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Examples of level 4 and 5 biased argument in the form of a letter - School children have too much homework.

Updated on May 5, 2014

A biased argument is one of the hardest piece of writing we ask children to write at primary school. It is always a good idea to show children a good example of a piece of writing, it is also a good idea to give them a piece of writing for them to improve (editing skills are also a hard skill to master at a young age)

Included in this hub are two pieces of writing from children for a level 4 and a level 5 to be able to do just that.


Small Primary school

Little Road

Tiny Town

England

EN6 7LW

Example of a low level 5 piece of work:






Mr M.Gove

Minister for Education

The houses of Parliament

Westminster

England

SW1A OAA


Dear Mr Gove,

I am writing to you to complain about the situation regarding homework in primary schools. Being a year 6 pupil myself, nearing the end of my primary years, I feel that I have sufficient experience to comment on the situation.

Knowing the pressure our education gives us, I believe children's learning is clearly extremely important however with SAT's approaching quickly, year 6 pupils are revising most nights. With the stress from this; sitting constantly paying attention for 6 hours a day at school and the exams shortly on their way, children obviously don't need the stress of more homework.

School is a very important place where children learn valuable life lessons and this should mean more than writing and maths. How are we supposed to attend extra curricular clubs with our heads in books constantly? England has an obesity problem so without these clubs the problem will only get worse. Shouldn't you be encouraging the younger generation to be fit and healthy?

Surely being the minister of education you can clearly understand my personal views (especially considering these views are agreed by the vast majority of people). I suggest that it is much better for children to work independently in class rather than at home where some parents tend to take over. There is no point of homework if someone else does it for you! Other factors like: younger siblings causing distractions; no room to work quietly or spread out to work properly; no internet access for poorer families or even parents not knowing how to help their children because they don't understand it can all lead to homework being done badly or not at all. Is there any point of homework if it is done badly or not at all?

Having discussed this situation with Mrs Jones, local primary school headmistress, she claims, "Children should be encouraged to make time for home-learning and revising however, I do not believe the time limit is suitable for the age of these children." Although they should learn valuable life lessons, like being able to work independently, shouldn't children be allowed to be children?

After taking Mrs Jones' views into consideration I agree we should have homework but not a large amount. I believe that teachers should set the homework as they know the students better.

I hope you find my argument against homework reasonable and take my points into consideration for the 2014 curriculum.

Yours sincerely

Fred Jones

(Year 6 pupil)

In this example there are a number of good skills this person has used to gain the level 5:

  • Dropped in clauses
  • Good use of commas
  • Connecting sentence in complex ways
  • Good quote
  • Good level of detail to each point, which is backed up.
  • Rhetorical questions
  • Good level of vocabulary
  • Good punctuation used - brackets, hyphens, semi-colons and colons.
  • Formal language used.


Small Primary school

Little Road

Tiny Town

England

EN6 7LW

An example of a level 4 piece of work.






Mr M.Gove

Minister for Education

The houses of Parliament

Westminster

England

SW1A OAA


Dear Mr.Gove,

I am writing to you to express my feelings on the current amount of homework that you are giving us. This is a situation that needs to be changed.

I understand that we are expected to complete a small amount of revision work however, it is not fair that we have to do normal homework as well. We could be putting our health at risk because of all the stress that is put on us to get amazing grades in our SAT's.

Having discussed this situation with a local primary school teacher, Miss Jones, told me, "I agree that they should have homework however, they should only have to do half an hour to an hour over seven days, not everyday."

It is very hard for some children to do homework at home because of their siblings, younger ones, and busy parents. It is very hard to concentrate in a house full of people when it is very loud.

I hope you take my thought and ideas to cut down homework into consideration.

Yours Sincerely

Fred Jones

(Year 6 pupil)

If you compare the two example you will notice:

  • The detail in the writing isn't as much
  • Punctuation isn't as varied
  • Vocabulary isn't as varied although it is good.
  • No dropped in clauses

Saying that the positives for his piece of work are:

  • Formal writing
  • relevant quote
  • High level conjunctions used.

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