An Old Dreamer's Dream

An Old Dreamer’s Dream


Here I sits, spits, feedin’ me grits to hungry pits

There go me loves, and doves slippin’ through me crusted mitts

Tears like daggers drown the blood of life tricklin’ down

She sees in a glimpse, silence walkin’ to eternity limp


The tock tick by as I try to cry, and hide her from a reaper’s lie

A heartbeat late to lover’s gate arms that grope for an empty sky

Her music fade, fades, faded, and an old heart jade jade jaded

A chuckle, a squint of eye, a wrinkle, a twinkle, and one gray cripple to die


Sippin’, suppin,’ beggin’ for nothin’ just to see her lashes again

Crawlin’ fingertips maulin’ reachin’ for ghosts barely breathin’

Nappin’ in silk sash given, and gasping in destined death driven

I’ve robbed her memories mobbed, and ne’er a kiss once given


And now she’s mist, a perfumed miss, a lady of passion I missed

She thinks o’ me no more through her white door silently swingin’,

While bums, and crumbs lay dying for her weary singing

Muted screams, sippin’ streams, and holdin’ her in me dreams

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CrisSp 2 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

You sound like an Irish poet here and I was reading it with an Irish accent. Hope to dreams unfulfilled eloquently written.

Voting up and sharing.


sheilamyers 2 years ago

Beautiful!


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Hi, CrisSp,

You are very sweet and kind to say this to me. Thank you so much. I had a tough time with this one, but it was the best I had.

Thanks.

Kenneth


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Dear sheilamyers,

Thanks is not enough, but it is the most I have right now. Frankly, this one was so personal with me. I know that this is, what I told CriSsp, is why I had such a time doing it.

Glad you liked it.

Kenneth


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suzzycue 2 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I read of your pain and suffering a loss. Real heartfelt poem. Well Done Kenneth Avery. A great poem is words that are felt and move emotion.


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Nikkij504gurl 2 years ago from Louisiana

Very good. I read in the voice of an old lonely man. Growing old is never fun and neither is losing someone we love so we keep on dreaming of their beautiful faces and younger days.


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Trish_M 2 years ago from The English Midlands

There is a huge amount of emotion in this poetry - words and feelings working together. Very good. And the images are so well-suited to the poem.


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Suzzycue,

"Thank you so much for your input into this hub, which is a release of pain and fading memories for me."

And when this was finished, I felt as I had aged a good seven years. So that is how life is. We are tuned by what he feel and sometimes what we don't feel.

Thanks for the good visit.

Kenneth


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

H, Trish_M,

Thanks. You have a deep-sense of interpretation skills and your comment proves it.

Yes, feelings and words go together and fit when used properly.

I appreciate YOU and All of my valued-followers.

Kenneth


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Hello, Nikki,

I hear you speaking and understanding your thoughts completely. Dreaming is vital to life, I think.

But . . .what do I do when a "dream" is now so faded that I can hardly see and feel it?

Dreams too, are irreplaceable.

Thank you for the sweet words and visit. Come back soon.

Kenneth


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Trish_M 2 years ago from The English Midlands

Kenneth :)

I think that it is a real skill to be able to find the right words to express the required feelings in a poetic way. It's something that I find difficult, if not impossible, to do, so I consider it very impressive when I find it in others.


Kenneth Avery 2 years ago

Dear Trish,

Wow! You are way too kind. Way too kind. But to show you that I am a civil person, thank you. It is purely Abstract/Prose and linking one idea or thought to one of similar feeling or nature.

Oops, I gave my secret away.

That is something Clark Kent would never do.

Take it easy, my friend, Trish.


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ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

WOW! I LOVE THIS A/P!

A KO for KA

Please accept my prose and my abstract ways:

: )

I sit, sit, sittin' here

think, think, thinkin' you're near

re-memberin' when, when, when

we shared daily planets

and every day pens

forged on an outer hub's edge

kindly spirited on a symbiotic ledge

from one dreamer's dreamin'

another's dream grows

beat, beat, beatin' hearts

Clark Kent's secrets

make Lois Lane glow

"Look! It's a bird...It's a plane!"

Or is it just a couple of abstract pros?

Best Always,

ocfireflies aka Kim


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

My dearest ocfireflies,

How can I put this . . .?

Wow! Superb! Touching! Moving! Thought, soul-stirring! Painful! Realistic! Danced on My Heart!; Delved into what I am really about; I loved it, dear friend.

I have more ways to describe your sweet gift, but if I use them all now, what will I say when you come back to see me again?

Take care! Keep writing!

Love, Your Friend, in this world and the next, Kenneth


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c-m-hall 2 years ago from York, Maine

Kenneth,

thank you for the invite ... helps to keep me mind occupied. I read and it reminded me of: Johnny Cash's song : "Hurt" (I don't know why) ... You are extremely interesting ... hmm, but, who isn't? Probably lots of people. LOL! See ya 'round eternity'(s) limp ... (good one!)


Kenneth Avery 2 years ago

Hi, c-m-hall,

You are welcome. It is my pleasure. I am so humbled, and in awe of you and your comment on this hub.

I never dreamed that this would cause anyone to mention J. Cash, and the song, "Hurt."

Thanks so much. You made my day.

Yep. See you around.


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shamela 2 years ago

Dear kenneth avery,

Your poem ' An Old Dreamer's Dream' has a really good story . Your first stanza has four brilliant written verses for your introduction to your poem. The first stanza got me locked into the story of your poem and I felt compassion towards the Old dreamer. I kept thinking will things get better for the Old dreamer. Your poem is well written because your poem shows what the character is really going through.


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Hi, shamela,

You are very sensitive to what other's say and write. I am so thankful to have you in my life as my friend and follower.

I really appreciate you and your comment--both are inspirations to me to keep writing.


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ananceleste 2 years ago from California

You made me cry Kenneth. The longing in these lines go beyond the story. It transcends, time and space. Like a untold story, for fear of getting lost in translation. Then again, I see beauty in the weirdest of places. Don't be afraid of letting your pen express what is hidden inside your soul. Don't dream dreamer, live your dream.


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Dear sweet, kind ananceleste,

What great timing. Your sweet words came just in time for me. Honestly, I had a rough few moments at church (of all places) this morning. Details are not important. But I was disappointed in someone I care about very much, but anyway, thank you so much for letting your heart write. Not your keyboard.

I do not know any adequate phrases except, "thank you, my sweet friend," for using a few lines to bring me back to sanity.

You see. I hate to be the root of any misunderstanding with anyone and I beat myself up over and over until I fix the situation with the person.

I guess I am old fashioned, but that is my heart in action.

I shall treasure THIS comment for as long as I am alive. I have never said this to ANYONE on hubpages. Never.

I will follow you kind words and live my dreams, but you got to come back often to check on me.

Love you Dear Friend,

Kenneth


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Romeos Quill 2 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

Good afternoon Kenneth;

Thank you for your recommendations which you gave me; so glad that I checked out your poems which are pretty amazing and felt the urge to comment on this one in particular as the stream of consciousness is so good, it could be a country song. Only you could tell this story.

The crossroads of heart and mind certainly met in this piece, animated it seems, from the woman in the verse who forged her signature at the bottom of the anthology of the protagonist's dreams.

It pulled me in and left me frustrated but the Stoic outlook at the end lent realistic strength towards chalking it down as an emotionally expensive strike and to look forward with the hope that things just have to change for someone as special as the man behind the writing.

Thank you for a pensive read and all the best to you for your Labour Day in the States...enjoy your tuck!

Pinning and sharing to release this one into the wild.

Best Wishes;

R.Q.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

Kenneth my dear friend. See what happens when you write poetry...look at all the wonderful comments this remarkable poem has attracted. Who says poetry isn't popular, and you write it so well. It is clear this came from the heart and as you have indicated took a lot out of you. Sorry you were hurt by someone at church, but you channelled that pain into these beautiful though sad words. I know where you are coming from...chin up...and think of all the friends you have made here at Hub Pages. Voted up..up..up. Love the images too.


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Hi, Romeo,

I am humbled by your very kind words. I mean that, my new friend. I cannot express my sincere thanks enough for your reading this hub and leaving such an eloquent comment.

God bless you richly. And come back to visit with me.

Peace to you and yours and thank you again.


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Hello, good friend, Jodah,

Thank you kindly, for your comment. I didn't know that you had left a comment here--I didn't receive the notification. But thank you so much. And thanks for the sincere understanding about the church thing. I am living past that, but sometimes it hurts.

You have also reminded me of the truth: I have been truly-blessed with good friends LIKE YOURSELF on HP and I need to start thanking God more for you and the others.

So thank you, Father, for Jodah and all of my HP friends.

And thanks for the votes as well.

Now to take off for Labor Day.

Peace to you, My Good Friend.


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Rosana Modugno 2 years ago from 10th Kingdom

Voted up and beautiful. I did so love this poem. It sounded so vintage, like an old sailor that had spent too many nights drinking with Bukowski woke up, had an Expresso, then wrote it. LOL Does that make sense to you? I think you totally get it. :)


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Dear Rosana,

Thank you from the heart for such a sensitive comment. And yes, I DO get it. Well-interpreted. You have a sharp-sense of perception of what lies beneath and between the lines of written text.

And I saw where you are following me. That MEANS SO MUCH to me. Thank you. God bless you and have a Safe night, but YOU stay in touch with me and YOU keep up the hubbing too.


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LadyFae 2 years ago from Under the Stars

Dear Kenneth,

These emotionally laden words are very deep and most certainly touched my heart and my soul. The images make it complete, WOW.

Voted up, Awesome, Beautiful and Interesting and you have a new follower Sir.

Much Love


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

Dear LadyFae,

I am very humbled by your sweet and warm words. I sincerely appreciate you for the words and the following.

I am going to believe that you will be my new HP friend. Is that okay?

Thank you too for the votes too.

And Much Love to You also.


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LadyFae 2 years ago from Under the Stars

You're very welcome and I would love to be your new HP friend.

Much Love


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kenneth avery 2 years ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

LadyFae,

Absolutely! I am so thrilled at you wanting to be my friend that I am unable to thank you aptly.

Sure. No need to ask. Welcome, my love.


missirupp 23 months ago

Haunting! And the language is intoxicating, by the way. The movement in this poem is musical.


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kenneth avery 23 months ago from Hamilton, Alabama Author

missirupp,

Thank you, dear friend.

If I had the cash, right now, you would be on a three-month Carribbean cruise with your friends or whomever and when you get home, you start your career in whatever, that I have paid for, and live in your fully-furnished penthouse, that I paid for and the Alexus, fully-furnished with all of your gadgets such as surround sound, CD's, DVDs, etc.

Just for your kindness. And if you think I am kidding. Just watch me when I am blessed one day with endless wealth.

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