Revenge, Inc. Part 22: A Short Story

Author's Note

Hello everyone and welcome back. For almost two months now, I've been adding new installments a day later than what I had first anticipated. I tried my best to complete this before Saturday (here in the US) but couldn't quite close the deal. However, this is a bit earlier than my latest ones. I hope that you do enjoy this one as all of my other ones. At one time, I told you, Dear Reader, to be patient with me and to trust me in how I tell this story.  As we get closer and closer to the ending, I assure you that you will understand why things happened the way they did. The pieces of this jigsaw puzzle is indeed coming together just as I had hoped so many months ago. It's my wish that you like what you "see." Thanks as always. I'm so glad that you've returned to read this. I'd also like to personally thank Cris A for creating another image for Revenge, Inc. as he worked very hard constructing it, so thanks, Cris.

-ODP

If you haven't yet, please start reading this story from its beginning as it's how I originally intended. Sure, this story did start with as a stand-alone short story, but that was in fact 21 installments ago! Please click on the corresponding link(s) below. Thank you.

Revenge, Inc. Part 1

Revenge, Inc. Part 2

Revenge, Inc. Part 3

Revenge, Inc. Part 4

Revenge, Inc. Part 5

Revenge, Inc. Part 6

Revenge, Inc. Part 7

Revenge, Inc. Part 8

Revenge, Inc. Part 9

Revenge, Inc. Part 10

Revenge, Inc. Part 11

Revenge, Inc. Part 12

Revenge, Inc. Part 13

Revenge, Inc. Part 14

Revenge, Inc. Part 15

Revenge, Inc. Part 16

Revenge, Inc. Part 17

Revenge, Inc. Part 18

Revenge, Inc. Part 19

Revenge, Inc. Part 20

Revenge, Inc. Part 21

Valhalla At Night

I can hear Master Akira still to this day. His voice is as strong as it once was thousands of miles away during his time of living, perhaps stronger. It’s amazing—the profound power of memory. I recall his teachings and his words because they were and still are the essence of my actions. They are the product of my training, my salvation.

What do you see, Marak?

I close my eyes and the image that was once before me comes alive. The imminent night becomes day as I can now control the light. Valhalla and its city landscape come into focus and all around are details, my details. I am the painter and this is my canvas. I can control the wind and the rain and the movements of things that are not stationary, such as the vehicles on the intersecting streets and the people walking around from place to place aimlessly. I can stop the crime that is about to be committed, I can keep the walls from crumbling down, and maybe if I try hard enough, I can drown out the cries...

But I can’t.

Try as I might, I can’t. It’s impossible to ignore and it’s just too goddamn difficult. Master Akira repeats himself:

What do you see, Marak?

I close my eyes again and listen as my thoughts respond: I see a child in the distance and inside that building (I point). He stole something from a store and his mom is now hitting him as a result of it…Across from them and down the hallway, a prostitute is making her fare…In the building adjacent to that one a baby has been crying for some time. I better go and check…

From the roof of the building and rappel myself down wait patiently just outside the half-open kitchen window. There are no sounds other than the ones coming from the baby who continues to cry and no one tends to it. I take in a deep breath and turn myself to face the window. And just as I place my hand on the window to climb inside, I hear the unmistakable squeaking sound of a bed as weight from it has been lifted. I hear the sounds of slow shuffling slippers as they make their way towards the sounds of the baby whose bout of crying continues to invade my ears. Its cries grow louder as it’s being carried towards where I am frozen still. I don’t make a sound. I pull my hand from the window and wait. The kitchen light comes alive and a refrigerator door opens. With one hand, a woman, probably the baby's mother, prepares some formula and while she's waiting for it to warm up, she does her best to calm the baby down to no avail. A few seconds later, a microwave signals that the bottle is ready and soon after wards, the baby’s sounds are reduced to the hungry sucking sounds of long-awaited nourishment. The light goes off and I let out a breath.

False alarm.

But were there any Haley MacLaren's out tonight? Whose cries were too quiet to hear or whose crimes against them were unbeknownst to anyone aside from the victim and the assailant? Sometimes, the most dire cases were never heard by those who are capable of helping. Sometimes death takes those who are unsuspecting. I used to fear death in one way, in the way most others fear death, but no longer. My only fear is not finding the person who stole from me my only daughter, my only offspring, before death finally takes me away from this world. For now, my fight is with an unknown and invisible enemy. But until that day does come, I will do what I should have done to prevent such acts from ever occurring again. For that, I owe, and so will always be in debt.

A Return to Cody and Peter

It was dark by the time I arrived. Through sheer memory, I probably could've arrived blind--perhaps everyone could, if only they walked west on County Route 31. But getting passed the security check point, the black iron gates and the dobermans was another story. You'd think the President of the United States was at the end of that long ass driveway, but it was only my friend Peter from high school. I knew he'd be there. I knew him well enough to know. I went undetected and scaled the eastern wing and slipped in through the balcony. I felt as if I was breaking into my own house.

“You got some fucking nerve leaving me there on that island, you know that?” Peter quickly turned and saw me again for the first time in two years. He smiles and walks over to me.

“Shit, man. I almost didn’t recognize you. What did Master Akira feed you over there?”

“Rice and wisdom, my friend. Rice and wisdom. You know he’s dead, right?”

“Yes, so I heard...And don't give me that look. Remember, I'm connected." And he was. "You know that I own that island, right?” I nodded my head.

“Christ. What don’t you own?”

“Hey, a deal’s a deal. I know it’s shitty, but I’m only abiding by what my father decreed before his Gulfstream took a nosedive. With all due respect, you shouldn’t be complaining. Your sabbatical on Jirai was exactly what you needed.” I recalled the Oda Clan’s ruthless attack on Jirai Island.

“Pete, I almost died there…”

“You would’ve killed yourself here had you stayed! And you wanted to disappear, remember?” Yes, of course I did. It was the right thing to do at the time, because of Haley. After a moment of reflection, I found a seat in the Billingsley Archives and sat down. I said her name out loud:

“Haley…Did Felix and his guys ever find anything?” Peter had a solemn look on his face.

“Cody, I wish I could tell you that they did find him—that they cuffed the pedophile, booked him, tried him, and that it was an open and shut case and that the bastard was going to spend the rest of his natural life in maximum security…But then I’d be lying.”

“So he’s still out there?” Peter nodded his head. A part of me was, should I say it? Glad that he wasn’t yet found. It meant that I still had a chance to find him on my own. I dreamed of such an opportunity. And opposed to before when first I found out that Haley was indeed gone, I now had the means to find him and I believed that no one and nothing could stop me. In the eyes of the law, I’m a dead man—I don’t exist. My gravestone at Valhalla Cemetery confirms this. Cody William MacLaren was dead. I could feel the surge of pure vengeance coursing through my veins like life itself. A part of me knew this and knew that I would somehow be the one to find him all along. That was why the urgency of finding him was not felt by me during my entire time while at Jirai. I just knew that this was how it would happen. And no, it wasn’t fate. Fate didn’t exist according to me, only free will.

“CODY!” I turned and looked at Peter. His face was beet red.

“What?”

“I’ve been talking to you and calling to you this entire time. What the hell were you thinking about? It’s like you drifted away and your body stayed behind.”

“I got a lot on my mind.”

“What? Are you actually thinking about finding this guy? The cops gave up looking a couple of months ago. They had no leads and got absolutely nowhere. Felix threw in the towel…Believe me, I checked. I mean let’s not kid ourselves, Cody. These guys are trained professionals with dozens of years of experience and have practically no clues. What makes you so damn sure you’ll find her?”

“Maybe if she was your daughter, you’d understand, Peter. Until the day I die, I’m never giving up, okay?”

“Fine.  I'm not even going to try to talk any sense to you, because my words will only fall on deaf ears.”

With that said, Peter then walked on over and took a seat across from me, separated by a coffee table just like the old days and after high school. We’d go to Peter's and each have a highball filled with scotch and were soon drunk while talking about girls and the people in school we couldn’t stand. It was all very familiar and brought back some fun memories. Before long, I had a scotch in my hand and so did Peter.  It was if nothing had ever changed.

“Now tell me everything that's happened to you,” Peter said.

She Is the Rain

It’s been four years since I made my return to Valhalla. I reunited with my father, with Adrianna, with Haley, and with Peter—the only people that mean anything to me in this world. Sure, two of these people are in fact dead, but not to me. To me, they are always watching me so I don’t want to quit doing what I’m doing. Not for the world do I want to let them down, because to do so is to disrespect their memory. Master Akira taught me a thing or two about honoring our departed. He taught me something about correcting the wrongs in my life and about bringing balance to the world. So I talk to them every night, before I lay down to rest after another night of vigilance and before the sun comes out to chime in a new day and end my prayers with, “I hope your proud of me” and I do. I tell myself that I’m working as fast as I can, that I’m doing my best to make sure that others don’t suffer needlessly, that the drug pushers and driven away and that the make right everything that is wrong.

My only regret is that I have yet to find Haley’s killer. I exhausted every resource I could find and much like Felix and his police force, I’ve not gotten anywhere. But I’m not going to stop trying, believe me. I made a promise to Haley and I don’t plan to break it anytime soon. My life would have to be taken first before that ever happens.

Word is getting around about a masked man, a nameless vigilante who is the “silent voice” of the people. And so among those who happened to be helped by such a slippery man who called himself “Marak.” Everyone needs a name, don’t they? Master Akira gave me mine before he passed on. So be it. I’d like to believe that I am in fact making a difference here and that I’m working to make this a better place. Whenever it was that I needed a bit of food or a place to stay, I knew that I could make a visit to St. Augustine’s where my father was helping all, including his only son and child.

After a night of not having found much activity, I thought to return a little earlier than normal and so was surprised to find that my father was still awake when I saw him. He was sitting at the front pew.

“You’re up late,” I remarked while walking up the very same aisle Adrianna and I walked up over seventeen years before. He rose up and turned around to greet me.

“Yes, well I couldn’t sleep and besides, I wanted to speak to you.” I gave him a curious look.

“Why? Couldn’t it wait until morning? Is it urgent?” Out of the shadows and up the aisle walked a young woman I didn’t believe I’d ever met before. She was beautiful in every which way possible. She had long brown hair and her eyes were amber brown. It was her eyes that told me that yes, I did know her from somewhere from a long, long time ago. Even with age, a person's eyes never change. I just couldn’t make the connection of where I knew her from. When she approached me she was very shy.

“Hi, Marak,” she said smiling.

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Lady_E 6 years ago from London, UK

Aaaaaaaah!!. My face was moving closer to my computer, when reading about this mysterious lady towards the end and then there was a full stop. lol. That was Cliff-hanging.

I enjoyed reading this and it's nice to make a connection with people Cody knew earlier e.g Peter. My heart still goes out to this guy - it must be horrific for him not to know who killed his daughter. No wonder, he is so restless and will not give up. I'm beginning to think maybe that's where the title of the story ties in. "Revenge".

I've noticed another cover. It's nice Dohn but the previous one made more of a statement. Just my opinion.

Ps. Thanks for dropping a line about it in my Hub. My ISP Provider has technical difficulties so had to come out to Internet Cafe. No connection at home. So, I'm glad I read it.

Thanks so much for sharing this story.

Best Wishes.:)


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Kaie Arwen 6 years ago

I bet I've seen that mystery lady in another hub? By golly......... think it was one of yours! :-D

A muse..............

Great job.......... be proud!

Kaie


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lorlie6 6 years ago from Bishop, Ca

Yet another intriguing part to your ongoing story, dohn.

Lovin' it!

Keep em coming...

Laurel


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Pamela99 6 years ago from United States

Another cliff hanger. Now who is that woman I wonder. Now, I'll look forward to the next chapter.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Elena. I would've responded much earlier, but I passed out before I could (I was up very late completing this one). Of course I'm happy that you liked what you read and am happier still that you approve. I almost wanted to personally apologize to you for Natsumi. As the saying goes, there is a reason for everything and it really is up to us to find all of the answers.

I was ecstatic when seeing that you came by and read this. I saw your activity on the Hubfeed so I knew that you were active. Sorry about your ISP--I hope that gets resolved soon. I'd be going bananas if I had a problem with my service (knocks on wood).

Thank you so much Elena!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi, Kaie. Mum's the word ;) I do commend you for putting some of the pieces together. I wondered if anyone would pick up on some of it. Thank you so much for reading this. I hope to hear from you again!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi, Laurel. Thanks so much for that. I'm so happy to see that you too are following this as well. I hope to see you at the end!

Dohn


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, Pamela. Yes, you will find out who she is next week and that I promise. It's always great to hear that you're keeping up with this story!


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

OH My GOD, I am at awed, it is very vivid, and very touching Dohn, the way you described Valhalla, the memories of your wife and Haley, it affected me, I am just sitting down here toungue tied and emotional you have a way with words,

I can almost feel whats inside Cody William, beautiful name -- rather MARAK-----

And I know you will search for the man who killed your daughter, and you will take care of it -- the revenge, I am excited to see the twist. So excited for the next one.

And towards the end another beautiful lady,

And the way you described the lady is beautiful!

Perfect ten again, it is getting better DOHN< your words are just moving ..and believe me youre a great writer!!..Thank you so much DOHN, I cant wait for the next one, SALAMAT, Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I'm so glad you stopped in, Normita! I was about to leave when I saw that you commented. I can't tell you how honored I am to hear your comments. I feel like I don't deserve it most of the time! Writing is really the only thing that makes sense to me in this world.

I wanted to establish what it was to see the world and hear the world of Valhalla through Marak. Sure, I did jump four years into the future, but I really had no choice (Everything does happen for a reason, right?). I'm floored after reading your comments, my friend. Really.

I really think that you are going to like this "beautiful lady." I've been working on her character for months now and think that I finally got the character I want.

Thank you so much. I can't thank you enough for continuing to read this story. It means the world to me.

Dohn


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Paradise7 6 years ago from Upstate New York

Terrific addition to an already fasciniating story!


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado

You're on the roll. I think the process of writing a novella in segments has been great for you in that the needlework of words can be first done very carefully in the mind and then on the page--it's something delicate that cannot be rushed.


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Tammy Lochmann 6 years ago

ha...talk about a cliff hanger. I can't wait until next week.


Keira7 6 years ago

Oh my dear lovely friend Dohn, I am so late for reading, I left home so early this morning and didn't have time to check my e.mails before going. I assume it will be in sonday morning. Anyway, we just arrive home, its now middle of the nigth, I was so tired and guess what, after reading "Revenche" I dont want to go to sleep, I really want part 23 now. I cant wait for next week, my husband had to read it also before going to bed. He is like me now, addicted to your brilliant writing. Have a lovely sonday my wonderful writer.:) Bless you.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Hi Dohn, am back, I slept hehe. Youre welcome and you deserve evrything I say, youve got the words, and the feel when you write, its when you infect the reader. I am so excited about the name of the beautiful lady, I want to ask the name now, OOOPzssss, no I will just wait next week again. Thank you DOHN for writing this one! Happy weekend and enjoy!! Salamat po! Just call me Maita -- it smy nickname -- hehehehe, dont tease me, I dont like my name NORMITA, I feel like high school LOL,


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emievil 6 years ago from Philippines

This is really getting more and more interesting by the minute. A vigilante eh? Hope we have that in real life, we really need some :). And the girl? Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm, another one dohn? :D I'm all at edge wondering why she knows Cody as Marak. Hmmmmmmmmmmmm again. And the picture below, there's a slight shift now from the last one. this one shows he is back on the streets of his hometown. Really great work dohn. I don't think you'll consider publishing the installments twice a week instead of once a week (hehehehe j/k)? :D


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rprcarz50 6 years ago

This one just drew me into it. Like a good book , didn't want it to stop.

Thank You for this intreging Hub

Ron

As always Also a2z50 New Hub Keep on Hubbing

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, Paradise7! I'm so glad you liked it.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I couldn't have said it better myself, juneaukid. I don't think I'll be writing serials as hubs in this manner again. It's just too tough! I do have other stories that I'd like to work on, but I'm going to wait until I have a finished product ahead of time before turning them into hubs. Thank you as always!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Tammy. Thank you! Until next week, right?


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You are NEVER late, Kiera! I actually was early writing this one in comparison to the past 6 or 7 installments. I'm so glad that we got your hubby hooked on reading this as new readers are always welcome to read. I'm sorry that I don't have part 23 ready (I haven't written it yet!) but I will in a week or so, I promised. I'm going to do my best to write it a little earlier. There is so much that I have to establish before bringing this story to its close. I'm so happy to hear from you every single week. I can't express how much it means to me. Thank you so much.

Warmest Regards my friend,

Dohn


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! Hello my dear MAITA! To be honest, I'm still fighting to come up with a proper name, but I narrowed it down to three so by next week, I'll make a decision as to what her name will be. I'm so happy that I got you guys thirsting for more! It's such a compliment to hear such amazing comments from you guys, especially when you guys want the next installment just as soon you get done reading this one. Thank you so much for reading this! Salamat!

Dohn


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

There she is! Ha! Yeah, I would love to be a vigilante, only I don't feel like getting shot/killed/beaten up, ha ha! However, I'd be sure to help those who are willing to take up their sword in they are willing to risk their neck for the greater good :D Yep, new girl, new possibilities. But whatever you think is going to happen probably won't (whether or not that's a good thing or a bad thing remains to be seen). Twice a week?! I struggle with just one!!! You're awesome, buddy :D


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I'm so glad that you read this. However, I'd love it if you could start from Part One if at all possible, as it would do this story some justice. I'll be sure to stop in. Thanks for coming by! I'm much obliged.

Dohn


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Hi there Dohn, the name of the beautiful lady should be "CHAKRA" just kidding, This HUBMONTH makes me busier and discover things I dont know before like Chakra, chakra. My friend who gave birth to a baby girl last week named her baby Sophia, beautiful isn't it? Hmmm, I just cant wait for the next installment here, How many hours do you write every installment Dohn,? Night, Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You know, you never fail to bring a smile to my face whenever you comment, Maita. Ha! Chakra :D Shakira is almost like such a word, only the letter C is replaced with an S and a I is added. I wonder if Shakira knows this? Sophia is a great name. Hmmm...I got about 5 day to decide on the name. Did you know that I'm only putting so much thought in the name because you liked the other ones so far? It's true. Now I gotta top the others! Until Friday/Saturday, right? Nighty night!

Dohn


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prasetio30 6 years ago from malang-indonesia

Simple comment from me Dhon. This hub is very inspiring me. Thank you very much.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, prasetio30. I appreciate your comment and I'm glad that it did!


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Cris A 6 years ago from Manila, Philippines

I have an idea of who the 'new' girl is - like you said, memory is profoundly powerful (if I can only remember which chapter! tsk tsk!) But then again, I could be wrong! Haha

Now that the story is in full throttle, I'm beginning to rethink the images I made...like the one above.

Anyway, thanks for consistently keeping us your readers on tenterhooks. I guess you've figured out that we like it like that :D


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You did fine by it, Cris. I enjoyed your images and continue to do so. Sharing it with everyone is the important thing. Perhaps one day we can collaborate with a book cover. I'd be honored if you took on such a task (after the story is complete of course, so that way you'll have the full scope/have the full scoop, ha ha).

There is more in store, I assure you and it's hopefully not what others are expecting. I've ripped up whole stories simply because I predicted the ending. It's under such a premise that if I can predict any ending, then so can my readers.

I plan to deliver the final blow very very soon! Thanks as always.


cosette 6 years ago

oh my god.

it can't be.

OMG Dohn!

no way

no no way. :):):)


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sweet kitten 6 years ago from United Kingdom, England

I am Writing a book about a kitten, when I finish It, I will publish it


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! I was cracking up while reading your comments, buddy. I actually was stopped a long red light and read it on my phone. I'm glad you liked it :D


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks sweet kitten...Did you like what you read?


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Zsuzsy Bee 6 years ago from Ontario/Canada

I'm all caught up again. It just keeps getting better and better.

I'll be back (a la Schwarzenegger)

hope you're well

kindest regards Zsuzsy


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi, Zsuzsy! I'm fine, thank you. I'm always happy to hear from you and always look forward to hearing your comments. As I've said before, (were I the reader of this series) I'd hate to have to wait around for a new installment every week and so would probably do the same thing you're doing! Thanks again :D


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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India

Now it's really racing to the climax, isn't it, Dohn? And another love interest to spice it up? Wow - you've got it all and it's all come together so well. And Cris's visuals fit in so well :)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks again, Shalini. I'd love to collaborate with him for a book cover if at all possible. I used to be an artist myself, but I'd love to hear what he recommends. Overall, I am happy with what I have with this story...Remember, this is only the first draft! Thanks so much for catching up!


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Truth From Truth 6 years ago from Michigan

Dohn, Thank you. This is really captivating, this new woman that is familiar to him is really drawing me in further. Some nice work Dohn.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, TFT. Thanks for that. Yeah, I got one more girl (the third at last count) for Marak and Cody for that matter. She's going to play an integral role in the story and I think that you guys are going to like her.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

hey Dohn- William Cody, Marak, hmm, it is raining here and I am thinking of Valhalla, just kidding--- visit anglnwu, HMMM, it Wednesday and cant wait for the name and her meeting Marak, it will be wonderful, I hope snow is out there, and spring is here, YEHEY, Morning Dohn, and thanks for Jovit Baldivino, I played around with his name, and like yesterday he was on top one, first page, isnt that amazing, I dont know now, hehe,,,,Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Yes, I've been pulling for Jovit Baldvino all of this time. I wish I knew more people so that I could keep that hub "hot" for you. In time, it will get more hits/views as his popularity grows. He's well surpassed a million views on YouTube and you have, no doubt, helped him along the way!

I still haven't written Part 23 yet, but I will start today. The mystery girl's name is locked and loaded...I finally settled on her name :D You'll like it, I'm sure. It brings personal meaning and symbolic meaning all the same.

I hope you're well and that the rain doesn't get you down ;)

Salamat,

Dohn


Justine76 6 years ago

HA!!!! Rice and wisdom......love it!!!!!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

LOL, thanks, DM. I'm glad that you liked that line. I'd add love in the mix as the essentials to living a full and active life.


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Amber Allen 6 years ago

Hi Dohn

I'm hooked and waiting for the next instalment. Great storyline.

Amber


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Amber. It's so good to hear that you too are following this story. I'm so happy that you are. Until next time ;)

Dohn


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callmefoxxy 6 years ago

Wow dohn121. Looks like I've got a LOT of reading to do. Now where's my coffee? BTW, I like the cover.

callmefoxxy, my pen is a mighty sword!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, callmefoxxy. I'm glad to have you aboard. I look forward to hearing feedback from you regarding Revenge, Inc.! I hope to hear from you again soon.

Dohn


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valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

Now, who is this new person? I am curious to find out, but must do yard work today, and hope I have a non-raining weekend. (: v


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I really envy the speed in which you're reading this, Valerie. Thank you so much. There's not much more left for you to read now :D Until next time?

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