc. Part 3

Revenge, Inc. Part 4

Revenge, Inc. Part 5

Revenge, Inc. Part 6

Revenge, Inc. Part 7

Revenge, Inc. Part 8

Revenge, Inc. Part 9

Revenge, Inc. Part 10

Revenge, Inc. Part 11

Revenge, Inc. Part 12

Revenge, Inc. Part 13

Ashes

I was barely able to get out from underneath the path of the falling beam that was engulfed in flame and just as I made out of the house I spent the better part of the last two years, the roof came crashing down in a fury. There buried inside was the remnants of hundreds of years of Watanabe Clan history—artifacts, such as vintage katanas, scrolls, photographs, and works of priceless art that would be burnt to a crisp. So many years steeped in tradition was torn asunder in a single moonless night. To call it simply a stilted house was wrong on many levels, because in reality, it was a museum somewhere in the South Pacific. The WatanabeMuseum would have been a much more fitting name for the place. I knew the place blindfolded and that is no exaggeration. However unfortunate, it could not be saved and for me to have left Master Akira inside was unthinkable, not to mention disrespectful to the man who taught and trained me to become the “perfect weapon” to harness my rage. Although it was against his wishes, I brought him with me anyway. He deserved a proper farewell and I was sure that Natsumi and Katsuro would’ve agreed. He was much lighter than I expected. There was no way in hell I was going to leave him behind to be reduced to mere cinders like a tarnished memory. I made it to the storage shed amidst a volley of arrows aimed straight at me. When I was inside, I placed him on the floor and said a prayer and left the same way I came in. There was no time to mourn.

Interrogation

In the distance, I saw Katsuro kicking one of the Odas along the shore of the beach. He was apparently beaten and unarmed. His body seemed to roll just a little bit each time with each kick. It seemed the melee had died down and there, approaching the two was Natsumi. She looked over at me and gave me the slightest of smiles. I could almost hear her say to me,”Yes, I’m happy that you’re alive as well.” Words could not express my relief when seeing her again.

“I tell you nothing, Watanabe!” The bastard spat the name Watanabe as if it were a curse word. I wanted so much to snap his neck right then and there due to the tone of his voice. He gave Katsuro a sneer and so received a vicious backhand as payment. Our captor then spat blood and looked up at Katsuro. “Give me katana so I can die with honor!”

“There is no honor in your clan!” Katsuro said. After contemplating on what to do next, he then drew his katana and rushed towards his captive.

“Katsuro, no!” Natsumi yelled. “We need him alive!” At this point, I really thought our kneeling captor’s head was about to roll on the ground, but instead, Katsuro went over to him and cut away his cloak, down and away to reveal an intricate tattoo depicting the Four Demons of Legend. In the story, the Demons of Kimon ruled the Underworld and was jealous of their “neighbors” above them that paraded around in happiness and prosperity of the known world. But what was thought of to be fictitious was very much real as there certainly are monsters in this world. They only look human to the rest of us. They thought to bring about destruction and corruption to the world in a ploy to eradicate the entire human race. The colors were vibrant and seemed to almost move on their own in a rippling motion. Master Akira only briefly told me about such tattoos. Were it not for the situation at hand, I would have commented that the said tattoo was a masterful work of art, as it must have taken weeks to complete.

“Just as I figured,” Katsuro said.

“You’ll never find them,” our captive assured him. “They are hidden within and have no shadow!”

“We shall see.” I could see that Katsuro was calm and was already planning a strategy while pacing back and forth.

“Now give me a katana so I can silence myself once and for all.”

“Oh, forget it. You’re not going to get anything out of him, Katsuro,” Naomi said. “We are wasting valuable time.”

After a moment’s hesitation, Katsuro looked over to Natsumi and gave her a nod, in which she did so reluctantly. With my hands on both my sheath and scabbard, I was ready to strike while standing directly behind him. I half-expected him to rise up and begin hacking away at us without warning. But instead, he unsheathed the weapon diagonally and for a moment held it that way while saying something under his breath that I didn’t quite understand. When he was finished, he then twisted the katana in his hand and turned it against himself and with one quick thrust, he impaled himself completely. From where I stood, I saw the tip of Natsumi’s katana pop out of his back and through the mouth of one of the Four Demons of Legend. He then keeled over and remained motionless.

Katsuro had a satisfied look on his face and so walked on over and took back from the captor’s body Natsumi’s katana. It made a sick wet sound when doing so as Katsuro placed his foot atop the his head for leverage. After wiping the blood off of Natsumi’s katana on his leg, Katsuro stood still for a moment in thought. He kicked the lifeless body over so his back was facing upwards and began making a rectangular incision. Natsumi was horrified.

“Katsuro! What on earth are you doing?” She yelled aloud. Katsuro gave her a shit-eating grin.

“I’m taking a souvenir, Natsumi,” he said, “if that’s all right with you.” He then went back to his cutting

The Remains of the Day

I watched as the six Oda Clan members retreated back onto their boats. They had apparently seen enough and thought better it best that they left us alone as making such a crucial decision may help them live perhaps, a little longer. When first I saw them I began chasing after them, but Natsumi stopped me.

“Let them go, Cody,” Natsumi said. “There’s already been too much suffering. We won and they know it.”

“I wouldn’t necessarily call this a mortal victory. Your father is gone and so is the house. Yes, we’re still alive, but at what price? There’s only the three of us now.”

“Tanaka is dead?” Godammit, I thought. She had no clue. I gave her a solemn look and saw that tears were rolling down her cheeks. Natsumi and Tanaka were cousins.

“It happened just an hour ago. He lost too much blood…I’m sorry.” A part of me wanted to hold her close to me but I knew that just behind me, Katsuro was watching and Katsuro could not see us that way. Already, Katsuro was busy piling up the bodies for burning. There was a separation: One very large pile consisting of Odas and the one small row of that of the Watanabe Clan who fought valiantly. They could not have sacrificed more.  In the case of the Odas that remained on Jirai, throwing them out to the sea would only bring them back to shore. There was no other way.

“I’d better help Katsuro,” I said. It was more of an excuse than anything.

A Formal Farewell

By the time we had all the bodies gathered and torched, it was already dawn. The God-awful smell of dozens of bodies being burned was not pleasant. The smoke rose to the sky that I’m sure could’ve been seen for miles. Soon enough, the current of air would carry away not only the stink of the Odas, but the mere evidence of their ambush, not to mention the destruction of the House of Watanabe and their obvious losses.

It was the three of us that stood by as we watched as our Master was reduced to ashes. The each of them—Natsumi and Katsuro—gave a farewell speech to the only father and master they ever known. I too gave my own when it was my turn as the two consoled one another while inside each other’s embrace.

“You have taught me what no other man has ever taught me, not even my own father. When meeting you, I disliked you very much, because I feared you. But then something happened. Something had changed, as I learned more and more from you and felt in you the compassion in which is contagious. And in doing so, you became my friend. In your training and in your teaching, you made me a stronger person that now knows not only to fight in any situation, but more importantly, to heal others. It is your words and your wisdom that I carry with me now and forever. Your light will always burn inside my heart. Your memory lives on, my master. Farewell.” I then placed a single white Lotus from which I found was the only one of its kind and so left it as tribute. There were no more bodies to burn.

When I stood up, both Natsumi and Katsuro were walking away and were headed to where the rafts that were beached near the shore. I pick myself up and rushed over to help them.

“Where are you going?” I asked them.

“To the mainland to pay the Oda Clan a visit,” Katsuro said. “This is far from over.” I looked at Natsumi and she was unresponsive. The three of us then dragged the rafts to the shore and when the water splashed up over my feet and up to my waist, the thought struck home: I'm leaving this place. I looked back to the place I called home and suddenly my heart became heavy. I was finally leaving Jirai Island.

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Comments 47 comments

Keira7 6 years ago

Good evening my dear Dohn, I just arrived home and I was happy to see part 14. I have read again part 13 just to make sure that I didn`t miss anything. My God Dohn, I love it more and more. Thank you for all the good effort. I know you enjoyed the writing. But even if you late, its not a problem. Thanks again. Bless you bro.:)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you for being the first to comment, Keira! I just finished this installment not too long ago. I was afraid that this might not be that good, however necessary it was. I worry about how people will receive this one, but that's just me. It's great to hear that coming from you. Thanks so much my friend.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Oh Dohn, this is beautiful, I can almost feel the intensity and the unfolding emotions and the farewell speech and the words of Marak, (good name). I really can feel the emotions in his heart, and most of all the lessons you have learnt from Master Akira will forever be Maraks. The things he had learned from the Watanabe clan plus his learnings will be treasured, I wonder when he is going back again in Jirai,(to see Natsumi --hehe) for the meantime I am waiting for the next one one,

Thank you so much Dohn, Maita


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Pamela99 6 years ago from United States

dohn, You are such a gifted writer. The descriptions of the burning bodies, the stench and all the emotions are so alive when you're reading them. I am wondering what is next also. Thanks for an exciting story.


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India

Loved that speech, Dohn. Waiting for the next installment!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@prettydarkhorse-Thanks so much for that comment. I must admit, I struggled with this one and got a bit antsy about how it would be received. I thought it important that Cody/Marak say a final farewell to his Master before going forward and so I found my Part 14! Yes, there is a very strong bond between the two. I don't want to reveal to much, so I'll stop! As always, I'm writing this for all you guys. It means so much to hear such great comments.

@Pamela99-Thank you, Pamela! I thought it dishonorable for the trio to just up and leave with all of these dead ninjas lying around, lol. I had to do something. And yes, the smell would be pretty gruesome. Thanks again!

@Shalini Kagal-It's always wonderful to hear from you, Shalini. Thank you so much for the comment. See you again in Part 15?!


Useful Knowledge 6 years ago

I can't wait for the next installment. This one was good. I like how you are sticking this trhough. You are so talented. I could pictue Marak telling the Master good-bye. Great work Dohn!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, UK. I was a bit worried about this one for some reason. I did like writing it, I just wasn't sure what others thought. It means a lot to hear that from you, so thanks!


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Lady_E 6 years ago from London, UK

Thanks for another interesting episode. A pity so many died, but it's nice that Natsumi was around. I think it gives Cody a moral boost. I don't know how you manage to write these episodes so quickly. I admire that. Cheers.


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Kaie Arwen 6 years ago

“You have taught me what no other man has ever taught me, not even my own father. When meeting you, I disliked you very much, but then feared you. But then something happened. Something had changed, as I learned more and more from you and felt in you the compassion in which is contagious. And in doing so, you became my friend. In your training and in your teaching, you made me a stronger person that now knows not only to fight in any situation, but more importantly, to heal others. It is your words and your wisdom that I carry with me now and forever. Your light will always burn inside my heart. Your memory lives on, my master. Farewell.” I then placed a single white Lotus from which I found was the only one of its kind and so left it as tribute. There were no more bodies to burn.

I have finally finished reading this entire series :-) (well, until the next episode) and I need to tell you that this preceding piece of dialog might be the best of it all. Everyone should have someone like this in their lives....... the mentor, someone who shapes who you become simply because they exist .

A two year old feels compassion; they just have no concept of what the feeling is. It isn't defined....... it's instinct, but if a child fails to see this feeling in the people around him/her, they tend to bury it; it becomes unimportant, and one of the most important traits of humanity becomes lost. Your "teacher" had a gift, and his role in the story was fulfilled. I liked him.

Thank you for the great read!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@Lady_E-Thank you so much. I struggled somewhat with this installment as I have a plot in mind, only I'm not completely sure what I need to establish until I get there. All of this does take a great deal of thinking. Someone once told me that writing is critical thinking in motion. I live by those words! Thanks as always!

@Kaie Arwen-Wow! Thank you for reading the entire series thus far. I know for a fact that it's not easy to read long pieces online, as most of us are reluctant to do in cyberspace as we're conditioned to be drive-thru like. Hearing that you read this series is one of the best compliments I could receive, so for that, I thank you. I thought the farewell speech was a necessity and so put it in after much deliberation. In hindsight, I believe I made the right decision. I'm so happy that you liked it! I hope to hear from you again!


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Paradise7 6 years ago from Upstate New York

I''m looking forward to the ending. Now that you're off the island and your teacher has passed on to a better world, after sharing all he knew, and that you've found Natsumi and Katsuro alive, I think I know where you're headed.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks so much, Paradise7. One of the elements I strive for when writing is to strive to create a plot that I myself would not expect. Doing so makes it that more surprising. So with that said, it just might not be what you think :) See you next time!


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dave272727 6 years ago from Kentucky

The transformation of Cody into a warrior is getting more exciting with every installment! I could feel the emotion that he had at the farewell to the master. Great stuff man really great stuff.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

It's so good to hear that you liked it, Dave. I know how much of a fan you are of this series and so didn't want you or any one else down. More to come my friend!


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PegCole17 6 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Entertaining reading dohn121. The clarity and descriptiveness of your writing makes it like being there. Looking forward to reading more.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

hey Dohn, just maybe be sure to include the love awaiting and unfolding between Natsumi and Marak hehe,

Also, I just came by to let you know, I am not rooting for any team right now, but am always looked up to my old man FAVRE, lets see hehe, The Cowboys are in HEAT and, and did you watch the Cardinals and the Packers , thats a nice game, Enjoy, Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@PegCole17-Thanks, PegCole17. That's exactly what I aim for when writing my fictional pieces. That's really great to hear from readers. Until next time!

@prettydarkhorse-I did make a small mention of that in Part 13 but just might delve into it more :D You're not the only one to make such a request ;) Favre, eh? I'm going to go with the Jets, as they haven't won a Super Bowl in 40 years, lol. Here's to us!


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ehern33 6 years ago

Ok, wrong place to start reading this. I have got to stop and start from the beginning. You do have a gift. Hopefully I can catch up.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! I'm glad to have you aboard! If I did my job, I'll be hearing back from you soon! Thanks for stopping in!


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

hey Dohn, yeah I did read that though about Natsumi and Marak but in a little passing, at least its a beginning,

and He would like like to hug her because she is crying in this ch, too,

let us see JETS are ok too, hope they can win and pass, like Mark Sanchez too, Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

The Jets it is! Sanchez is fascinating to watch. I think that all of his success will only make him stronger. He's really developed into the Sanchize every Jet fan is raving about. Of course, the Giants are my team, come hell or high water. Thanks again Maita! May the best or HOTTEST NFL team win!


ralwus 6 years ago

Marvelous writing dohn. I feel almost sad now. You did a masterful job of pulling me into your story. Thanks my friend.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you very much, Charles! I'm just as pulled into this story as you are. It's really become a part of me now. I appreciate it as always, my friend.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Hey DOHN,

yes I always wonder now what will happen next after Marak will be back at his home too, and the unfolding stories to tell also between him and Katsuro. BTW I fail to mention that the picture here, the sea -- sunset is breathtaking...

and I agree with you, Sanchez is like Dwight Howard in basketball, great potential, plus HE is HOT HOT HOT...HOOH...Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! Sanchez is "not my type" but I guess I can see where you're going with that :) I did write a hub about the dude along with his better half Hilary Rhoda! Thanks for the compliment of the pic. I like it too and thought it perfect for this installment.

Dohn


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado

I enjoyed your words of action and the vivid scenes you set. I hope you are now looking for a book publisher because what you have written in these 14 parts is certainly worthy of it.


Am I dead, yet? 6 years ago

Now, I was saddened by the death of Master Akira. But then, not so sad that in knowing it may have been his time, and not deserving the form of brutal assassination that fell him. But at that moment, Cody grew into the person Master Akira knew that was inside him all along. Now he will "re-enter" the world--with new eyes and inspiration.

-sniff- Damn you Dohn--great read my friend.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@juneaukid-It would be a dream of mine to get this published. I really hope that it will happen, as this is a work that I'd be sure to buy. Thank you so much for saying so. It really means a lot for me to hear.

@AIDY-LOL. You know, I won't ever be able to read this story the same way you or anyone else reads it as I'm the creator of the work. Great analysis, AIDY. Your ability to break down this story is right on cue. Sorry about the loss of Master Akira, buddy. Until next time, eh?


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Truth From Truth 6 years ago from Michigan

Nice work Dohn, the story continues to entertain and flow smoothly. I'm really curious of where the next installment will take us, and also for Cody's future to unfold. Excellent story, thanks.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

That's so good to hear, TFT. Thank you. The next couple of installments are going to be tough as I'm still wondering how I'm going to create the next few scenes. Thank you so much for following this. It means a lot.


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Eileen Hughes 6 years ago from Northam Western Australia

Keep it up we are all waiting for the next one. you keep us in suspense


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emievil 6 years ago from Philippines

D@rn it, why did I miss this installments? It's already 4 days old! So what will it be dohn, will Cody help the two fight the Oda Clan (I'm assuming another fight scene here) or go back and get his revenge (finally!)? Don't mind me, I'm trying to anticipate what will happen next (and perhaps influence you on its direction? LOL j/k).


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@Eileen Hughes-Thank you so much Eileen! I appreciate the encouragement.

@emievil-To answer your question, Yes and Maybe, LOL. I think that since you live in the Philippines, it's a safe bet that a new installment will be ready each Saturday. However, for the last two weeks, I've struggled with this story and so didn't post until Sunday (according to you time zone). What I'm really trying to say is for you to check constantly, like everyday for a new installment (just kidding!)k. It's always great to hear from you, buddy :D


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Cris A 6 years ago from Manila, Philippines

The "quiet" moments are as unforgettable as the action sequences. And the story is far from over! How long can you keep it up? No, I'm not complaining, just amazed by your talent :D


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Geez, Cris. Thanks man. I really appreciate your comment. I do have a goal set in place (the cheese at the end of the maze) but I don't want to reveal it to anyone ;) I just want to keep you guys guessing I guess, lol.


Justine76 6 years ago

AHHHH!!! So happy I got time to read. Man......you know how to tell a story!

go Jets, btw ;)

oh, and I loved the bit about the tat. super cool


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Haha! Thanks, DM. I'm so glad to see that you're almost caught up. The tattoo was actually an afterthought (it's going to tie-in with the story well, however). Yeah, I'm all about New York sports, so I'm rooting for them until the get eliminated...I always knew you were a cutie pie ;)


Justine76 6 years ago

hahaha!!! :) no one has ever said THAT to me before.

and maybe they wont get eliminated? off to the next chapter...


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Yeah, I really do hope that the Jest do win a Super Bowl while I'm still alive! Those guys have been suffering since forever :D

Are you sure no one has ever said that? Maybe they said it in secret, lol.


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Freya Cesare 6 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Revenge is never end! When you kill one and caused other side rage in fury, you sign death certificate for people who loves you, because they will take a change to pay it back.

Where they headed now? And the romance? Ah! I hope I have more time to continue. :(

See you later, Dohn. Thanks for such entertaining story. ^_^


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks again, Freya. I agree with you wholeheartedly. Revenge is a chain that never ends. Death breeds only more death and on and on. To answer your questions, you will have to continue reading >_< Until next time :D


Duchess OBlunt 6 years ago

I'm happy to finally find the time to read more of your story dohn121. So well done!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks so much, Duchess! And of course it's great to hear that you have found the time. I can't wait to hear what you think once the story reaches an end.


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valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

Yes, this was a sad part of the story, but also a new beginning, as I have a feeling Cody will now be accepted into the clan. (: v


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Valerie. Yes, Cody definitely deserves to be accepted. I had to go back and read a bit of this installment to get reacquainted with it. As always, I'm anxious to hear your comments. Thank you!


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see this is one of the reason i love them, they are defierfnt then all the other girl groups~ like they don't use their sexy or cuteness in their songs, at least not most of them time. don't get me wrong i think snsd is really pretty and i like them as well but sometimes they just give me that vibe..

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