Let's Just Say

The Ties that Bind

Let's just say

You pronounced me OK

I fit in the slot

Rather than not

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Let's just say

As a daughter may

I longed for your attention

Tried and failed, I learned pretension

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Let's just say

I learned how to pray

Would my hope be fair

A bargain for you to care

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Let's just say

You're young, not gray

Thy will be done

More like your son?

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Let's just say

I stopped this play

Twisting, turning, throw a kiss

No, not enough, what did I miss

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Let's just say

As I looked away

Maybe my face

Not enough grace

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Let's just say

You held at bay

Love for me

Not meant to be

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Let's just say

On that day

The day that dad left earth

Broke the tie, bound by birth

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Let's just say

I'll make my way

Tripping, falling, wanting for more

No one's child, still trying to score

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Let's just say

We play it your way

Denying, pretending, everything's fine

No, never, no, don't cross that line

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Let's just say

I seize the day

If choice an option, mine would be

You, my mother, wanting me

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What have I gotta do to make you love me

24 comments

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vietnamvet68 6 years ago from New York State

let's just say I love your poems

let's just say I will always be there

to support your writing

Let's just say here is thumbs for your poem

God bless you


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De Greek 6 years ago from UK

Let's just say that this is deep :-)


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drbj 6 years ago from south Florida

So poignant, so meaningful, so sad, Amy. You have talent, girl. :)


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I must say to each and everyone of you, vietnamvet68, De Greek, and drbj, thank you from the bottom of my heart for your support through comments. You will never know how much it means to be, especially from those I admire profoundly.


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epigramman 6 years ago

...yes Amy, my true friend, I am so proud of you - as a writer you have come a long way in a short period of time - and you have the ability to conquer with ease different styles of writing.

Sometimes I feel that your writing is like a poetic key to Pandora's box and it's as deep as the deepest well - but you always manage to engage and captivate your reader - so let's just say - you're marvelous with words!


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I hope I convey that I adore my mom. I almost pulled this one back from publication. Of course, the struggle to please her is evident and there would not be a struggle if I didn't care. Please tell me that this poem conveys my deep love for my mother. Do you see it?

Thanks for reading and always boosting me up, Mr. C.


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PhoenixV 6 years ago from USA

Very nice!


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, PhoenixV, for stopping by and leaving your comment. I appreciate it.


HSchneider 6 years ago from Parsippany, New Jersey

Very beautiful and poignant Amy.


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you HSchneider! Feedback is my life line. I appreciate your comment.


daPuma5 6 years ago

I hope your mother reads this, even more, I hope she gets it. I did! D


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

No, No, a thousand times, no! I wouldn't want her to see this as I would never want to intentionally hurt her. I really love my mother. I am sure she wouldn't see things as I do; her vantage point is influenced by a different place and time. I love her with all my heart and know, in my heart, that she is operating from her own difficulties and circumstances. You know what I mean? Thank you so much for visiting and commenting. You are a fabulous writer and I sincerely appreciate your time.


daPuma5 6 years ago

I hope someday you change your mind. I don't see anything but love and the need to be loved back, but I know what you mean. No thanks necessary, your writing is fantastic. Keep at it. D


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

I see that you really understand, then, exactly what I was trying to say. Thank you for letting me know. You're a smart cookie; but I already knew that!


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Sarah Masson 6 years ago from Melbourne, Australia

Great poem


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, Sarah!


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BobbiRant 6 years ago from New York

I can see a deep love for your mother and it shows that pleasing her was not always easy. Sad, but haunting and so true of how many feel about their parent or parents. Very stirring. Great and sad at the same time.


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, BobbiRant. You hit on exactly the points I was trying to make. I worried that anyone would read this and think I was still "whining" after all these years about how my mommy did me wrong. She didn't. She was coming from her own background, as we all do. She is a beautiful, intelligent, wonderful woman. This poem is more about my own deficits. Thank you reading this and commenting with such insight. In case you don't know, I really value your opinion.


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A.A. Zavala 6 years ago from Texas

I'm just making an assumption, but was your brother the oldest in the family? From that day and time they seem to garner the most attention. Aching for attention acceptance can drive anybody crazy, much more so for children. I hope there is a day when you could share your writing with your mother. Then she could be amazed by your talent as we are. Thank you for the hub.


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

My brother, the brilliant microbiologist, is the baby and the king. Lucky him. I did get attention, but not of a positive nature. Thank you for your insight and comments. As always, I look forward to your input.


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Lucky Cats 5 years ago from The beautiful Napa Valley, California

Amy, you asked if this portrays your deep love for you mother...I think it shows how deeply you want her to love YOU. An adult child looking for that rare bit of unconditional acceptance from a parent. This is how I read it...and I hope, while there is time, that you finally DO receive that love. Children deserve no less...wonderfully written and very very compelling.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Yes, Lucky Cats, you definitely got it. Lock, stock and barrel. I find myself to be rather disgusting, still whining about my mother. And, most of time, I don't. But, back in the recesses of my brain, where I store things that I just can't throw out, is lays. But, our parents come from their own set of circumstances and I understand that. She is beautiful, bright and I love her and I hope she knows that. That is the only part of the equation where I really have any control...and I will always choose love. Thank you for your attention to my offerings. I appreciate your time and warmth.


Laura 5 years ago

I wish for a time machine to go back and love the little girl that was, for I already love the woman that is. Yet I understand all too well that as great as a love can be, it is not interchangeable, capable of filling that undying need.


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Dear Best Friend o' mine, I wish I could do the same for you. I feel like the luckiest woman in the world to call you my best friend. I will always love you.

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