Haiku you just for you

you

i love you


i need you


i want you


come back now


turn around


return


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Deborah Demander 6 years ago from First Wyoming, then THE WORLD

I like this.

Namaste.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you for coming by and commenting first on my first Haku. Glad you like it Namaste.


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Alexander Mark 6 years ago from beautiful, rainy, green Portland, Oregon

I don't know how to make one of those just like I am not good at writing poetry, but I know a good one when I see it. I love this. In my humble opinion, I think it's great.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Alexander, I always appreciate your kind comments.


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De Greek 6 years ago from UK

What's this? You have decided to write agin? I am so glad, Angel Face!

And this is so sweet... :-)


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks DG. Sometimes the urge to write is so strong I have to do it or burst!! Thanks for stopping by.


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Merlin Fraser 6 years ago from Cotswold Hills

Now I'll have to go Google Haku....

I just though it was a short Hub...

Pleased to see you back with us, its been a long dry spell !


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

True Merlin, true. Thanks for the kind comment. I enjoy Haku


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Kaie Arwen 6 years ago

Haiku- always fun to write! Di you mind if I use this as an example in the classroom. The children absolutely love doing this, but sometimes like everything else, the better the examples........ the more understanding they are of the concept. Thanks for this ! Kaie


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hello Kaie. I would be honored for you to use this as an example for your children. I would love to see some of the results. Perhaps you could write a hub about it? Thanks for stopping by.


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ek ellis 6 years ago

Right to the point, I love Haiku's


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

It is a new venture for me but I love the concept too. Thanks for coming by and your kind comment


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billyaustindillon 6 years ago

Very nice and gets right to the soul of the message.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you Billy. I appreciate your kind comment


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Hello, hello, 6 years ago from London, UK

Simple words but very expressive. Thank you.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you enjoyed it Hello hello.


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AuriFin 6 years ago

beautifully simple - just the right way to reach someone :)

(an opinion of one, not skilled in writing poetry, but loving to read it). Thank you for sharing, Gypsy Willow.

Aurifin


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Your opinion is very valuable Aurfin. I truly appreciate your comment. Thanks for stopping by.


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saddlerider1 6 years ago

I hope whomever this to the point message was sent to he/she turned around and returned to you:0) Nicely done.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

He did! Thanks for coming by and reading my haiku spell!


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maven101 6 years ago from Northern Arizona

Very nice first effort...Simple, direct, and expressive...This is a different " haiku " than most other forms that require a certain rigidity of syllabic expression...Although it lacks the disciple of construction it conveys an immediacy to the poems' intent...I enjoyed reading this aloud, with your implied emphasis...Thanks for sharing this with us, I am looking forward to more of the same...Larry


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Larry. It was written from the heart.


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Girish1000 6 years ago from India

i like it


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for coming by and commenting Girish. Glad you like it!


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FGual 6 years ago from USA

Hello Gypsy. Well, this is so different I did not know what to make of it. It is raw and powerful, as in less is more. Thank you for sharing.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi FGual, that was the intent. it is new to me too but I loved writing it. Thanks for stopping by.


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jacobkuttyta 6 years ago from Delhi, India

Nice picture

Thanks


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you came by jacobkuttya. Thank you.


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KoffeeKlatch Gals 6 years ago from Sunny Florida

It was beautiful - you got straight to the point.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you liked it KK Gals. Thanks for the kind comment.


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net2010 6 years ago

enjoyed visiting your site - great work - awesome


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks net2010 for the kind comment.


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Money Glitch 6 years ago from Texas

Very nice. You know how the saying goes, If you love someone then set them free, and if they come back to you then it is meant to be. :)


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

How true Money Glitch, well he did! Thanks for dropping by and the kind comment.


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Dim Flaxenwick 6 years ago from Great Britain

Huge depth of feeling in so few words. Beautiful. x


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for reading and commenting Dim. xx


johnnynaakea 6 years ago

Beautiful! Aloha from Hawaii!


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Johnny, I appreciate your comment and your visit from beautiful Hawaii.


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Minnetonka Twin 6 years ago from Minnesota

Short and definitely sweet. Thanks for a great Haiku.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for reading. I appreciate your comment. Poetry doesn't have to be long, does it?


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epigramman 6 years ago

..well this is just for you - please accept my humble thanks for visiting me and making my day a happy one.

Your words here are so soft and sweet and true - that it could only come from someone as nice as you!


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad I could make your day happy. Thanks for your kind comments.


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febriedethan 6 years ago from Indonesia

This is new to me Gypsy Willow, but the picture is awesome and make me want to learn more about Haiku. Thank you for sharing this :)


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for stopping by febriethan. I appreciate your kind comment. The picture was taken in Wales on Dinas Island in Pembrokeshire.


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James A Watkins 6 years ago from Chicago

I enjoyed your lovely Haiku poem. It is straight to the heart of the matter. No pussy footing around. Well done!


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

I am not a pussy footer James! Thanks for coming by!


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Ladybird33 6 years ago from Georgia USA

Hi Gypsy, love this poem, glad your back! You have a true talent!


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Ladybird, I enjoy keeping up with my Hubpages friends. Thanks for coming by.


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A.A. Zavala 6 years ago from Texas

I love to get exposure to different forms of writing and poetry. This is the first Haiku I ever liked from the onset. Beautiful...


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. Love poetry don't you?


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creativeone59 6 years ago from Gold Canyon, Arizona

Thank you for a nice, short and sweet poem. Thank you also for being one of my followers, I appreciate you. Godspeed. creativeone59


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you creativeone 59. Following you is my pleasure.


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saddlerider1 6 years ago

Simply but yet perfect. What more is there to say when one is in love. Return, stay, never leave me. Hugs


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks saddlerider.


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lisadpreston 6 years ago from Columbus, Ohio

What I find so beautiful about this poem is the raw honesty. My pride would never allow me to tell a man I am in love with that I need him, want him, or tell him to turn around, come back, or return. Although some have commented on the simplicity of the few words so directly put, I find the reality of what was said, to be extremely complicated. These words could only be uttered by a woman that is self assured, confident, and willing to risk all (emotionally) for love. You are an incredible woman. It saddens me that a woman of my age is either not brave enough or has never loved enough to utter such basic and simple words to a man.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi Lisa, thanks for your candid comment. My man is a ferry pilot and I am never sure he will return safely as his job is not without danger. I think this is where the raw emotion comes into play. PS there's always time!


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lisadpreston 6 years ago from Columbus, Ohio

Without knowing this, the poem could be interpreted so many different ways. As poetry often is. Knowing this about you and him gives me a whole new perspective and it is even more beautiful. None of us know if our loved one will return. I lost my husband 3 years ago, suddenly. I know the fear you feel. You at least get to say these words to your husband. I never got the chance and now I never will. Thank you for the explanation and my wish is that he has a safe return home to you every time.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Dear Lisa, I am sad to hear o your loss. Life is very precarious at best. Thanks for your good wishes for his safe return. xx


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Juliette Morgan 6 years ago

Poignant, simple but complicated too - did you show this to your man?


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi Juliette, of course, I wrote it for him. He was on a difficult ferry bringing a small plane back from the middle east which was hazardous to say the least! Thankfully he returned safely shortly after he read this. It is hard to say the least, waiting in this situation. Thanks for stopping by


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MartieCoetser 6 years ago from South Africa

Amazing! The emotions you've managed to provoke in me with only a (beautiful) picture and a few words. Voted up and up.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for the kind comment Martie. I think we share a love of poetry!


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Neverletitgo 6 years ago from Minneapolis, MN

I loved it and it is beautiful. Please visit my hub. Thanks for sharing.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for your kind comment Neverletitgo. I shall certainly pay you a visit right now.


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Nell Rose 6 years ago from England

Hi, this was full of meaning, I only recently realised what a haiku was! really liked it, thanks nell


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you liked it Nell. It was new to me too!


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john27 6 years ago

lovely green green grass of home

nice photo.


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Gypsy Willow 6 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

It is taken on the Pembrokeshire coastal path around Dinas Island in Wales where I come from. The most beautiful country on the planet


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Neverletitgo 5 years ago from Minneapolis, MN

It is really very beautiful Haiku and I liked it. Thanks for sharing.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you Neverletitgo. I appreciate your kind comment.


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DeBorrah K. Ogans 5 years ago

Gypsy Willow, Beautiful, simple yet Powerful! Thank you for sharing, Peace & Blessings!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you DeBorrah. I appreciate your comment and kind good wishes.


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Wayne Brown 5 years ago from Texas

I would probably return after reading that! LOL! Thanks for sharing it! WB


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Well he did!


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lxxy 5 years ago from Beneath, Between, Beyond

Even with such brevity, the formatting and accompanying picture do well to make this understated poem stand out. Thanks. :)


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for the visit Ixxy. I appreciate your kind comment.


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Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

HI, I love this! I think it is because I am getting the idea of Haiku now, before I just thought they were short but profound poems, but now I realise that the most important thing about them is that each word is meaningful, there are no 'waste' words, and that is what makes it so special great example, cheers nell


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you nell for reading and commenting. I appreciate your opinion.


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W. K. Hayes 5 years ago from Bryson City, North Carolina

Short, very sweet and very direct...your work says the most in such a short period of time. Very powerful and thought-provoking.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you for reading my haiku Mr. Hayes. I appreciate your positive comment.


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Lady_E 5 years ago from London, UK

Short and Sweet.

Thanks. :)


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Cheers Lady_E!


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Rebecca E. 5 years ago from Canada

short sweet and powerful, lady e took teh words out of my mouth!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Rebecca, say it as it is I say!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

i feel that i must turn around and come back now. how strange

lovely :]


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you were affected by my writing. Words are very powerful. Thank you for the visit!


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afro's mistake 5 years ago from dorothys kansas

nice poem, though im sorry to say that this isnt a haiku. a haiku is a japanese poem consisting of 3 lines, the first one 5 syllables, second 7, and then finally the third ending with five syllables. all in all this poem should have 17 syllables but it only has 16.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for correcting me. I have corrected it!


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afro's mistake 5 years ago from dorothys kansas

wow such a great improvement. without taking away any of the great in-depth meaning of this peom you have merely made it an even greater haiku!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks am


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Fluffy77 5 years ago from Enterprise, OR

Beautiful, I like it.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Fluffy


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Perfectly said, and all that is needed to be said. Well done!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Enough said!!


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blueyez408 5 years ago from San Jose, California

Beautiful.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks blueyez!


JadedLove 5 years ago

Still amazes me how much can be said in so few words. Lovely my friend.

Johnny Love


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b. Malin 5 years ago

How Short, How Sweet, How Beautiful! I look forward to following your Hubs.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you b. I appreciate your visit.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you JadedLove. I like your poetry too. Thanks for the visit.


Multiman 5 years ago

Enjoyed your Haiku, though the form is different, there have been developed several other forms of Haiku as well and this tends to fall in the free haiku category. Voted up.


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JT Walters 5 years ago from Florida

Yes, I enjoyed the poem but was distracted by the free form. It was enjoyable though.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

It was meant to be a Haiku with form like a path in the picture :(


Jt Walters 5 years ago

Brilliant now I get it!!

Thank you!!

JT


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

So very straight to the point and I am not alone in liking this one obviously. I look forward to catching up with many more from you Gypsy Willow.

Take care

Eiddwen.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Eiddwen. I have just returned from Wales where the photo was taken. Thanks for popping in!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for dropping by multiman, I really should learn more about this poetry form. I just wrote from the heart


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Jennuhlee 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

Sometimes a few words is all you need. Beautiful.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

So true Jennuhlee, thanks for the visit.


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Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

So much said in so few words, absolutely beautiful.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you for visiting my humble poem Movie Master.


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Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

Hi, short but very sweet! lol lovely!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi Nell, didn't need many words to get the message across. Thanks for the visit


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travel_man1971 5 years ago from Bicol, Philippines

Simple, direct to the point and meaningful. Thanks for sharing. I used to write Haiku poems during my high school years. It brings back my desire to compose Haiku poems again.

Thanks for sharing. :D


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi travel_man! thanks for the visit. I look forward to reading your poems.


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andycool 5 years ago from the U.S.

Very unique and interesting poem! But I've to G-search now to find out what is a Haiku poem. Ciao!


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andycool 5 years ago from the U.S.

Now I know what a Haiku poem is... very interesting concept. :)


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi andycool, glad you like my Haiku. Now you can write some yourself! Thanks for the visit.


Phoebe Pike 5 years ago

Your words are so simple, yet they are very striking. I wish my poetry was even an ounce as good as yours is.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you so much for visiting and the compliment. I really appreciate it.


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Lady_E 5 years ago from London, UK

Short and Sweet..... :)


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

True :)


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vocalcoach 5 years ago from Nashville Tn.

Powerful, truthful, and from the heart. Nothing more is needed. Beautifully done. I love it!

vocalcoach~


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks vocalcoach for the kind comment. It was written from the heart.


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thelyricwriter 5 years ago from West Virginia

This was very interesting. Great meaning in few chosen words. Up, awwesome, and beautiful:)


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you stopped by thelyricwriter, thanks for the kind comment.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

I actually loved it :) great job :)


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Frank!


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Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

Hi gypsy, love this haiku, brilliant!


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks MM, glad you came by!


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anglnwu 5 years ago

Simple and sweet--just the way haiku should be. Thanks for sharing.


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for reading anginwu!


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CloudExplorer 4 years ago from New York City

I'm at a loss for words here :) lol. I congratulate you on creating creating one of the shortest epic poems on hubpages I've ever read before. Nice!


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you CloudExplorer. I am honoured you call it an Epic Poem


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

I love first Haiku.. really nice...can you teach me?

I voted up and beautiful

Happy New year

Debbie


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks for the kind comment. You must follow your heart with your writing. The rules are simple.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

I too loved it.. ") why wouldn't he come back lol thanks for sharing :)


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hey Frank thanks for reading. I appreciate your kind comment. He did come back!


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks Mark. Short and sweet is good!


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seoendra 4 years ago from India

Gypsy that's right......... every had some one spacial like as you explain:)


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Yes secendra, it was written for a special some one.


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seoendra 4 years ago from India

yes my dear i know that but Gypsy my name is "seoendra":(


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

OOPs sorry seoendra!


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Kathleen Cochran 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

How have I missed you as well? Such an economy of words - but Wow - the message! I appreciate the challenge to say so much with just a few words. Glad to know you.


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you Kathleen. I'll check your hubs too. Haiku are a fun challenge


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

73 Comments, so far, and you answered each one. As impressive as the poem was, I found that impressive, too! 22 feedbacks: awesome (2nd most) and beautiful (the blue ribbon winner.) It's surely nice when Hubbers take the time to click the feedback boxes, don't we know!


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Well that is a super comment Perspycacious! Thank you very much. I really appreciate it when Hubbers take the time to read and comment on my humble writing! ( I put that in as it sounds a Japanese type of thing to say after a Haiku)


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kidscrafts 4 years ago from Ottawa, Canada

Nice Haiku! I love the picture too and find that in a way it goes well with your poem....I could see myself in the little trail and turning back!


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you for your visit. You would be pleased to walk on that little trail. It is the trail in the Pembrokeshire Coastal Path


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rmichaelf 4 years ago from North Central West Virginia, where the green grass grows...

To write a good Haiku, requires a skill with words and imagery that not all posses. beautiful and up... and hidden within are so many levels and subtlties...

Thank you for this,

Michael

(Left a new story for you too!!! heehee)


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DON BALDERAS 4 years ago

This reads so urgent, yet so subtly done. Congrats. I like it.


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi Michael, thanks for your comment. Where will I find my new story?


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Laurinzo Scott 4 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

Beautiful poem Gypsy Willow... simple and yet well said. Gonna go and read more of yours now!


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you for your visit Don. "Less is more" right?


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you for your kind words Laurinzo. I appreciate your visit very much.


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Very nice haiku. I hope he came back.


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks, he did.


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Simply beautiful!!


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks MM


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

Volumes said in a few word! Voted up and awesome.


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Gypsy Willow 4 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thanks tillsontitan!


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TesstheScribbler 3 years ago from At Home

Simple words, yet very powerful. =) Great job.


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Gypsy Willow 3 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you Tess


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suzettenaples 3 years ago from Taos, NM

I like your poem. It made me chuckle. You just come out and say it plainly and forthrightly. Love it! Love the photo too.


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Gypsy Willow 3 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Glad you enjoyed it suzettenaples, it made me chuckle too! Thanks for the comment!


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DDE 3 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

A lovely photo with a simple and meaningful Haiku


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Gypsy Willow 3 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you DDE. It was a simple message that worked! Enjoyed your visit.


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vocalcoach 19 months ago from Nashville Tn.

The simple messages are sometimes the most powerful. This beautiful haiku testifies to this. Tears filled my eyes. I love what you've written. A heart-felt thanks.

Audrey


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Gypsy Willow 19 months ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you Audrey. Strangely enough I am in just that same situation again waiting for him to fly home! All the best! Gypsy Willow.


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shanmarie 19 months ago from Texas

Good one! Says a lot with so little.


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Gypsy Willow 19 months ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Thank you shanmarie. I appreciate your kind comment. It was written from the heart.


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Perspycacious 18 months ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

The meaning and intent is clear. I was looking for the 5-7-5 form of the typical haiku.


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Gypsy Willow 18 months ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand Author

Hi Perspycacious, thank you for commenting again on my humble haiku. I appreciate it.

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