I'd like feedback on my article: Why Buy a Hybrid Car

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   Zubin Pandayposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. I would like some feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Why Buy a Hybrid Car (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Zubin,
      
      There's no need to start new threads, just go back to one of your previous ones and ask for help again.
      
      Like the previous over-use of 'hybrid' there are some sentences which need revising. This one, for example...
      
      The second type of hybrid is a plug-in, you do have to plug-in a plug-in. Plug-ins run...
      
      There are four occurrences of 'plug-in' on a single line. As a writer, you have to make sure that the words are flowing and your reader is not distracted by clunky and ugly sentences. You can easily fix this kind of thing. Look at paragraphs where you have repeated the same words and create better ways of expressing what you are trying to say.
      
      Something is bothering me about the content and hybrid vehicles. Firstly, you haven't really described what a hybrid is i.e. it's a vehicle that relies on two types of energy. You mention EVs (electric vehicles); the hybrid plug-in version is a PHEV. You don't use that common acronym in the text, but you do in the lists (where it is unnecessary because of the subheading).
      
      I think you should review the content to make sure the information is completely up to date and comprehensive.
      
      Type your title into Google and see what comes up in the first page of results. Then make your article better than those.
      
      Keep going

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   Beth Eaglescliffeposted 4 years ago

   There's a problem with the links in your last paragraph; some of them are classed as spam links by HubPages. It will never pass QAP with them in place, so delete them. You should only link to authoritative websites like government or university sites.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

   Also, you need a question mark after the title. It's a little ambiguous and I would think about changing it to something a little more eye-catching.
   
   X Great Reasons to Buy a Hybrid
   Are You Thinking of Buying a Hybrid? Here Are X Reasons Why You Should
   Buying a New Vehicle? X Benefits of Going Hybrid
   
   Then reformat the article to whatever number of reasons.

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      Zubin Pandayposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank You for all the tips and help you have given me, I really appreciated it.

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         theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         You're welcome

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