Revenge, Inc. Part 24: A Short Story

Author's Note

Hello everyone and welcome back. Believe it or not, I really thought that this would be the last installment of Revenge, Inc. as I was planning to wrap it up this week, but then realized that it wouldn't be at all possible. There's just too much for me to resolve before I end this book/story/epic. I thought it unfair to do so and for me to have attempted to would've been noticed as a rushed job. The last thing I want to do is rush this ending. I've read several stories in the past where the book was rushed and so became quite pissed to have been victim to such. I didn't want to do the same to you, Constant Reader (I always wanted to say that--Stephen King uses that term time and again). So with that said, I hope that I haven't disappointed you in any way if you thought this may be the final installment. I do enjoy writing this series but hope that I could do some justice to the concluding installments by its end. I hope that you like what you read in the final installments. And as you know, I've name my newest heroine Rayna after The Girl in the Avatar. When I finish this work, I'm dedicating it to her. I love you Rayna H. Hurman and you know it.

-ODP

Once again, I'd like to thank Cris A for supplying again the last image. He's worked hard in supplying me with some awesome book covers, so please show your love to him whenever possible! By the way, I've been severely busy this past week and so haven't read as many hubs as I usually do, so for that, I apologize if I haven't yet gotten around to reading your work. I hope you understand.

If you haven't already, please read this series as it was meant to be read, beginning of course with Part One.

Revenge, Inc. Part 1

Revenge, Inc. Part 2

Revenge, Inc. Part 3

Revenge, Inc. Part 4

Revenge, Inc. Part 5

Revenge, Inc. Part 6

Revenge, Inc. Part 7

Revenge, Inc. Part 8

Revenge, Inc. Part 9

Revenge, Inc. Part 10

Revenge, Inc. Part 11

Revenge, Inc. Part 12

Revenge, Inc. Part 13

Revenge, Inc. Part 14

Revenge, Inc. Part 15

Revenge, Inc. Part 16

Revenge, Inc. Part 17

Revenge, Inc. Part 18

Revenge, Inc. Part 19

Revenge, Inc. Part 20

Revenge, Inc. Part 21

Revenge, Inc. Part 22

Revenge, Inc. Part 23

Our Place In This World

Rayna’s hands are so soft in comparison to my rough and callous hands. Her hands are the hands of a person that has never touched a sword or killed another human, nor will they ever, as there just isn’t enough anger in them. But a warmth emanates from them, a gentleness that is welcoming and inviting all the same and I can feel her heart beating rapidly while holding them. As we stood while holding each others hands, the altar was not too far away from us, there was a stirring of guilt within me; it was a feeling of bewildered awkwardness only a self-respecting man could feel—one who was still trying to find his place in this fucked up world—because the feeling he was feeling wasn’t felt for so long. After some time, I let go and turned away from her and her haunting stare. It was just too much. I could’ve gotten lost while looking into those eyes.

“How did you know my name?” I asked her with my back still turned.

“Father Frank told me without meaning to,” she said.

“Really? I wonder how many others he’s told.”

“There is no one else.”

“How could you be so sure?”

“Two reasons: One; if others did know, they would have taken your father as hostage by now, or would’ve done something much worse just so they could get to you. Two; I only found out because I was looking for you. Everyone else in this world thinks your dead.”

“And why were you looking for me?”

“You know why, Cody. I shouldn’t have to tell you the reason. Haven’t you ever been in love?”

Immediately, I thought of Adrianna and Natsumi, the only other women I ever loved. Both were once real but were now gone from this world. The silence was overwhelming.

“Of course and please don’t call me Cody. He’s dead and long gone from me.”

“No, he’s not. He’s still very much alive in you. You can change you name to Marak or whoever you choose, but you can’t change who you are.” I laughed.

“Yeah? And what makes you think you know me so well, huh? I mean before tonight, we’ve only met once.”

“You don’t know how many times I’ve asked myself that very same question over the years. Every time I read another newspaper article about you, every time I come by to see your father, every moment I wake up and every night I go to bed, there you are…I read about you years ago when you lost Haley. I was saddened even more when it was reported that you hung yourself in your own home. It was around the same time I lost my mother to cancer along with my father’s new hobby of drinking uncontrollably. There was just so much sadness in this world back then and there is still much sadness in this world now. Sadness is never ending and is caused by much pain and grief which is, in turn, caused by fear. I know a thing or two about pain. I also know a thing or two about fear. You yourself were there when my father, at least the man I thought was my father, took it upon himself to ‘teach me a lesson.’ I’ve never forgotten that, nor have I forgotten about the only man in this world that’s ever shown me any kindness, who fought for me when no one else would, who saved me for my own father. Every where I go and whenever I look into the eyes of other men, I see the eyes of my late father. But when I look at a picture of you, I see only you and you alone. You think I don’t know you, Cody? I think I know you well enough. And no one—not even you—can tell me any different. Seeing you now only acknowledges the fact. I know how I feel and know enough to know that I love you.” I shook my head.

“This is crazy.”

“What’s crazy?”

“For Christ’s sake! You’re young enough to be my daughter!”

“Remember where you are!” My father echoed from the other side of the church.

“Does that really matter to you?” Rayna said. “Look, I didn’t ask to fall in love with you and I didn’t ask my father to rape me, but there it is. It happened. There are so many people in this world that preach that everything is caused by fate and speak of it like it’s some kind of gospel. I don’t believe in fate. I have no right to.”

“Then what is it that you do believe in?” From behind me, she places her arms around me and rests her head on my upper back and I didn’t fight it. Just her touch is incredible.

“I believe in you, Cody. I believe in hope, no matter how much darkness this world shows me, time and again. I also believe in myself and my ability. Every time a woman shows up at the shelter, my hope is restored. I know she came to the right place and know just what to say to her, because with experience comes empathy. I can empathize with every single woman that comes to me for help. Every night, you risk everything to save everyone in need. You’re everything every kindhearted person in Valhalla wants to be, yet don’t have the balls to do the same. Everything you do is exactly the very same things every kindhearted person wants to do, yet can’t bring themselves to do so because they feel as if they have too much to lose. Even the cops are scared of you—the crooked ones that is…”

“Yes, there are many of them around…So what do you want from me?” She turned me around and smiled.

“For you to stop turning your back on me.”

In the Face of Fear

Some time has passed since last I saw her. Her vulnerability, her innocence, her confusion about who I am…It all began to make sense to me. I could understand why it was that she felt the way she felt: In her most desperate hour, I by chance came to her aid when her father was forcing himself upon her. The memory would be vivid and unforgettable to her for as long as she’s alive. I was her hero then and will be for always, so do I blame her? Not at all. I’m no psychologist, but it made a helluva lot of sense to me. But before realizing this, I thought to once again follow my heart which of course this time around, led me into Rayna’s arms. I thought it was for the best, because through her eyes, I saw the love that she swore she had for me; ‘the only man that’s ever showed her any kindness.’ In truth, I wanted very much to be happy again, to maybe start a family by giving hope a try…But then I thought of the other women in my life: Adrianna, my deceased wife, Haley, my deceased daughter, and of course Natsumi, my deceased lover and only daughter of my deceased master. Were they all looking down at me at the moment? Was I really any better than the man that raped her? What about the man that raped my daughter? Haley would have been Rayna’s age if she was alive today. Am I really no better? If it was that I was to find some happiness this world, would the three of them approve of Rayna? Or was it shame that they were feeling for me, for being with a girl who was nearly half my age? I fought this thought for some time in the time I spent with her. To say that it wasn’t easy is an understatement. And this was only one half of the reason why I was feeling what I was feeling. I opted to suffer a little bit now rather than a lot later.

The other half had to do with my fear of losing everything I ever cared for—again.

Back on Jirai Island during my training, Master Akira admonished to me my first of two fears: The fear that I wouldn’t ever avenge the person that raped and killed my daughter Haley. My second fear was never made known—that is until now: My fear of losing Natsumi. I was witness to her death, in her final act of benevolence to save her twin brother Katsuro so many years ago. The very same compassion she had shown me she showed her brother that fateful day. May she, Adrianna, and Haley all rest in peace. Their nightmares are finally over. But mine is not. That is something I’ve still yet to contend with…I thought again, as I did several times before that perhaps I was given another opportunity to love once again, to cherish once again, to maybe be shown that this world somehow isn’t as bad as it seems, because that is all I really see. The darkness tries to hide from me in shadow, but I always end up finding it and dealing with it every single night. There’s just too much evil in this world no to, at least to me. And I of all people know too well just how life can be taken just as fast as it’s given. For me to fall in love with Rayna could well turn up becoming a crucial mistake that I’ve already made twice before. To get too attached was a mistake, because I couldn’t bear to lose another, the way I lost Adrianna, Haley, and more recently, Natsumi. The thought of losing Rayna as well was too much for me to realize. That was why I had to leave her, before I could fall for her—only to experience her fall as well. What man in his right mind wouldn’t want her? She’s young, beautiful and innocent. In other words, she’s exactly the opposite of everything I’m not. But in contrast to what happened to Adrianna, Haley, and Natsumi, I could in fact change how things would happen:

“I think this is for the better,” I said to her. She was in tears. It hurt to see her cry but I refused to show it.

“How can you say that?” She said. “How is being apart from each other better? You’re the only person I love and the only person I'll ever want to be with.”

“Don’t say that.

“I’m only saying it because it’s true. And I know that you love me. You’re just too afraid to say so.”

“I’m not afraid of anything.”

“Bullshit. You think you’re cursed somehow and that you’re going to lose me.”

“And do you blame me? Everyone in my life, with the exception of my father, has died a horrific death.”

“But that doesn’t mean you stop trying to find happiness! Can’t you see that?”

“It’s better if I don’t. Take care of yourself.”

After saying that, I didn’t give Rayna much of a chance to say much of anything else. I simply disappeared as fast as I could.

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Truth From Truth 6 years ago from Michigan

Incredible work Dohn, You are an intriguing writer. I look forward to the time when I will see your novels at the book store. All I can say is I really enjoyed this segment.This story has been very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing your talent.


Keira  6 years ago

Hi my wonderful friend, you doing an excellent work, and I think you took the rigth decision not to end the story yet.:) I really enjoy all the part. I am going to find it hard when it will end. Even I am really looking for it. I am like that with all the great book I read. Cant wait for the end, but also dont wanted to end. Thanks for Another great journey from my husband and I, we cant wait to read the next part. Brilliant photo from your friend Cris A. Have a lovely weekend my brilliant writer. Bless you bro.:)


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Pamela99 6 years ago from United States

Just when I didn't expect it you wrote another great chapter to this novel. It is excellent.


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emievil 6 years ago from Philippines

Hey dohn. uh, let me just get a hanky to wipe my eyes. This is a very emotional scene. And why the heck are you letting Marak walk away from Rayna? Get her back or I won't read your next issue. LOL just kidding. I love happy endings and I hope this one will have one. Thanks! :)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, TFT. I do believe that that will happen one day and I'm not ever going to stop trying to get published until that happens. The truth is that I've always believed that I will get published and that it's only a matter of time. Thank you for the encouragement my friend.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you so much, Keira! And please thank your husband for me for reading this story. I means the world to me that you read me every week. I really do appreciate it. Cris's photos are very inspiring aren't they? I hope to hear from you next weekend, my friend. I hope you enjoy your weekend.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Pamela. I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed it and am doubly happy that this novel isn't completed yet! Until next week ;)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hmmm...I hope I don't my chopped off by YOUR katana, Emie! Remember many moons ago to please trust me? Most of you guys wanted to kill me for killing off Natsumi and that's understandable. Please, buddy, no more vital threats ;) You're the best :D


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drbj 6 years ago from south Florida

Dear dohn121 - With the runaway success of the film, "Avatar," there is sure to be a sequel. John Cameron is too smart to leave any money on the table.

So write a one-page screenplay outline of your hubs about Rayna, Cody, et al, and send it to John by snail mail. Make two copies and mail one of the outlines to yourself and do not open it. It will serve as primitive protection of your material.


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Amber Allen 6 years ago

Hi Dohn

Another great instalment. I'm so looking forward to the next (and final?) one.

Amber:)


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emievil 6 years ago from Philippines

Hey I was just kidding you dohn. Don't mind me. Remember it's my busy season (neat excuse, hehehe). :)


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Paradise7 6 years ago from Upstate New York

Looking forward to the next one...the last one???? Really????


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado

Extremely well written Dohn121. You have the reader identifying very well with Cody's dilemma and understanding why he had no other choice but to leave Rayna at this point in his life.


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myownworld 6 years ago from uk

Ok. i just HAD to sneak in and read a bit more and I loved every word! You're such a talented and wonderful writer dohn....I think we all hope for the day when you'll have a published novel to your name. Never stop writing....some people are just born to it! :)


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Hi Dohn, of course this made a lump in my throat, I could feel what you are feeling and hers as well! it is a shame that sometimes we are scared to love again isnt it? it is perfectly reasonable to be scared to be hurt again and to hurt the person you most love as well, sometimes peoples heart and emotions could be numbed because of past experiences and to think the death of the three persons you loved most, terrible deaths after terrible happenings, how could a man ever survived those happenings. But love must find its way and you will emerge more courageous and there I hope he will "succumbed" to love again -- for CODY I mean, I want him to love again -- even if he is scared-- I want HIm to love again hehe. I can almost feel the intensity of your words and her.

I like these Dohn, the following lines, I borrowed it from you.

"nor have I forgotten about the only man in this world that’s ever shown me any kindness, who fought for me when no one else would, who saved me for my own father"

“I believe in you, Cody. I believe in hope, no matter how much darkness this world shows me, time and again.

I hope Cody will also do the same but I also understand Codys feeling, wow Dohn I could almost see and be with the plot, I can almost feel what they are undergoing inside their minds.

Lovely and the installments always touches me and strung a chord in me.

Ahh love must be the hardest thing in the world yes the sweetest.

Dohn perfect ten again because I can almost be in the plot and can feel the emotions, words you used are great..

Thak you, thank you, it is snowing here DOHN< blizzard last night, Happy weekend, youre busy and you take care, Maita


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MyWebs 6 years ago from Sheridan, WY

Dohn Your bordering on having your readers come chase you down again. I can sure understand how he wold feel about Rayna and her age. Such tough choices to make.

I'm sorry but I must add one minor criticism. Those huge paragraphs are so hard on my eyes to read.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi, drbj. That's very kind of you to say that (I'm guessing that you mean James Cameron) but I'm sure that he's constantly flooded by such unsolicited manuscripts on a daily basis. The chance that he'll come across mine is slim--it'll most likely hit the shredder before it even touches his gloved hand, haha. The best way to go about getting his attention in the matter is for me to first find representation in the form of a literary agent, or better yet, get this book published and then go from there. I doubt that I'll ever write a screenplay for this story (I'm no screenplay writer). Someone else will have to take the liberty to do so and sell it with my approval).

Thank you so much for the suggestion. I've really worked hard on this and do hope that it'll go into mass publishing all over the world. I can dream can't I?


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Amber Ann. Thank you so much for reading this. It's great to see that you are still following this story. As far as I know, I'm not sure if the next installment will be the last as I haven't yet written. I guess time will tell ;) In either case, I hope to hear from you next week! Thanks.

Dohn


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! I know, Emie! No hard feelings ;) I think I know you better than that by now. I do understand your frustration--I've killed a slew a people over the years to chagrin of my readers :P Maybe you'll be Rayna's Angel in this case, so as to "watch over her."

I just saw the awful error I made in my first comment to you. What I meant to say was:

"I hope I don't get my head chopped off by YOUR katana, Emie!"

Sorry ;)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, juneaukid. I did my best to express Cody/Marak's mode of thinking through internal dialogue. I can't help but to acknowledge the fact that you sound just like my English professor in your observation and rightly so! Thank you as always.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, myownworld. It's always good to hear from you. Thank you so much for the comment! I sure hope that this installment will get you interested enough to begin reading this story :D New readers are always welcome--especially those whom I like hearing from!

I hope to see and hear from you in the concluding installments, but more so in the preceding ones ;) Thanks, MOW.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Maita. You had a blizzard?! I think the norheast and the southwest has exchanged weather patterns, as it's been low to mid-60s here as of late! You know, I look forward to hearing your comments. You get into so much depth and cover so much. Reading all of these comments to me reminds me of the writing workshops I'm familiar with during my time at college.

I actually wrote this entire installment in one sitting. I began at eleven o'clock on Friday and didn't finish until three-thirty in the morning (Saturday). After some quick editing, adding my pics and an RSS feed, copying and pasting from my MS Word document (the original), and then finally clicking PUBLISH, three o'clock became three-thirty. I knew some of the key aspects that I wanted to include, but had not yet written. For the most part, all of these installments were done in the same fashion. And no, I'm not bragging, I just telling you how these installments in truth are created.

I'm very impressed with your personal observations, Maita. You pointed out exactly the things that I wanted to emphasize most. I must admit that I share much of Cody/Marak's own mode of thinking and feel that I have to. I think a weaker man in his situation would've killed himself a long, long time ago. It's just way too much for any man to bear, so of course I agree with you.

It really is wonderful to hear what you think, Maita. I am a bit saddened that this story will eventually reach an end just like every other story. To hear your reaction is my gratuity for writing it ;)

Thank you/Salamat Maita.

Dohn


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Mywebs. I'm sorry about the mammoth paragraphs! I couldn't figure out how to break them up and believe me, I share the same dislike for such huge paragraphs as well.

It's great to hear back from you. I was simply flattered that you sat down and practically read all of the preceding installments in one sitting! To hear that you did was great to hear. I'm glad that you enjoyed reading this installment!

Yes, Marak did have a tough choice to make. More to come, my friend, so stay tuned ;)


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Lady_E 6 years ago from London, UK

Wow Dohn, this was a deep one.

Its got to the point now that I feel like its a real life story unfolding. He's lost loved ones, Natsumi most recently and now Rayna comes along. He's full of mixed emotions. I perfectly understand what he did in the end. Not giving any opportunity, walking away without looking back.

Its just like real life, some people who have the kindest of hearts tend to suffer what they do not deserve to. I'm just secretly hoping (well no more secret - lol) that Cody/Marak has a happy ending.

Thanks again for an excellent read. :)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Elena. The point that you made about this being a real life story unfolding is exactly what I was driving for. I wanted others to empathize with both characters here as both make good points (in my opinion). You share the same sentiments as Emie in addition to several others. Thank you as always, Elena. Until next week ;)


Justine76 6 years ago

I can so relate to the fear of loosing everything, again. And the desperate kind of wanting to be happy, but still afraid of loosing the happy all over again and then deciding its best to just stay numb. I cant believe you would be afraid people would be dissapointed that this isnt the last chapter! Im so excited it will continue!! Im sure no on else will agree with me, but... I hope the ending you have in mind stays in character. I love happy endings of course, but I hate happy endings at the sacrifice of the whole story. I love it when you read a story, and you want so bad for it to turn out a certain way, but you know it can't becuase it wouldn't, and the author sticks to it. Like the Dark Tower...Roland couldn't be any other way, or he wouldn't be Roland. Anyway, do what you must, everythign happens for a reason. :)


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi, DM. You know, I've read almost everything Stephen King has ever published--with the exception of the Dark Tower series! Don't ask me why, as I have no good reason for this. Of course it's great to hear that you want to series to continue. I still have a few more "I"s to dot and "T"s to cross before we reach the end. I know exactly what you mean by sullying up an ending at the expense of consistency. I've been disappointed by a number of books in which the ending was force and was no doubt forced upon by the editors of the book in question due to it's length. Book readers nowadays are just so impatient and so are reluctant to plow through a 700 or 1,000 page book as they just don't have the time (yeah, I'm saying this while a brand new copy of "Under the Dome" sits idly nearby, haha).

I'll do my best to deliver the goods, buddy. I think you're going to like the ending :D And yes, Everything happens for a reason!


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katyzzz 6 years ago from Sydney, Australia

I think you are a patient man, and very committed to what you do. Well done, dohn.


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Tammy Lochmann 6 years ago

Awesome...I can't wait for the next one. I am interested to see where you go from here.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, katyzzz. I developed a good habit while writing this series. It has been over five months and I'm amazed that I've kept Revenge, Inc. going.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Tammy. Yes, there's still more to come. I just hoped that you and everyone else likes the ending.


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Hi Dohn, sad to say -- I am also waiting for the ending, theres always an ending isnt it? and yes I can feel the characters here, Raynas, and Cody/Marak. I want Cody to fall in love and eventually succumb to his inner feelings hehe, the time you spent writing this one is worth it Dohn,

thank you, thank you and it is warmer here in the afternoon now, but still chilly in the morning, take care and salamat, Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Maita. Yes, there has to be an ending. It's going to feel good on my part to finally write the remaining words I have in store and I of course hope that you and everyone else approves of it. I can't say what will happen, but I will say that all of it is organic and natural just as it should be. Cody/Marak is the best character I've ever had the pleasure of writing about. My next problem will be coming up with a character that will top his!

Ha! It's colder here now--last week we were "teased" with 60+ temperatures. Everyone was walking around in shorts, but perhaps now prematurely! Salamat, Maita.

Dohn


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pisean282311 6 years ago

your work is nice..keep going man...god bless u...


ralwus 6 years ago

I can hope in your rewrite you can cut out a lot of narration and show more action with the characters. You surprised me by turning him into a 'super hero'. I must be honest in my response. Please take no offense. Are you sure you want him to be like a comic book hero?


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks again, pisean282311. I appreciate the encouragement!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hmm...That's a very good question, Charles. You see, I don't think he is a super hero. He's not at all invincible (not impervious to bullets, shurikens, etc.) as the only thing that may deem his as being one is his "super" hearing. But such an ability can in fact be honed through training. So to answer your question, he's not a super hero, just like Batman. His powers really lies in his heart if anything (and dammit if I gave it away, haha).

Thank you so much for your help, my friend. Unless you told me to eff-off, you couldn't offend me! You're a big help and I appreciate all of your criticism.


cosette 6 years ago

i don't blame Cody at all. in fact, i understand completely. but i don't think Rayna will let him slip away from her so easily...


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Okay, I might not sound like I am right now, but I am SCREAMING because I can't say what I want to say as it will give away everything :D Until next time ;) I never mistook you for a fool, buddy :D


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Geez, I just looked over my comments and just realized that I skipped you Paradise7 :( I'm sorry about that. Rest assured that Part 25 won't be the last, but...


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Cris A 6 years ago from Manila, Philippines

Ah the tender moments again, it's nice to see the vulnerability of Cody - he's still human after all despite all the training. And I dare say, it seems you've a lot of resource as far as these "moments" are concerned! Haha

What can I say, there's everything for everybody in your story but it has to come home eventually. But do take the action-packed route! :D


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Heh, in shorts, hehe, it is chilly here today, and off to see your other hubs, waiting for the installment, it is only Thursday, no hurry,

Thank you Dohn, always!

Salamat, Maita


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Cris. Thank you. Those "tender moments" are the residue of my watching cheesy soap operas with my mom when I was a kid and home with the flu or waiting for my cartoons to come on :D The others...Well, let's just say I lived a fascinating life (kinda sorta, lol).

Yes sir, it will come to an end soon and as promised. Who knows, I may actually add some more scenes to this story, like some action sequences that I failed to include (and the heads go rolling). It's great to hear your comments as usual!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You're wearing shorts?! I'm still wearing my winter clothes! It's supposed to flurry tomorrow and the temperature is going to drop into the 30s this weekend and beyond. We were teased last week with 60 degree weather :( Winter's still lingering around unfortunately. I think I'm going to start writing Part 25 today :D Thanks and Salamat, Maita.

Dohn


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valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

Very touching chapter, dohn, and I do believe I am like Cody. I understood where he was coming from 100%. Still, I hope he doesn't end up like that. (: v


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I did my best to incorporate some of my own experiences here. It's definitely a bonus that my readers can somehow empathize with my main character. Thanks again, Valerie.

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