Revenge, Inc: Part 6: A Short Story

Author's Note:

Hello everyone and welcome. I'm sure that you want to get to the story already, but before you do, I just want to say that this installment was by far the most difficult for me to write for a number of reasons. One of the reasons was attributed to what many writers call, "Writer's Block." I went out for a number of walks, jogged my mind about the story entirely and just brainstormed the entire story over and over again until I thought I got it right then sat down and got into "character." Again, I thank you for your devotion and interest pertaining to this story. I wouldn't have as much motivation to write this without it. I thank you and I hope to see you next Friday for when Part 7 is published.

-ODP

If you haven't already, please read this series from it's beginning:

Revenge, Inc. Part 1

Revenge, Inc. Part 2

Revenge, Inc. Part 3

Revenge, Inc. Part 4

Revenge, Inc. Part 5

"Good service, father."

"No man should ever have to bury his child, Peter. It goes against the natural order of the world."

"I wholly agree. At least Cody was able to avoid having to endure it."

"But it is those that remain on this world that must suffer the pain of loss."

"I am sorry about Haley, Father. I loved her like my own. Whoever did that to her... I can see why Cody or any other father for that matter, would be brimming with absolute rage."

"Violence is not the answer. It is never is. After all, ' An eye for an eye turns the whole world blind...'"

"But aren't you angry, Frank? Don't you want justice from this?"

"Yes, of course I do. I loved my grand daughter very much, just as much as any grand father would love his grand daughter. But I refuse to be consumed by hate. I asked the Holy Father to give me the strength to expel such thoughts of complete and utter hatred and vengeance. Forgiveness is the key here. Too many of us in this world are so quick to pass judgment...That is not His way."

“Are you so quick to forgive the crimes of the wicked?”

“Whoever said I’d forgiven him yet? No. I have yet to forgive…Let me stop before I say something I’ll regret later on. I joined the congregation in order to control such thoughts. It is my belief that in the eyes of the Lord, there is a purpose and a reason for the things that do occur, however extreme or confusing it may be, including Leslie's cancer. Understand, this is not only my belief but His plan as well. Many of my questions have not been answered, but rest assured, His answers don't always come in the form that we come to expect. Now tell me—what have you done to my son?”

Damn. I hope I never have to die again. Having to remain still for just an hour felt like an eternity. Never mind the plain fact that death is forever, or that you go to heaven, or hell, or come back as toilet bowl, if that's what you believe. Whatever. To me, death was a lot of wasted tears that causes more suffering for the bereaved...The funny thing about death is that you never really know if that person would have shown up at your funeral, or cried, or brought you flowers or rice-crispy snacks (if that's what you prefer, like me, but who's ever heard of a guy eating as his own funeral?).

For your Ultimate Going Away party, what would you want? So you can't know, because you're dead and aint' that a bitch? And it's not like you can cry for them too in return and out of courtesy when it's their turn to croak--that is unless you're me. I got to see everyone who gave a shit for poor old me. I’d of cried too, were it not that I wasn’t so damn busy playing dead like Fido. But I’ll bet my everlasting soul that the majority of those tears were for Haley and not for me. She’s the one that's dead for real and she can’t be brought back. I'd give my own life just so she could live a full one.

You should’ve read the headlines that day. It made front page news the day after I died. The Valhalla Journal was good about splashing both Haley and I on it’s front page, which heading read: “Double Tragedy. Daughter homicide, father suicide.” The story was an entire three pages in which begins with Adrianna’s death after giving birth to Haley all the way up to my supposed emotional collapse from losing everything and ending it with me swinging like a pendulum from a cross-beam in my own home. What a wonderful world we live in. What a wonderful fucking mess.

Haley’s picture was just recently taken for her school yearbook. As for me, mine was the most recent one, when I was declared “dead” by the coroner. Our pictures side-by -side was the epitome of happiness and sadness. I must admit, my death was really convincing and no expense was spared. I gotta hand it to Peter and Freddy and his CSI team for making it look so damn real. Were I not alive, I’d think I was dead too. So please, Emmy Awards all around.

But I’m sure that these same people went to work the very next day. I’m sure that when they went home and after making love to their wives, they slept soundly and without any disturbances. I’m sure that the people that read the news article while reading about our now-completely-dead-family over coffee they shook their heads or shrugged their shoulders and said to themselves, “How horrible,” and thanked their lucky stars that it wasn’t their daughter, their wife, or their sister that was raped and killed and thrown into a fucking lake. And they’ll thank their lucky stars that it wasn’t them that decided to use rock-climbing rope to test the strength of their own neck to make the suffering stop and end the suffocation of questions such as, “Why did this happen to me?” or "What did I do to deserve this?" I know it all too well.

“So what happens now?” I asked Peter after wards. We didn’t think this far ahead. A plan to kill one’s self effectively takes a lot of planning, believe me.

“Well, you’re dead. It’s what you wanted, isn’t it?”

“Yes, but where do I go?”

“You have to disappear, Cody. It really doesn’t matter where you go, as long as you remain dead…” Peter got all dreamy-eyed. He was up to something.

“What is it?”

“I’ll tell you in the morning. You can stay in the guest house tonight. Everything you need is there. I’ll make sure that you’re not disturbed. I’ll see you in the morning.”

That night I had the worst dream. And the thing about it is that it wasn’t a dream—it was a past occurrence from years ago. I woke up to the sound of Haley screaming at the very top of her lungs. I got up out of bed as fast as I could and grabbed a baseball bat nearby and ran to her room and practically knocked down her door:

“Haley? What is it?” I asked her. But Haley continued screaming. I went over to her and wrapped my arms around her. “Listen, sweetie. I can’t help—Daddy can’t help you if you don’t tell me what’s wrong." Her tears soaked my bare neck while embracing me.

“Monsters, daddy!" She said between sobs. "They’re monsters everywhere!”

“No sweetheart, you just had a bad dream. Monsters aren’t real.”

“No! They’re real monsters everywhere daddy, you have to believe me.”

“Okay, all right…I believe you, Haley.”

“Make the monsters go away daddy!" She was crying harder now. "Promise me you’ll make them go away.”

“Yes, I’ll make the monsters go away. I won’t let them hurt you.”

“Do you promise, daddy?”

“Yes, I promise.”

And then I woke up to the sound of Peter who was calling me over me and over again.

“What are you, dead?” I’ve been looking throughout this house for you.”

“Blame yourself, asshole. You own it.”

“You have to leave in fifteen minutes.”

“Why? Where am I going?”

“Well, where did you think you were going to go after you died, heaven?”

“No, the other place.”

“Don’t worry. You’ll like it. I’ll keep in touch with you while you’re gone. Your father knows everything so don’t worry about him. Everything is taken cared of and under-wraps.”

“Thanks, brother.” Peter smiled and said nothing. And just like that, It wouldn't be for another two years before I'd see him again.”

Exactly fifteen minutes later, a guy in a Maybach pulls up to the house and I hop in. About fifteen minutes after that, we arrive at a Cessna which housed private jets you’ve probably never seen before. I was ushered over with my two bags and got on board.

When we landed, I became a bit excited. The place we landed was a lush island paradise. Before my jet landed, we circled around it and I was able to see a handful of waterfalls within. Was I going to be living here? I thought. Things don’t really get better than this. When I got up to walk out of the jet, I half-expected to get one of those flowery necklaces, but everything came to a screeching halt from there on. I snapped back to reality. A Mister Miyagi-like man stood waiting to greet me.

“Welcome to Jirai Island, Cody” he said in Miyagi-speak. “My disciples call me Master Akira.”

“Nice to, uh, meet you, Master Akira.” He smiled at me.

“I understand that you read many books on Aikido, Judo, Jiu-Jitsu, and Karate?”

“Yeah, Peter must have told you all of this right?” He bowed his head. “So tell me, what am I doing here?” He smiled again.

“To learn everything those books failed to teach you.”

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emievil 7 years ago from Philippines

Wow. I've been meaning to read your Revenge, Inc. stories but I thought I'll leave it for a time when I can read it in leisure. And man, was I correct. I just read parts 1 to 6 of your Revenge, Inc. and I can say I'm truly hooked. You should publish this dohn, it's a great great story. I can't wait for the 7th installment. Looks like Cody will have his training :).

By the way, congrats for your 600 fans. I can see 800 to 900 fans by end of this year, what d'ya think? :)


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks so much, Emie, for not only being the first to post, but for reading the entire series so far. Like I said, this installment was very difficult to me to right (I see a couple of flaws I have to fix). I'm glad that you liked it. Fan approval is all that I ask.

I'm still stunned by the amount of fans that I have...Geez, the numbers always seem so lofty coming from you! Maybe 800 (if you say so) :D

Thanks so much, Emie! Congrats on becoming a Revenge, Inc. fan ;)


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prettydarkhorse 7 years ago from US

Hi Dohn, It is nice reading this part again, as I am following the story and eagerly waiting for the next installment again, I am hooked and I just like the itensity you put in your work.

I am a fan forever!

you have a good day!Maita


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emievil 7 years ago from Philippines

Of course, you'll get the 800. Have I been wrong so far when it comes to your fan base :D. Flaws? What flaws? They look perfect to me :).

Oh and if you decide to publish this, I get a free copy with your autograph. okay?! :)


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Pretty. Thanks as always. I'm so glad that you are following this story. Like I said before, this was the most difficult installment for me to write about, due to the organizing that I had to do. It's great to hear your feedback as always! Is Maita your real name???

Ha! I can't help but to get a bit worried whenever you make a prediction, as I feel the pressure to gain so many new fans (new blood). But like you said, you've not been wrong yet. Eh, those flaws were small, but I'm still tweaking them a bit--no biggie. And yes, you will get a copy, along with some of those donuts I promised :D


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queenbe 7 years ago from NY

This story just keeps getting better and better. I am enjoying the thrill of the ride.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I'm so happy to hear that, queenbe. I'm doing my best to tell this story the way I would have wanted to hear it. I appreciate your reading it as always.


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dusanotes 7 years ago from Windermere, FL

Dohn, there's no question about it. You are a truly gifted writer. I, too, have written some fiction. I have a novel going - not done or published yet. But for my last Hub Page article I reviewed a book by Donald Maass about writing breakthrough novels. There are some good ideas there - even in my article - which is a synthesis of the book. Here's the link if you're interested. Meanwhile, keep writing. You're good, real good. Don White

http://hubpages.com/community/Can-Learning-How-Nov...


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Don. Thank you for that. I really hope that you complete your novel, no matter what events in your life may get in the way. I followed this very same premise and got my novel completed, albeit 8 years from the time I first started writing it. However, along the way, I realized the importance of my completing it and perhaps became a better writer as a result of it. I'll certainly check out the link, Don. Thank you for the feedback!


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girlpower 7 years ago from eugene oregon

still enjoying your story, eagerly await the seventh installment, dont worry about writers block, if you feel like writing, write, if not dont, but it will come back to you the urge to write again, in fact dont put pressure on yourself to do the next part weekly, just do it whenever it comes to you or twice a month, we will wait, we wont stop wanting to hear the next part, enjoy yourself ..girlpower


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, girlpower. I'm working on a deadline that I've set for myself. I'm doing my best to get this done and want to write as if I have an editor hounding me (as practice). I appreciate your patience and your advice. I'm glad that your enjoying it and hope to see you all the way until its end! Thanks for your support.


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juneaukid 7 years ago from Denver, Colorado

A great installment. I think your story is getting better and stronger as time goes by--you may want to go back to earlier parts once you've finished to give them a retouch. Looking forward to the next installment!


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Paradise7 7 years ago from Upstate New York

A great installment, I agree with juneaukid. And I was waiting for it, too. Whatever you did, worked!


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@juneaukid-Yes, I really plan to go back and give my previous work a touch-up. I cringe at some of the words I wrote (but not too often!). Thank you so much for the comment! I appreciate it.

@Paradise7-Thank you, as always! All I did was take my time and eased my mind! I just wish I could hurry up and do it ;)


Keira  7 years ago

Hi bro, I follow the story with a lot of enjoyement, thanks for part6, can`t wait for next part. You are one of my favorit writer. Love it. See you very soon, my good friend.:)


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, thanks, Keira. That's great to hear! Thank you for all of your support and and readership, my friend. I hope to hear from you soon.


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Enelle Lamb 7 years ago from Canada's 'California'

Another great installment dohn! This is shaping up to be a really impressive read! And congrats on the fans - holy cow 606 as I write this - and only after 4 months! Most excellent!


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you for following this story, Enelle. I really appreciate it. The comments that have poured in have been overwhelming thus far. I'm still amazed by how many fans I have--no one's more surprised than me. Thanks as always, Enelle!


Duchess OBlunt 7 years ago

dang! This just keeps getting better and better!

Please make sure you meet your deadline, and then GET IT PUBLISHED! It's a great fiction


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Tatjana-Mihaela 7 years ago from Zadar, CROATIA

Do not be surprised with so many fans, you deserve them...

The Girl From My Avatar is definetely my favorite Hub, but I am romantic soul, he, he...

Thumbs up for Rev.Inc, by the way, my cats would not love to see your photo, but I thinks is great, it makes me smile everytime I come to Rev.Inc. Hubs...


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, Duchess! Maybe one of these days, a literary agent will magically appear and sweet talk me into a deal, who knows :D Thanks so much for following this story. Part 7 on Friday :)

Thanks, Mihaela! Thank cat sure does look fluffy to touch, eh? I'm a dog person but over all, I love all animals--I guess that I'm an animal lover first and foremost. Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed "Rayna."


Am I dead, yet? 7 years ago

Oh yeah baby! This is the perfect topper from an extreme weekend of gaming!!!! Dohn--I started out mad at you for 'killing' off the main character--then realized w00t he ain't dead! The ending is so freaking sweet! Ha! Now he can become a Ninja Assassin!

'...to learn everything those books failed to teach you.'

oh yeah baby---freaking sweet ending!


Justine76 7 years ago

I'll have to come back to this. So far it looks as though you sucessfully got over your writers block. But, its kinda too hard to read at this hour right now, and I dont feel like crying anymore. Your such a good writer, to be able to do that to people!! Ill be back, thanks for keeping it up Dohn.


Useful Knowledge 7 years ago

Dohn,

WOW! Thiis is really coming along. It has grabbed me and I can't wait to see what happens next. I really think you could have a best selling novel here. I can't wait until next Friday.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

@AIDY-No, AIDY, Cody/Marak isn't dead quite yet and NEITHER are you ;) In a Japanese anime series that I followed years ago, fans were so upset with the way the creator/artist ended the series that death threats were issued! They were so bad that the creator/artist had no choice but to make about 4 different alternate endings to suit/suffice the urgings of the millions of fans worldwide (See Neon Genesis Evangelion). I don't want to have to go through that myself :D Thanks as always! I'm happy that you're reinvigorated by this series!

@Justine76-That's fine, DM. I guess I'll get two comments from you then! Did I make you cry because of my horrible writing??? Sheesh! I sure hope not! I look forward to hearing from you again of course and hope that you are in better spirits and that you feel better.

@Useful Knowledge-I thought you'd like what transpired. The plot certainly is thickening. Of course you know that I'm doing my best to get this story its installments every week and I'm struggling a bit, but am meeting my deadline. It's a challenge no doubt, but I believe that it's healthy for me to do so. Thanks as always and yes, Friday is part 7...I'm glad that I got your attention!


Justine76 7 years ago

Ok, Im made it. No, I cry because its so good. I hope you dont take offense to 2 comments. Its the bit about people and the news, that got to me. I see the news every morning and occasionaly I end up fighting with people about it. Im like...this is horrid, someone somewhere is going thru hell, someone they love has just died, and your sitting here eating fucking cake, and watching out of morbid curiousity!! I have seen loved ones tragedies spilled calously in black and white, on the front page. The whole revenge story cant happen without pain, and you write it all so clearly. Great job, looking forward to the next chapter!


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Shalini Kagal 7 years ago from India

Dohn - this just gets more and more gripping as it progresses - just can't wait for the next one!


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

It's good to see you back, DM. I can understand the overwhelming grief that comes from watching the news. There really is a lot of horrible dealings throughout the world. Just yesterday, I watched a special on the Mumbai terrorist attacks and was absolutely disheartened by all of it. There really is a lot of evil in this world and with that being said, Revenge, Inc. is my response to it. Sometimes I don't even watch the news I'm so sick of it. Thanks for dropping by! I'm glad you did and if anything else, I'll see you next Friday or so for when part 7 makes its debut.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

That's wonderful to hear, Shalini! It's great to hear that so many readers like it so far. Thank you for following this story!


cosette 7 years ago

again, I am RIVETED. I'm like "is this the next John Grisham I am friends with?". sheesh Doh, you're going to be HUGE.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

You, not ever that I doubted my ability in getting published, only my resolve. I do believe that I will get published soon and it's with that belief that carries me through each and every waking day. I have so many plans that I do want to carry out and know that it's only a matter of time. It's you guys, my audience that's rooting for me that is integral to the entire scheme of things. Keep it up! Thanks, so much cosette. You play no small role in all of this!


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Tatjana-Mihaela 7 years ago from Zadar, CROATIA

Dohn, please help me. I need Ryan Hupfer`s e-mail....Donna did not give me it, he is not responding on e-mail through HP yet, through which I cannot send him attachments.

Donna is also not responding.

Thank you very much, I need to send the interview with Michelle to him....


ralwus 7 years ago

Nice twist Dohn. Surprising also and I like it, a new dimension to the story. It shall be very interesting to see how you knit this into finality. Kudos on your fine skill.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Charles. Thank you as always for reading this. I'd like to think that you are a integral part of "my audience" whenever I make that reference! I already have the end of this series in mind and have known it since I published Part 2. The challenge now is of course to construct that bridge to reach that last part! I think you'll like it...


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Lady_E 7 years ago from London, UK

Thanks again Dohn. I'm beginning to picture the events as I read it. It's like reading an interesting film. (you know what i mean)lol. Cheers.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Hey, Lady_E. Thanks for the comment. The way in which you are reading this series is exactly the way that I'm picturing it before writing it. I like how it's going so far! Thank you again


ralwus 7 years ago

Yes, I am part of this whole thing now. Take your time, it can't be rushed.


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

That's great to hear, Charles. Thank you for that. I hope to get Part 7 in by tomorrow evening just as promised...We'll see what happens, as I'm working on it right now as I'm typing this.


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Zsuzsy Bee 7 years ago from Ontario/Canada

As the saga unfurls... I'll be back for the next installment and the next and the one after that.

regards Zsuzsy


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, Zsuzsy Bee! That's great to hear.


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Truth From Truth 7 years ago from Michigan

Great work Dohn121, well put together


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thank you, TFT! I'm glad you think so.


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rmcrayne 6 years ago from San Antonio Texas

Now we're crossing secret agent with karate kid. Should be interesting!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Ha! I never had that in mind. Just wait and see...


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Mystique1957 6 years ago from Caracas-Venezuela

Good,good, good...This one almost made me jump at chapter 8 and spoil my fun. I savor it one at a time. Hey Bro, don`t think your story is not compelling, it is great material, but I just like to read slowly, that`s all!

If I can`t resist you`ll notice it in your comments, hehehe!

I loved this plot twist!

Domo arigatou, Dohn-san!

warm regards and blessings, my brother!

Al


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

I can understand, appreciate, and respect the fact that you are reading it slowly, Al. I actually don't like it when people read my material too fast (in front of me) as it shows to me that they are too hasty and couldn't really give a hoot about what I'm trying to convey to them. You're doing fine, my friend! You are always welcome to read however you like :D

Thanks as always! Cheers!

Dohn


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Freya Cesare 6 years ago from Borneo Island, Indonesia

Heee... chose to become real samurai already? He live in fast track! Hmmm... can't wait to read more, but have to go for now. See you later, Dohn. You are great writer!


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Um...You'll see. Patience! There's much more for you to discover in the oncoming installments, I assure you. Thanks again, Freya. Talk to you soon :D


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loveofnight 6 years ago from Baltimore, Maryland

every time i think i know the direction of the story you take another turn, thumbs up from me.......thx 4 share


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks so much for the compliment, loveofnight as always. I do my best to keep everyone guessing. So far, it sounds as if many readers were taken by surprise by the plot twists so far. I hope to hear from you soon ;)


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valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

Good so far. This could be a kung fu type movie. LOL. Good reason for revenge; then we get to see this guy stomp the killer's butt and leave it where the sun don't shine. Anyway, I am enjoying the suspense. You are also good at always leaving your reader hanging, waiting for what will come next.


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York Author

Thanks, Valerie :) I hope that in time, you'll discover that this is potentially something more than just that. I can definitely see this in the form of a movie--I hope that Hollywood does call someday for the rights. Thank you so much for the compliment.

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