Stuck

I broken, I’m tired, I’m finished, I’m done

Come save me, come change me, I’m through

Move me on.

I’m stuck in a spot that I can free, yet I stay here never changing

Yet complaining why always me?

I’m tired cant fight, wont struggle, won’t go

Stuck in a boat with two oars yet wont row.

The waves began crashing, yet there still I stay

There’s a light at the dock calling the way

Can’t listen just won’t because that’s what I do.

I sit in this boat miserable with you.

I close my eyes as the boat still sways,

Salt water and bad decisions coating my face.

I keep my eyes shut, were my dreams seem so real, till the rocking subsides

Then I realize I’m still here.

So I put on a smile, and you where one to

But we both are half hearted, refusing to try

So we sit with are oar, and keep asking why.

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richtwf 5 years ago

If two work together then anything which seems impossible becomes possible. But anyone being half-hearted in a team will be like an anchor and act like a dead-weight needing to be carried. A chain is only as strong as its weakest link! Two weak links then the chain won't last very long!

Thanks for sharing and God bless.


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tnderhrt23 5 years ago

Sara, this is an awesome piece! I so relate! "I’m tired cant fight, wont struggle, won’t go Stuck in a boat with two oars yet wont row. The waves began crashing, yet there still I stay There’s a light at the dock calling the way

Can’t listen just won’t because that’s what I do.

I sit in this boat miserable with you." I have been in that boat, a few times, really...This poem struck me in the gut! Great job!


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Sarah Writes 5 years ago from California Author

Thank you so very much, I wrote this about six months ago feeling so broken down and frustrated with myself. In life it seems we have so many options yet we choose the same ones then wonder why were unhappy. It’s great to hear I’m writing relatable material, I hope you come back soon!


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epigramman 5 years ago

..well I'm stuck on you and I must put this one in my poetry jukebox of favorites so I can play it over and over again .......


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vietnamvet68 5 years ago from New York State

you have put this together beautifully my dear. I think at one point in our lives we have all been in that boat. God Bless


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Sarah Writes 5 years ago from California Author

Thank you both for your encouraging words, at first I was a bit hesitant to put stuck out for everyone to read, simply because I didn’t know if anyone would understand what I was talking about. Turns out many of us have been stuck in a boat!


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

This is tough. Hopefully your situation is better now.

I like your writing but I'm a stickler for details and I want to point out a few minor things. My main concern is that poets aren't given much respect as it is these days and writing that isn't properly proofread only gives the naysayers more ammo against us. The first line: "finish" should probably have an "ed" at the end. Fourh line: "hear" should be "here". 14th line: "were" should probably be "where".

Don't take it personal. It's just simple fixes that will give your poetry more credibility.


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Sarah Writes 5 years ago from California Author

All fixed thanks. Putting my work up on Hub space I expected all types of critics good and bad. I feel if you are going to post your writing on an open forum you really can’t be offended, so no worries there. Actually thank you for taking the time, to go line by line and proof read. I am awful at grammar, and rely heavily on spell check, as you can see this doesn’t always work out for me. Also I try not to think to heavily about what naysayers think about my work. No I don’t want to be known as the girl on hub space who writes emo poetry that no one can read, but at the same time people will always nay say the human race is good at it.


deadlysweets 5 years ago

loved it so inspirational

the waves began to crash but their i still stayied wow sounds like something ive written and felt many times before


Doug Turner Jr. 5 years ago

Thanks for posting my comment and being receptive to criticism. I'm a fan of your poetry, otherwise I would ignore the typos and your hubs entirely. I just want to see the best product put forward. Good luck and keep writing. I'll drop in again, soon. Too-da-loo.


Angie  5 years ago

This is so good. I have been there and st times still feel like I am there. Things have a funny way of working out. It's great keep up the good work


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Sarah Writes 5 years ago from California Author

Hey Angie, you’re so right things do have a funny way of working themselves out, and I’m sure whatever it is you going through will get better. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, it means a lot to me when people take the time to do so!


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2uesday 5 years ago from - on the web, I am 2uesday.

This flowed as I read it, so I enjoyed reading this poem.

I think by writing you may find a way of writing yourself to a happier place, it sometimes works when I am feeling low.


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Sarah Writes 5 years ago from California Author

Thanks 2uesday for stoping by and reading, so true even though a lot of my work is a little sad when I am done writing I do feel better.


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arb 5 years ago from oregon

Typo's and spelling are gifts to a writer, but, first they must find a writer worthy of the wait. It appears they have. Nicely done!


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Sarah Writes 5 years ago from California Author

Thats a good way of looking at my typo's! thank you :)

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