I Knew You

Yesterday

I met a new man on the street yesterday

Three male acquaintances round me say

He shouldn't be walking, better to lay

You lock my eyes, no looking away

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Shuffling, continuing along your way

You cross the street avoiding melee

Directly toward me, safely, I pray

Worse pain ever, from gout, you say

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Your eyes blue, your hair sparse, gray

Memories flood, you show me the way

A visit from my dad through you this day

The connection is made, come what may

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Remembrance profound, gout and gray

Your wallet in view, like my dad one day

I advise you, please, to hide it away

You thank me, softly, concealing it's fray

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Not looking back, continuing your way

Speaking, I no longer hear what you say

Thought you'd envisioned an angel today

It was I in the presence of light that day

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I'm no angel

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epigramman 6 years ago

.....a beautiful poetic journey this is Amy .... it's so nice to see my angel back here in the hub fold ...... and to see you try a different style - and it's true a good writer (like you) can always mix up different styles and subjects with ease and effortless aplomb .....

....nice inclusion of a video - you have excellent taste in picking the right one in all of your hubs - and as far as being an 'angel' here on earth - you know what they say - it takes one to know one!!!!


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

That makes you an angel, too, Epi...and you are. It's good to be back.


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epigramman 6 years ago

.....I just came back to say ....this poetic piece lingers in my mind because it's deep and thoughtful and conjures up imagery that in itself could make an absorbing short film of a time and a place and a state of mind!!!!


becherer.amy 6 years ago

You are making me cry. You are so understanding and kind, Epi. I am so lucky to have crossed paths with you. I would definitely brave the traffic, even with gout in both feet, to walk to you. Thank you, friend.


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sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

Epi is a dear frind to you and me and countless others. Your poem brought back fond memories of my own Dad's frailties. Your poem is good but limit yourself when you choose one rhymne sound. Pain and plane is an easy sound to work with. Dream and seem is another. A simple rhymne scheme in a four line stanza can be a,a,b,b. Another is abab. Keep writing as you are very skilled and talented. Glad to see you back.


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you very much for your comments. I'm sure I sound like an idiot, but you answered exactly what I have been considering on the limitations of rhyming and your pattern examples are exactly what I was in a quandry over. As you can see, I am not a scholar of poetry. I actually find it very subjective and sometimes difficult to decipher. Apparently, I'm not telling you anything you don't already see. As I develop, I will experiment with more freedom. I think I may be too tight on wanting to say exactly what I want to express. You got me thinking and that is the only way to learn and evolve. I appreciate your observance and help.


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A.A. Zavala 6 years ago from Texas

An angel indeed. Another beautiful poem. As for the mechanics of your poetry, you speak from your heart, and your readers should taste and digest your writings to suit their own interpretations. Change nothing for no one. Thanks again for sharing.


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Amy Becherer 6 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you, my friend. An angel i'm not. I truly love your commentaries. You teach me about myself through your observant nature. I appreciate you!


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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

Amy,this is my first time to read one of your poems and i like it very much.I don't know why,but it brought back a memory of my brother,who always had a frayed wallet.Thank you.

Cheers


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you Always Exploring. I see your wonderful commentaries in the form of poetry on many of my favorites. I am honored at your visit and that something I wrote struck a cord with you.


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Jlava73 5 years ago from Cyberspace and My Own World

Simply Beautiful!


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Amy Becherer 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO Author

Thank you kindly, Jlava73. That means so much.

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