Hiding

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There’s an endless supply

of secrets and signs

and a terrible shortage

of places to hide

and people who can read them.


So leave

the shades drawn against

the mid morning sun

with a dirty shaft of light angling

in where the vinyl is ripped

and pulled crooked.


Turn your face

towards a fenceless place

with plenty of sky

and wasted space

where you’re hiding

--and inspired

and for a moment

if you’re lucky

you’re a child

with one hand on the wheel

hair whipping wind-wild

your secrets stretching out

across the cattle checkered miles

until you hit the vanishing point

where the importance of night-city voices

dissolve into scattered, lonely noises

strewn amidst rain beaten rocks

that shiver in stunned silence.


But in the unforgiving glare

of a noon-sharpened sky

shameful scars and abuses

are hard to disguise.


Wait for a sign or until twilight

when the bruised horizon sags

dusk heavy with day’s flight

and every imperfection

beneath it grows slight

softly rendered in fading light

—merely incidental.


Cloaked in the camouflage

of merciful night

in an empty pocket

tucked out of sight

there’s still time to hide

in a fenceless place

where truth and lies share

the same shadow of space

and are nearly erased

by the colorless grace

that blurs them into one.



© 2010 susan beck

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Sunny Riley 4 years ago

I found this one most intriguing of all. :)


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Steele Fields 5 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Thanks, Randy. To be honest, I was not yet ready to explore the topic more directly at the time. This one was kind of a prelude to the new one. But I'm glad you read it anyway:)


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Steele Fields 5 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Thanks, Randy. To be honest, I was not yet ready to explore the topic more directly at the time. This one was kind of a prelude to the new one. But I'm glad you read it anyway:)


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

This was not as arresting as Unraveling and more cryptic but a delight to read in its own right. I loved this little cluster of words: "bruised horizon sags."


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Steele Fields 5 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

YOu are a wise man, Larry. I think I'll take your advice,lol. Anyway, thanks for reading and for commenting. Cheers right back at you, Sue


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maven101 5 years ago from Northern Arizona

This is a wonderful, touching, reaching poem that flows like a river of liquid gold...I have ridden on that road, and have come to the same conclusion:

" there’s still time to hide

in a fenceless place

where truth and lies share

the same shadow of space

and are nearly erased

by the colorless grace

that blurs them into one ".

Indeed, in a changing world, can we even have truth..? I suppose if you have a mandate for truth then truth will out, except sometimes we are lacking that clarity to discern the difference...

My motto: In vino veritas...drink enough wine and you can believe anything, and speak nothing but the truth...Cheers, Larry


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Ralwus-you are such a widely respected presence here on Hubpages and it is an honor to have your comments. Thanks for reading between the lines.


ralwus 6 years ago

Ripped vinyl is a clue to the secret. Hiding from the one who did the dirty deed I suppose. Anyway, good stuff from the heart I feel.


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Jaggedfrost 6 years ago

lol thanks. I thought it worked out well enough that I end up editing it for a more general audience and making a hub out of it. I was moved by your post and it made me think of my own past with such abrasion from the world in general and I couldn't help myself lol.


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Jagged: very cool poem- I'm guessing that there are many more who can relate to this theme. Thanks for the poetic response.


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Jaggedfrost 6 years ago

Perhaps the scars are worth the vista

the pain worth the place you find to hide

sometimes the words you use are enough

a mask the obscure the great divide

People, to gratify self

place themselves unyielding

judges of beauty when

their noses block

all observation

swinging out wildly

at those whose qualities cause

them to question their own

way of not seeing things

ripping blankets

off of children with beards

Let the warrior not be shamed by his blade

the poet embrace their pen

be satisfied as they satisfy

tripping over each other

at times but often alone

It doesn't do to repine the world

dwelling on facts that will not alter

We exist for our own sake

developing at our own pace

judged on our own merits

mercy shown to the imaginationless masses

returned in grace

that brings us eventually home.


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Lady_E 6 years ago from London, UK

I enjoyed reading it. Thanks.


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

thanks, ahorseback-- think i'll ride along.


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ahorseback 6 years ago

Steele , this is the best! I am taken by your words to a place in montana on a lonely road trip , makes me want to go. I vote this up.


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

thanks eanesthub-- that's what poetry is supposed to do so I'm very encouraged by your response.


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earnestshub 6 years ago from Melbourne Australia

Beautiful. I felt it rather than read it. Truly powerful poetry.


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Thanks, Nellie. It was very astute of you to analyze the poem so closely. Many people comment on poems but your comments are always insightful and it is obvious that you take your time reading them. I really appreciate that and your kindness.


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Nellieanna 6 years ago from TEXAS

I perceived it was about abuse but it seems to drift between physical and mental abuse. The "bruised horizon" clues me that it's at least partly physical, though of course bruising need not be merely physical. Though some of the imagery is obviously so private that it remains secret even when exposed, it's a powerful poem.


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

I guess everyone can relate to having secrets they want to hide. You made my day as well!


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epigramman 6 years ago

...we are all hiding from something or perhaps someone .... again my friend your writing always provokes and touches deep feelings from within me.

So good to hear from you and this reading of (two) made my day!


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

N0- it's a reference to art-- it's the most distant point in a painting, the furthest visible point, the place where the image vanishes into the horizon. I just always thought it was a cool name that it evoked a strong image. Anyway, thanks for reading, Tom!


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Tom Rubenoff 6 years ago from United States

"... one hand on the wheel..."

"... bruised horizon sags..."

and so many more amazing images.

Do you reference the film, "Vanishing Point" ?


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Hi there attemptedhumour:It doesn't maatter as long as it affects you in some way, I guess. But for the record, it's about abuse-- the dark secret so many keep and so few manage to break away. Thanks for your comments and for reading twice!


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attemptedhumour 6 years ago from Australia

I read your poem twice and even though i didn't fully understand a lot of it, it's a bit like standing on a hill top with your eyes closed and allowing a warm breeze to flow over you. So who cares what all those lines are about, well you probably do but i loved it on that hill top. Cheers


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Unedited, they are thinner, the meter and rhyme are looser, the images undeveloped. I usually start with one good line ( I write them down whenever they come to me and use them as needed) With this, I wrote the first four lines and did not change them. The rest came over the course of about a week. It took many hours to finish, as I am a stickler about rhythm and am always searching for the perfect beat. I also used a lot of rhyme in this poem, more than usual. So it took me longer because I didn't want to force the meaning too much. It has a rhyme definite scheme, unlike much of my other stuff with more random schemes. Anyway, thanks so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate the kind words and support.


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Pearldiver 6 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time.

Hi Steele.. I love your works... what do they look like unedited? lol. Good Luck with your writing.. you have a special talent.. may it take you to great heights.


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Thanks, Mickey!


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Micky Dee 6 years ago

"Turn your face towards a fenceless place"- It's all good but that one juts out! Yo Steele! Write on Girl!


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Steele Fields 6 years ago from drexel hill,pa Author

Wayne Brown, you are such a loyal follower. I appreciate your kind words more than you know. Poets are a rather overlooked breed and as I don't get much traffic, I'm always so surprised and pleased when someone appreciates something I wrote. Thank you, my friend.


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Wayne Brown 6 years ago from Texas

Said only the way Steele Fields can say it...excellent and beautiful in every way. This one tugs at that part of all of us who want a bit more space in our life surroundings or at least think we do. Thanks for sharing! WB

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