Revenge, Inc. Part 26: A Short Story

Hello everyone and welcome back. As you know, I've been gone for a long time and this is my first hub in about a month. It really does feel good to be writing and hubbing again after all of this time. And in case you didn't know the reason for my absence, I've been transitioning into a new place and working a new job and so haven't had the spare time like I did my first ten months at HubPages. I'm now back to the place I'd like to call home and if you've read my Autumn in New Paltz hub, you'll understand why I'm now happier than I've been in years.

I've really missed all of my friends here on HubPages and really do appreciate all of the correspondence I've received via email and through comments on my hubs about how I'm doing. It really does mean a lot that this bright and vibrant community genuinely cares for one another. I know better than most just how addicting "hubbing" can be and know just how interacting with others whom we've never before met in person can be! Although I haven't been around on HubPages as of late, my thoughts were always on you, my friends and readers. You are exactly why I'm here to begin with. I thank you as always for taking the time out of your busy lives to come over here and read me. I thank you for your patience with this story and thank you for supporting my work. I truly am blessed.

In case you haven't yet, I urge you to please read this work beginning with Part 1. I hope you like what you find. Please click on the corresponding link below to do so.

Thank you again, Cris A for supplying the great pic and potential book cover. You are the man!

Without further ado, I give you Part 26 of Revenge, Inc. As always, your comments are welcome. Thank you for reading!

Revenge, Inc. Part 1

Revenge, Inc. Part 2

Revenge, Inc. Part 3

Revenge, Inc. Part 4

Revenge, Inc. Part 5

Revenge, Inc. Part 6

Revenge, Inc. Part 7

Revenge, Inc. Part 8

Revenge, Inc. Part 9

Revenge, Inc. Part 10

Revenge, Inc. Part 11

Revenge, Inc. Part 12

Revenge, Inc. Part 13

Revenge, Inc. Part 14

Revenge, Inc. Part 15

Revenge, Inc. Part 16

Revenge, Inc. Part 17

Revenge, Inc. Part 18

Revenge, Inc. Part 19

Revenge, Inc. Part 20

Revenge, Inc. Part 21

Revenge, Inc. Part 22

Revenge, Inc. Part 23

Revenge, Inc. Part 24

Revenge, Inc. Part 25

The Light of Saint Augustine

“Are you sure?” the Father asks. The twenty year-old woman nods her head and wipes away a tear from her eye…She had been crying for some time.

“He’s the only man I’ve been with—since my father. You know how I feel about him.” The Father places a hand on his thinning head and sits down on the front pew. He had no choice in the matter; there was a weight on both his mind and heart. After a moment, the woman sits down next to him. “I’m sorry, Father Frank. I didn’t mean for this to happen.” He places his hand on her shoulder.

“Sometimes, things like this are beyond our control. In the eyes of some, it’s very much of a problem. But in the eyes of others, it truly is a blessing as they believe it was ordained by Him.” He smiles. “That is, if you believe in that sort of thing.”

“You know I do.”

“Yes, but I don’t think he does, at least not any more. But whether he does or doesn’t has no bearing on the fact that He does exist or the fact that you are expecting…My son may not believe in Him, but He certainly believes in my son. Are you saddened by all of this?”

“I’m happy that this happened, but I’m sorry that it happened this way. I mean, look who’s the first person I’m breaking the news to! In different circles, I’d be look at very differently—Cody would be looked at differently…”

“Yes, and so would I, which makes three of us. As you know, I can’t consent to the situation leading up to this as a rule. In spite of this, I cannot control the urges and natural impulses of others and neither can He. I can understand loving someone and being loved. Those are emotions that I won’t ever forget. Something can be said about two people who love and care for one another, married or not.”

“I’m not sure if he loves me.”

“In your heart, you know he does. He just has a funny way of showing it.” She smiles.

“I didn’t ask for any of this to happen, Father Frank.”

“There’s no reason to apologize.”

“When he does find out, he might…I’m not sure what he’ll do or say.”

“Rayna, it takes two people to conceive a child. After all of this time, something certainly is driving him to do what he does.”

A Familiar Face - Part 1

“How’d you find me?”

“With a calendar. It’s Haley’s Birthday and besides, I have a good memory. I knew I’d see you here if it really was that you were alive. You see, there’s this fish on the Lake that’s quite different from any other. At the right depth and time, you can catch him. It takes a great deal of time to, but if you’re patient enough, a fella just might get a crack at him.”

“The Stinger Bass.”

“Yep, that’s it. I know more about you than most.”

“But unlike your fish, I’m supposed to be dead.”

“Right, and I’m supposed to be dumb. Four years ago and at the very height of record-breaking crime in Valhalla, a rumor begins to spread about a vigilante that is rarely ever seen and has never been caught on camera. The rumors then turned to legend and pretty soon, the story began pouring in, about how this unknown figure has superhuman strength and quickness like a comic book hero come alive…But I knew better. I know more than I let on and knew exactly what happened six years ago, Cody. Just as soon as I heard that this person was taking the law in his own hands, I became interested and rightly so, because he was really making a mockery of my police force by doing a better job than we were, and for free no less—all the while making us look incompetent and useless, like tits on a bull. But despite all of this, I didn’t dislike you, Marak. I envied you and envied your methods without any due process and without any fear, epitomizing everything every cop on the beat wishes he could do but can’t for many reasons besides breaking the law which he or she swore to protect and uphold.

“Over the years, I began to study you and track your activity and made it a point to find out who you really were. I began asking myself the question, Who is this guy? And asked myself, What would drive someone to become a vigilante in the first place? Needless to say, I found my guy, dead or not, because he was very good at disappearing and with that said, I exhumed your body—albeit illegally—and found instead a Cody MacLaren life-like plasticine figure that Ray Harryhausen would’ve been proud. That was when I knew for sure who this vigilante really was and that he had help from the inside. I knew he was you all this time…

“You see, it’s my job to know what goes on in my own police force—Internal Affairs aside—and I didn’t have to pay anyone to know. You and Peter and certain members of CSI may think you’re so goddamn clever, but not me, that is unless I’m right now talking to a goddamn ghost.” I let out a laugh.

“You never did find her killer did you Felix?”

“But neither did you, Cody. Or is it Marak now? Six years and not one single lead…” Suddenly, my hand began to itch—I wanted to reach for my katana.

“You really shouldn’t push me, Felix. I can’t be responsible for my actions. Should anything happen to you…”

“You might not believe this, but I’m really the only friend you got and one of the few people in this city that you can trust.”

“Are you fucking kidding me, Felix? Trust you? Do you even know how much I don’t like you?”

“No, I’m not fucking kidding you and I don’t really care if you like me or not. The fact still stands that I’m well aware of the things that you aren’t aware of. Open your eyes and take a good hard look at the world around you.”

“I do, every single night and you know that. And how in the hell would you know what I’m aware of or not aware of?”

“Because knowing you, you would’ve acted on this knowledge a very, very long time ago.”

“Yeah? And what would that be?”

“That the men you’re looking for all this time is one and the same.”

One Night in Valhalla

“Hello, Haley.”

“Oh, hi. Are you waiting for my dad?” The man inside the black BMW smiles, revealing two rows of perfectly-straight white teeth.

“Well, no. Not exactly…I’m actually waiting for you. You see, your dad had a date tonight and so asked me if me if I could keep an eye on you so you wouldn’t be alone.” The girl turns to look at her house half-way down the block and sees that all of the lights are off.

“But wait…So why didn’t he tell me?”

“Gosh, Haley. How can I say this?” The man scratches his head while pretending to search for words. “I don’t know…Men are just weird sometimes. Your dad just didn’t want to tell you because he was afraid you’d get upset. Not to mention it’s embarrassing to tell your kid you got a hot date.”

“Why would I get upset? My dad tells me everything.”

“Well, maybe when you get older you’ll understand…It’s kind of like a grown-up thing.” The teenage girl rolls her eyes and looks back at her house.

“I think I’ll be all right by myself. I am old enough, you know…”

“You’re certainly not a kid anymore, Haley, that’s for sure. And I’m confident you can take care of yourself. But I did make a promise to your father—you don’t want me to break my promise to him, now do you?” The girl looks back at the man inside the black BMW.

“Besides, I bought a little fishing boat you gotta see. It’s got everything.” Now, Haley knew the man all too well. Nothing he owned was ever little or affordable. “C’mon, I’ll show it to you.”


“Cross my heart.”

A Familiar Face - Part 2

“I don’t believe you,” I said to him. I thought I was going to be sick. “This is bullshit.”

“Absolutley. It is bullshit, but it’s the truth, pure and uncut.”

“And why the hell should I trust you?”

“That’s easy: I have nothing to gain from this and he has everything to gain. Wanna solve a crime? Look to those who will gain the most as a direct result and you got your guy. With the mayor out of the way, he’ll rise to power as all others lack either the clout or coin to run against him. Let’s not kid ourselves—he’s been planning this for years. Okay, obviously, this isn’t what you wanted to hear. All I’m saying is to check over your sources. Are they reliable? How well can you trust them? Are you being given the facts or are you finding them on your own and on your own terms?”

“How did you know that?” Felix smiles.

“It’s my job to know. If my hunch is correct and if the sum of all fears just so happens to occur, then all of us are fucked. Don’t you see? You’re the key to all of this. You’re the missing piece—the difference maker. Only you can change the fate of this city.”

“So if all of this really is true, then why didn’t you do something about it earlier?”

“I got two very good reasons for you: One; there just isn’t enough evidence to prosecute him. He’s got his cronies to wipe all away all his fingerprints and sweep all the dirt underneath his finest Oriental rugs…The guy just simply doesn’t leave a vapor trail. Two; I can never get close to the guy. I think the President of the United States is easier to assassinate than this guy. Everywhere he goes he’s got an entourage that’s armed to the hilt, his own personal police force.” My temples were pulsating. When at last I spoke again, I was surprised by my own voice: I was yelling at Felix.

“So what are you asking me to do?” But I already knew the answer...It was the only way, yet I needed to hear it from him.

“I want you to kill Peter Billingsley.”

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Tatjana-Mihaela 6 years ago from Zadar, CROATIA

Welcome back Dohn. Hubpages have not been the same without you, I am so glad you are here again!

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Tatjana-Mihaela. Thank you for that. I missed all of you guys and am of course to be back! I hope you're well.

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MyWebs 6 years ago from Sheridan, WY

It is great to have you back and that your so happy with your new life. Welcome back Dohn. I have sure missed you, but never emailed you for some other reasons....

I sure have missed getting my weekly fix of Revenge. Once again this story has taken new twists and turns I never seen coming. You sure have a way of blindsiding us.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, MyWebs. It's great to hear from you and better still that you're still reading this. Again, I'd like to apologize for not posting this sooner. I've been wanting to, yet just didn't as every spare moment I had was seized by something else unexpected.

Thanks for the compliment. With each work of fiction, my aim is to write something that is unexpected by the reader. If it so happens that I can figure out the plot line, then I believe that my reader can and will do the same. Hearing you reiterate just that is so reassuring to hear, so thank you! I hope I can get back on track here! Thank you for coming by to see me ;)

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rprcarz50 6 years ago

Hi again,

Thank you for Hubbing again . I enjoy reading your Hubs .

Great work on this one too.

will be looking for more


As always Also a2z50

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Ron. Thanks for coming by! Thank you for the compliment--it's great to be back and to receive such a warm reception!

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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado

Welcome back, Dohn 121. I enjoyed reading you latest cokllage of stories within a story. Keep up the good work.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, juneakid! This installment wouldn't be official without your comment! It's great to be back and better still to be interacting with all of my friends. Thank you so much.

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Rebecca E. 6 years ago from Canada

welcome back dohn! it is so great to see you back, and out in full force, I am glad that you are back and that your life is going in a direction that is positive.

Now on to the hub, this is great well written and of course something that I love to read. The front cover looks awesome, I swear it will be a bestseller, makr my word dohn, mark my words.

PS, can i please oh pretty please add a link to this installment on my blog???

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Pamela99 6 years ago from United States

Dohn, I am so glad you are back. I thought you were busy getting your book finished and published. You were definitely missed. This was another great episode and I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

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Shalini Kagal 6 years ago from India

Welcome back Dohn - another great episode!

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Rebecca! Thanks so much for the welcome. Yes, it's definitely great to be back and at ALMOST full speed! It's great to hear from you. Best seller eh? That would be a dream to say the least! Maybe and hopefully...

Can you add this as a link?! Absolutely! You're such a sweetie, you know that?

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, Pamela! I'm sorry to disappoint you--no, I didn't get publish (yet) but I really do believe that I will soon. It 's wonderful to hear from you again as always!

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey Shalini! Thank you again! I'm glad you liked it!

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Lily Rose 6 years ago from East Coast

Welcome back!!

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Paradise7 6 years ago from Upstate New York

This story is really rolling now, you can't quit!

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Lily Rose :) It's great to be back.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Paradise7. The end is probably sooner than you think ;)

cosette 6 years ago

omgsh Dohn...

hey yesterday i watched The Lovely Bones. normally films don't stay with me, but that one did. and not in a good way. i wanted justice for that sick freak who murdered that girl, and there was no justice. he got away with it, and her parents never knew what happened to her, not really. i hope Cody slices Haley's killer's head off. one clean, swift swipe is all it will take...

(sorry, just musing. you make it so real. i am absolutely in love with your writing)

~your BFF,


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, buddy. I've never seen The Lovely Bones, but now since you've mentioned it, it doesn't seem like I'm going to watch it at all. I know exactly what you mean and share with you the very same sentiments. I thought a lot about this story and have done my best to not make it predictable, yet make it believable. To hear such comments in which my readers get so entangled and so involved with the entire scope of the story is exactly what I aimed to do in the first place. You just echoed exactly what I wanted sweetie. There is no excuse for rape...

I'm so happy you read this. You know how much that alone means to me ;) You're my pal, you know that right?



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emievil 6 years ago from Philippines

At last. The wait is over! and well worth it too! This is a great installment. Rayna pregnant! I'm really batting for the two of them, I think this may turn around Marak to leave his vigilante life. But the Peter angle - tsk I'm bashing my head why I didn't think about this. But I'm intrigued. If he's the one, why did he send Cody to be trained in the ninja ways and to make him a vigilante? Does this mean Haley's death was just a means to an end for him??? Questions, questions. I hope you're nearing the end of your story dohn (although I'll be really sad when you reach that) because I can't wait to read all the answers to my questions! :) Welcome back buddy.

Keira  6 years ago

Hello my lovely friend Dohn, same as you I didn't come to HP for a long time. I only came back today to read your wonderful work. I was so please when I read my e.mails to see your name. Thank you for part 26, brilliant work as always. I am glad for you that you took a new home and a new job. Sometimes its good to have some changement in life. It helps a lot in a different ways.:) I did missed you, my wonderful friend and writer. Next wednesday I am going to the Sahara for 3 weeks to see my mum. I will read more of your brilliant work on my way back. You are a true friend for me. Thanks my dear Dohn, bless you bro.:)

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

There she is! Hey, Emie. It's great to see that you're back reading this--the gang is almost all back together again! It's also great that 26 parts later, I still got you guessing about how this story will eventually unravel. I actually thought of finishing this story with this installment, but like before, I found that I had too much to resolve and couldn't possibly keep in under 2,000 words and so decided to spread it out. Rest assured, all of your questions (and then some) will be answered very shortly. I too am anticipating the finality of this story...The toughest thing for me is deciding how in which I'm planning to celebrate :D It's great to hear from you!

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, thank you, thank you, Kiera. I'm so happy that you too are back! It makes it all worth my while to be writing here on HubPages again. It's a blessing that have friends like you that make it a point to stop in and read my work. Yes, I've been extremely busy but coming back to receive such a warm reception is worth more than the money I could ever make at my new job! I can't wait to hear your reaction to what will come of this story. I hope that you have a wonderful time visiting your mum. Revenge will be waiting for you! Warmest Regards, my dear friend.

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emievil 6 years ago from Philippines

LOL, good thing I didn't decide to wait until the story is finished, otherwise I might just read the last installment first. That is one of my (weird?) habits, reading the last pages of a novel first before reading the rest. I'll watch out for the end of this story. Then I'll wait for your book to be published :D.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Yes! Good things come to those who wait! I can't bare to ever do such a thing and when a movie comes out that is based on its book form, I have to read the book before I go and see the movie. I did that with Lord of the Rings and wasn't at all disappointed. I really hope that you do like the ending of Revenge, Inc. and when it is all said and done, I believe that you won't be upset ;) If and when this BOOK is published, I'll make sure you get a signed copy, Emie :D

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prasetio30 6 years ago from malang-indonesia

I'll continuing my reading. I love this hub. This show your dedication in writing. Two thumbs up for you. Good work, my friend.

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andromida 6 years ago

Welcome back,Dohn.Everyone was missing you,the way you missed them too.It's lovely to feel your presence in hubpages and your commitment & love to fans make you one of the popular hubbers in a very short time.Wish you good luck with your new job, and of course,wish you a awesome writing career :)

Justine76 6 years ago

Huh, Im stunned. I don't know what else to say, when the shock wears off I'll be back. Awesome as always! Congrats on the move and all. :)

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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Hi Dohn, First of all I am glad you are back, I am smiling, and I am excited ot read parts of the continuation of the story. And yes, all the story and the earlier installment are still vivid in my mind, Now let us see what will happen, if Marak will kill Peter, that is somehting we have to wait and Haley's story is another thing, must be difficult for you writing that one when she is being invited just to be killed later on and then Rayna, she is pregnant, this is getting more exciting Dohn. Let us see what will happen to Marak or Cody as he goes back to Valhalla -- he is some kind fo hero and something might be happening soon, You never lost your touch in writing,

Thank you again Dohn for bringing back your stories and you, Maita

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, prasetio30. It's very good to see that you're still reading this story, my friend. Thank you so much for your kind words. It means a lot.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Andromida. Yes, it's great to be back. Although I'm not on HubPages as frequently, I'm doing the best I can to be here with the little time that I do have. Hearing such comments from you and all my other friends really does make the difference. The job's awesome and so is the support;) Thank you so much my friend.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, sweetheart. It's great to hear from you again. Yep, the job's great and the move went pretty smooth. I really still have a lot of catching up to do and I'm very appreciative of the patience all of you guys have. I'm glad you liked this buddy. I'm sure that I don't have to ask you if you're ready for the next one, right? :D

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Just as soon as I saw that I saw that you posted a comment here, Maita, I smiled. It's always wonderful to hear your reaction after reading any and all of my installments...Can you believe that I thought of this entire plot line back in October and never wrote any of it down until now? To me, there was only one way to tell this story. The flashback with Haley and the unknown man and the first scene here with Rayna and Father Frank wasn't easy and inconsistent because for the first time, Cody isn't the narrator (it went into third-person narration). I just couldn't help it as it was a very important scene.

I can't wait to hear how you react to the next installment! It's great to be back interacting with you and everyone on HP! Don't be a stranger Maita ;) Salamat!


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Lady_E 6 years ago from London, UK

I feel Tensions rising - I wonder if this will give Cody peace from the torment that has followed him for a long time. (that is if he decides to act on Felix's request).

Good to be back on track with the story.

Best Wishes.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Elena. It's great to see and hear from. I think that by now, our reading group is finally complete, with the exception of Cris A and all :) I'm glad as always that you enjoyed this and really hope that the concluding installment is to your liking :D

Warmest Regards,


cosette 6 years ago

yeah, Dohn, don't watch that movie. or that other one called "Precious". not unless you want to carry around bad feelings for days---ugh. i may hub about those two but i'd just as soon forget them.

(and yes, i know. i do i do i doOo...)

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

An anti-hub?! Well, it certainly wouldn't be the first! There are a lot of those types of hubs going around. I think it be worth it if you could make it somehow funny and poke fun at it. If any one could pull it off, it'd be you, babe ;) Thanks, buddy!

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Enelle Lamb 6 years ago from Canada's 'California'

Of course! As soon as I read the ending I knew it was the only logical conclusion - so much for friendship eh? Good to have you back, you were missed, and I do understand about work and transitions - it's hard to juggle everything and not shortchange something!

p.s. I like the Revenge Inc. logo at the bottom ;)

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Enelle. It's great to be back and it's better still to hear from old friends! Yes, the transition has taken just about all of my spare time, but I don't regret my move back. I wouldn't have it any other way!

You're a pretty smart cookie, you know that? I hope you're just about ready for Part 27!

cosette 6 years ago

yeah...the onliest thing is, 'twould be difficult to make any of that humorous. well i love a challenge ;)

i'll study on it. i prolly won't, just because i want to forget. i can't even watch M'onique anymore, and i used to love her ;_; (same with the guy in the other film.) he was in Julie and Julia and The Devil Wears Prada, which were my favorite films but i can't watch them anymore after seeing him as a serial killer.

wow, sorry to be such a downer dude. ;)

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hmmm...Interesting take, cosette. I mean, I can see where you're coming from, but I'm not sure if I'd feel the same way. I think I know who your talking about, but I haven't seen Julie and Julia. I did however see The Devil Wears Prada: Anne Hathaway's a cutie pie ;) The only actor that I might have a problem with nowadays is Christian Bail. I really liked him in The Machinist and American Psycho, but I'm not sure if I like him as Batman or John Connor (The Terminator) as he now thinks he's a Diva. I hate that.

Oh, and your not a downer...Wait until the next installment's published. I just might make your weekend!

BTW, I LOVED your fan mail. It made me laugh :D

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anjalichugh 6 years ago from New York

Hi Dohn! Any plans of compiling a book? That surely would be very interesting for your readers and you would certainly get a wider audience, which you so rightfully deserve. :)

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hi, anjalichugh. Yes! This is definitely a book now, without question. No one is more surprised about it than me as I didn't intend for this to become a book, but I am happy with the prospect of such :D Thank you so much!

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Kaie Arwen 6 years ago

two weeks late, but I haven't gotten behind???? and hey........... books are good! :-D

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Kaie. *Blushes* Yeah, I'm late myself...I made promises that I've broken to come through with Part 27 last Friday but obviously that hasn't happened. I'm doing my best to get it out soon (hopefully in a couple of days). Thanks for the encouragement by the way!


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prettydarkhorse 6 years ago from US

Mis miss miss DOHN< muchos muchos, Maita

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hello, Maita! I missed you too (muchos to be exact).


C in 5 6 years ago

Hi Dohn, great work again. Your story is a pleassure to read.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you for that and thank you for taking part in reading it. I hope that you like the ending.

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Truth From Truth 6 years ago from Michigan

Great writing Dohn, I'm glad to be back and I truly enjoyed this segment of your fascinating story.

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, thanks TFT. I'm happy to hear from you. I hope all's well on your end. Thank you for the comment!

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valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

dohn, you surprised me with that one. I didn't have a clue Peter was the killer. No wonder the Ninja group hated him so much. That a shock! (: v

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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You know, I was fearful in incorporating that subplot, as I thought that a bunch of my readers already figured it out. In any case, you're exactly right Valerie. Thanks again.

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