Screenwriting Pitch

David Freeman offers sound screenwriting tips on the business of film and working in film as a writer. He's delved into writing episodes for the Internet, which is another avenue for writers.

We chatted over a cup of coffee discussing what screenwriting is and I asked him about screenwriting in general. I started writing for a client to write outlines, treatments, and scripts for an episodic Internet series, so we had something to share.

We discussed the scarcity of decent scripts available for purchase by a production company and the difficulty in finding a great script. "Every Development Executive in Hollywood would like to know how to find great scripts," explained David. "I've found a few from my students and helped them sell their work. One guy got $200,000, with $200,000 more coming if and when the script gets produced. I'm working very actively with one of my students right now. I've got his script out all over town. Keep your fingers crossed."

Interested in the $200,000 script deal, we talked about how he knew it was a great script.

"I've got a mental checklist of about 40 things that contribute to a great script. Few scripts, including my own, are close to having all 40," explained David. "But when a script starts having about 20 of them, it starts looking pretty good."

They're not mysterious elements – like natural sounding dialogue, unexpected plot twists and so forth. I found that interesting, but David wanted to talk about his scriptwriting process.

"I have no typical day. I just sold a TV series to an Internet network, so I'm writing the 'webisodes.' A well-known manager/producer, in town, keeps me busy with script notes for his next cable movie. I'm outlining my next feature spec. And I'm always adding new techniques to Beyond Structure. This year I've had a lot of requests for script consulting as well. Of all these activities, my favorite is writing. But, I think I like the variety."

David wrote the book Beyond Structure to help writers develop a script and sell it.

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With all his activities, David keeps a tight schedule. "I'm more alert at night and seem to do my best work then. I wish I were a morning person," says David.
He prefers writing features than the Internet but is willing to do things that are way off the map for traditional media. "I'm having a great time with the Internet stuff."

David regular pitches scripts and his batting average is not bad. "The projects I set up at Columbia Pictures, Castle Rock, Paramount, Allies Stars (at Sony Pictures), Atlas Entertainment, David Kirschner Productions, and many other places were sold off pitches. I'm very comfortable in a pitch room, and I teach pitching on a somewhat regular basis. Writers have to realize that pitching has less to do with writing than it does to perform. I try and teach them how to make that transition."

Acting classes help as well as a screenwriter's education influences their writing career. "I studied cultural anthropology at U.C. Berkeley and even spent a year living in Africa," explains David.

"I think it all helped me hone my observational skills. For instance, the questions you've chosen to ask me, it says a lot about you."

I laughed and told him the coffee helps, too.

Let's hear it for those who lay their creativity on the line for everyone to see. That's courage. That is one of the reasons I admire screenwriters and those who are just beginning.

Writing for Hollywood requires structure and determination. You need to know the basics before you start writing. Continue reading and scrolling down this article. There are insightful, if not fantastic, interviews with professional screenwriters describing their process.

“Artists struggle more than a lot of other folks, and this can wear down their pride in themselves. Writers don't let this happen to you. If you remove artists from this world -- the architects, the painters, the writers, the landscape architects, the furniture designers, the clothing designers, the people who design our cars -- if you removed the whole lot -- the world would be a cold and bland place indeed. Artists bring beauty and insight. They make our lives worthwhile. There can be nothing nobler than to let your creativity shine forth, and to share with the world your personal take on the complexities, contradictions, and sometimes the humor of the human condition.”

-- David Freeman

Over ten years, David created specific techniques to address all these areas and more. "I've been gratified to watch the class become the most popular screenwriting and development workshop in Los Angeles. We get about 150 people each time we offer it. It has also been gratifying to see that the workshop has been taken and appreciated by the writers, directors, producers, and key executives behind The Fugitive, Total Recall, Runaway Bride, The X-Files, Law & Order, Saturday Night Live, and all the Star Trek series, and many other well-known films and TV shows."

As for consulting, "I've set up my scripts, or projects I've developed, with Columbia Pictures, MGM, Paramount, Castle Rock, Atlas Entertainment, Buena Vista Television, and many other major films and television companies. Most script consultants I encounter can't even write scripts. Am I the only one who thinks something's wrong with that picture?" exclaims David.

David sounded busy and wondered how long it took him to complete a script. "It's hard to say...I'm always working on one thing or two things, pitching several others and so forth. Most people, when hired, are given twelve weeks to outline a script and turn in the first draft, and that feels about right. One of the shocking things about TV writing, which I haven't done, is that sometimes these writers will do a script for a one-hour episode in one to two weeks. And, some of these scripts come out great. It's pretty awe-inspiring."

He sold a sci-fi series for the Internet where each episode is seven minutes. "I had to turn out five scripts in six days, and each script had to be a gem. Each script was rewritten about four times -- and each had to be a gem, like a complete short film with a beginning, middle, and end. That was tough. Now it looks like those scripts are going to get me more Internet work because they are good writing samples."

David made a strong point about writers need to keep writing. Never go a day without writing because the more you write, the better you get at expressing your thoughts into words. The format and structure are important, but if you want to be a screenwriter, you need to write, write and write.

David started Beyond Structure Workshops and consulting because of the problems he encountered in the first screenwriting classes he took. "I was always told there was no easy way to learn what all the critical aspects of screenwriting success were. For instance, I recurrently told you about having a kind of inborn 'knack' for pulling off things like writing natural-sounding dialogue with subtext or creating emotionally and psychologically complex characters or crafting memorable scenes, which operate on a number of levels simultaneously. But if you ever want to write a film as great as, for instance, American Beauty, As Good As It Gets, The Matrix, or Trainspotting, you've got to be able to do all of these."

David advises screenwriters to find an agent instead of hustling for themselves.

"Having an agent gives the writer credibility. Also, they're very useful, especially if you've got a 'high concept' script that you're trying to get out to every major company in town on the same day. Now that I think about it, perhaps I won't kill all the agents after all," laughs David.

Still, a writer needs to know when the script is ready to be submitted to an agent or producer. "That's a tough one. You get it as good as you can, and you get feedback from a variety of people who know scripts. Script consultants can help, if the consultants are any good, explains David. "But, as you've seen from some of my earlier comments, I'm a pretty harsh critic of some consultants since they can't write. How can such a person guide you to improve your dialogue, for instance?"

Writing a screenplay is rewarding for any writer. A screenwriter needs to be willing to collaborate as David confirms.

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But I think we can all see what's happening your computer is a TV. So, as media saturation continues, don't forget to unplug once in a while and hang out with a friend or a tree.

It's hard for me not to think that, among all the uses for the Internet, certainly one of the best is using it to check my website called Beyond Structure.

I continued my conversation with David Freeman. We talked about techniques and how a writer can create a character that is much more depth and appealing.

We also discussed the advantages of writing for film, television, and the Internet, which includes On Demand like Netflix and Amazon.

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David and I discussed examples of characterization. He shared one example, "I know about a hundred ways to give a character 'depth.' Let's say, in high school, a boy invites a girl with low self-esteem to a dance. He's just doing it for the company; he doesn't care that much about her. But, as part of their date, he buys her some trinket -- maybe a stuffed turtle. Six months later we find that she overly treasures that turtle -- it's a symbol of something that she emotionally desires (in this case, affection from a boy.) That's one of those hundred techniques. In fact, I saw a case of this exact technique done while watching a video of an old episode of My So-Called Life."

We talked about the best professions a character can take on to make a story appealing. David mentioned there were about 50 ways to make a character appealing, and in turn emotionally draw us into a story. "If you use these techniques in an artful way, you make audiences empathize with someone in any job -- a trashy woman like Erin Brockovich, a guy with the mental capacity of a yam such as Forest Gump, or any other profession. This statement is not meant to offend yams, by the way. I like them, and I liked Forest Gump. And, I'm sure this is the first interview you've done where the interviewee took the time and cared to let you know his feelings about underground tuberous vegetables," jokes David.

Some examples of "rooting interest" techniques (techniques, which make us "root for," or empathize with a character): One technique is to have the character have an artistic side like Bill Pullman in While You Were Sleeping. Another technique is having the character have emotional problems or insecurities we can identify with like Ben Stiller in Something About Mary.

David likes living in Hollywood. "I get paid to write. And, let us not forget the weather. Or the sheer beauty of places like Wilshire Blvd., which is often compared to the Swiss Alps, or The Valley, which of course brings to mind Paris, or Hollywood Blvd., which is hard to think about without thinking of Yosemite."

Writing a great script isn't the send all according to David. "I won't minimize the importance of marketing yourself. At the same time, great scripts have a way of catching attention. The biggest mistake new writers make is that they don't read scripts by great writers. It's a great way of learning, and it also lets you see how good the competition is."

You need to be reading great scripts. There are websites that offer them without charging. All you need to do is google "screenplays" or "TV Scripts," and you will find a plethora of scripts to read.

Sitting down and having a cup of coffee with David was an accelerating experience because his creative energy pumped me up to write. I went home and wrote several articles and a short story.

I summarize my talk with Freeman by pointing out that you just keep writing. Keep writing is so important.