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The House on the Hill (a Poem for Halloween)

Updated on April 5, 2017
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John has been writing poetry since his school days. He was awarded "Poet of the Year 2014" Hubby Awards and has had two poems become songs.

Washington, D.C., circa 1920. "Tumulty house, 1917 Kalorama Road." Residence of Joseph P. Tumulty, President Wilson's private secretary.
Washington, D.C., circa 1920. "Tumulty house, 1917 Kalorama Road." Residence of Joseph P. Tumulty, President Wilson's private secretary. | Source
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This is the first hub I have specifically written for Halloween. However, this fun celebration is now becoming increasingly popular in Australia as it has been in Britain and America for years. So I thought it was time I joined in the fun.

Actually, this was inspired by the first poem I ever wrote in Primary School called "The Haunted House". I hope you enjoy "The House on the Hill." I had fun re-writing it. Let's start off though by listening to one of my all time favourite monster/halloween songs, "The Monster Mash" by Bobby Pickett and the Crypt Kickers.

The House on the Hill


An abandoned old house sits atop of the hill

Beside the hay barn and in front of the mill.

Some say it is haunted with spirits and ghosts,

But my friend Bill and I are braver than most.


We went trick or treating though I felt like a fool,

Bill dressed as a zombie and me as a ghoul.

Then laden with candy, and a vampire named Steve

We climbed up that hill on All Hallows' Eve.

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It towered dark and eerie, the house looked so haunting,

"Come in if you dare!," it seemed to be taunting.

Looking brave in our costumes but inside quite scared,

We approached the huge door but just stood there and stared.


Black storm clouds had gathered over this hill alone,

Each crack of thunder seemed to make the house moan.

The vampire looked worried, the zombie quite grave.

It was left to the ghoul to be outwardly brave.

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My hand gripped the doorknob, it turned with a squeak.

All three pushed the door and it's old hinges creaked.

Bill turned on the flashlight to light up the room

That opened before us like some ancient tomb.


All furniture was covered with sheets white and stark,

A huge central staircase led up into the dark.

Fighting through cobwebs we walked up the hall,

Old creepy portraits hung from the walls.

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Steve munched on some candy his nerves all on edge.

"Did you see something move, over there on the ledge?"

The flashlight beam moved to the place where I said,

"Thank God it's just rats, and not 'living dead'."


Our small monster party ascended the stairs,

We looked at each other with false confident stares.

As we reached the top floor a sound made us stop,

I was leading the way but I'd gladly now swap.

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A loud piercing shriek met our ears from ahead,

We edged our way forward but with steps full of dread.

Bill shone the torch on a door to the right,

What were we thinking to come here at night?


The vampire was sobbing, "Don't open that door!

This is all much too scary, it's no fun anymore."

The zombie was braver but he held the light,

And the ghoul .. Well let's say .. he was prepared for the flight/fight.

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A scattering noise came from inside the room,

And I know curiosity has led many to doom,

But being the leader, so brave and so sure,

I swallowed my fears and opened the door.


A black writhing cloud enshrouded the ghouls

Who ran for their lives, like three timid fools.

Stumbling and tripping we descended the stairs

Swatting as bats flapped and clawed at our hair.

The flashlight was lost in our rush to escape,

And none of us noticed the still, towering shape.

But just as we passed it Bill stumbled and fell,

That's when we sensed the dead putrid smell.


Steve yelled, "Something's moving, and it smells worse than crap!"

We ran for the door .. It was closed .. We were trapped!

Frantic with panic and trembling with fear,

I said, "Let's stay calm. We need to think clear."

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"Try the doorknob again Steve. We went off half-cocked,

Just because it is closed, doesn't mean it is locked."

He turned the knob slowly, the door creaked ajar.

We raced through the opening - relieved to see stars.


We'd escaped from the house and stood catching our breath,

Just glad our adventure hadn't led to our deaths.

A loud crash could be heard all the way out the door,

As the stinking giant toppled and fell to the floor.

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Without turning 'round we raced back down the hill,

Like a vampire and zombie and ghoul Jack and Jill.

The old suit of armour lay still in the house,

The helmet fell open and out ran a mouse.


Entry was easy, but escape no avail,

Many had perished within the steel jail.

Their bodies had rotted and didn't smell nice,

The armour was full with the bodies of mice.

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Now safe back at home with our families and friends,

Our haunted house tale told again and again.

How the daring young vampire, against bats stayed defiant,

While the brave ghoul and zombie had fought off a giant.

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© 2014 John Hansen

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      John Hansen 5 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for coming back to read this again MizB. It is a real honour when others deem your work worthy of reading more than once.

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      MizBejabbers 5 months ago

      I had to read and laugh again at this Halloween masterpiece. I love it, John, you really made these kids and the house come alive!

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      John Hansen 5 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading this, Luke, and for the encouraging comment. Many find rhyme restrictive but I feel it helps to direct where the poem is going.

      Much appreciated.

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      Luke Holm 5 months ago

      Jodah, great (and spooky) poem! I thought you had some really unique rhymes in here, which were nice to read. I thoroughly enjoyed the tale. Nice ending :) Keep up the good work!

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      John Hansen 23 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Surabhi, yes Halloween is getting close that's why I decided to highlight this hub again. Thanks for reading my poem.

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      Surabhi Kaura 23 months ago

      I like anything with Halloween and guess what it's around the corner :) Thumbs up!

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      John Hansen 23 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Frank. Boo!

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      Frank Atanacio 23 months ago from Shelton

      yeah, I remember enjoying this hub last year... good to bring it back :)

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      John Hansen 23 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Phyllis, I don't mind you reading this poem every year at Halloween. It gives it a much needed boost, and it will always remain one of my personal favourites :) Thanks for another kind comment.

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 23 months ago from High desert of Nevada.

      This is the second year I have read this poem and I love it ! Can't wait till next year to read it again. I like how the rhythm and rhyme move the poem right along smoothly. Well done, Jodah.

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      John Hansen 23 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for the great comment Missy. I am so glad you liked "The House on the Hill" because it is special to me, the rough version being the first poem I ever wrote. It brings back visiting ghost houses and the like to me as well because we never celebrated Halloween (Though I envied other countries that did). I'd be interested to hear what your kids think of this poem. Have a great week. p.s. I'm sure you'd make a lovely ghoul :)

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      Missy Smith 23 months ago from Florida

      This was a great read for the month of Halloween. It was so entertaining all the way through. I loved the flow, and all the pictures match the story. It took me back to childhood days of going to haunted houses with my friends. I think I was probably the vampire part. lol... I've found more courage these days though, and have turned into a real dark character myself. I would be the ghoul now for sure. :)

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks again Kevin. The Monster Mash was always one of my favourite songs too.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad this Halloween poem brought back 'pleasant' memories for you Chris ;) (who was behind the robot voice in the barn?) Hope this didn't creep you out too much though. Thanks for the kind comments.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow Harish, I wish my writing did have a Midas touch, I could certainly do with some gold :) I am glad this poem was a good introduction to Halloween for you. It has only recently begun to become a popular celebration in Australia too. I enjoyed writing it and am happy you enjoyed all the thrills and suspense I tried to portray.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow Harish, I wish my writing did have a Midas touch, I could certainly do with some gold :) I am glad this poem was a good introduction to Halloween for you. It has only recently begun to become a popular celebration in Australia too. I enjoyed writing it and am happy you enjoyed all the thrills and suspense I tried to portray.

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I truly meant all that I said about that John. It was great! The poem reminded me of something and like I said, that song used to be a favorite of mine, I have not heard it in years.

      Kevin

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Maple City, Michigan

      Dark places where something or someone might be following, creep me out completely. I remember as a kid, sitting in our old barn at night when I heard a voice behind me say "I am a robot," in a very robotic voice. I jumped from the hayloft and ran. Thanks for bringing back old memories. Haha. Very effective and expertly written.

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      Harish Mamgain 2 years ago from India

      In the internet, there was much enthusiasm about Halloween festivities. Bing alien to this peculiar concept, I was curious what it was all about.

      I got to know that it is a festival of remembering the departed souls, and to make humor of death itself.

      Now I savored your fantastic poem ; full of thrill, fear, suspense and deathly scare. John, whatever effects you wanted to leave on readers mind, this poem accomplished them all. I'm now all clear about the spirit behind the Festival of Halloween.

      Enjoyed the poem like I was reading a story. Your pen has a wonderful Midas touch. Voted up and shared.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for reading this poem Jo. I am gad you could imagine yourself in the action. Thanks also for the vote up. Much appreciated.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow Kevin, I can't wish for a better comment than that! You said it all, and I am humbled by the things you said. I always try to make my hubs interesting and entertaining, I guess I can say I succeeded with this one. Thank you for the vote up, share etc.

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      Joleen Friesen 2 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Amazing! An awesome job: I could literally put myself into the poem!

      I voted it up!!!

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      That was mind-blowing because it was really something else John. It had the right amount of humor and action in it. I could not believe that you had "The Monster Mash" in it! I use to listen to that a lot and played it several times while I read the poem!! This was one weird but interesting; funny but serious; far out but but cool poem. You out did yourself. :-) I voted up, shared and posted it.

      Kevin

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading another of my hubs Eddy. It's always uplifting t get compliments :) Thanks for the vote up too. Take care.

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      Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

      Brilliant John you are indeed one very gifted poet. Voted up as always and shared.

      Enjoy your day.

      Eddy.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow Rachael, I am honoured and humbled by your words. Great to have you back in the fold, both your hubs and interaction through comments has been missed. I am so glad you enjoyed this poem as it does have a special pace in my heart being an extension and improvement on the first I ever wrote. Thank you for the vote up too.

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      Rachael O'Halloran 2 years ago from United States

      Jodah, I'm late to the party as I've been away for over 6 weeks and yes, like other hubbers on hiatus, I had withdrawal symptoms too. However, with copybook and pen I managed to keep the cobwebs from my brain.

      I missed Halloween this year with grandchildren and with visiting fellow hubbers writings, so I am catching up as best I can. You are almost always my first pit stop of the day and this was the first Halloween poem I've read this year. I was the best by far.

      I absolutely loved this poem. Your storytelling capabilities shine through the rhyme and meter and it was just wonderful. The pictures your words painted and your sidebar pictures made me feel like I was right there. Loved it, voted up and across the board. :)

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      It's a good idea to go over past work. I've done the same and come up with stuff I can't remember writing and thinking, 'Actually, with a little improvement, that's not a bad piece.' Some are from when I was 10!

      I think we should always leave a piece of writing for at least a couple of days before we publish; we see things in a different light and we don't read what we expect to read, which is what happens when it's fresh.

      Ann

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for reading another of your hubs Ann. I have been going through all my old writing and improving and upgrading than reserecting as hubs. This was a total rework of my first ever poem. Glad you enjoyed it. "Best Hallowe'en poem I've ever read".. What an amazing compliment.

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      This is such fun, I love it! Your poetry goes from strength to strength and you can turn your hand to any mood and subject it seems.

      I'm late to this one as my internet is rubbish at the moment; getting it sorted but will be about 10 days! I get withdrawal symptoms if I'm away from hubpages for too long!

      Best Hallowe'en poem I've ever read, John!

      Ann

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Dana, I am glad you found this hub too. It's good to know your little cousin enjoys my stories/poems.. Proves that kids actually like them, and you of course. Thank you for your kind words. You need to love something to do it well, don't you.

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      Dana Tate 2 years ago from LOS ANGELES

      Jodah: You know how much I love your story telling. I am so glad I stopped into read. Of course, you know I had to read it to my little cousin, and he loved it. He asked me if you were the same one who wrote the elfin story, I cracked up I couldn't believe he still remembered it. I must say I love your presentation and all the pictures you add on your hubs. I can tell you put a lot of love into it. Voted up and awesome.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you so much for taking the time to read this Laura. I am glad you enjoyed their scary adventure and had fun along the way. Cheers back.

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      Laura Schneider 2 years ago from Minneapolis-St. Paul, Minnesota, USA

      Jodah, you positively had me on the edge of my seat worried for the young tricksters! Excellent and funny poem and story. Thank you for writing it! I look forward to your next one, as always! Cheers!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Lisa. Glad you enjoyed this. Sometimes stories tend to bog the reader down whereas rhyming poetry flows and is easier to read (or so I find personally). I appreciate your vote up.

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      Lisa VanVorst 2 years ago from New Jersey

      Jodah this was a great Halloween Poem. Scary and kept me on the edge of my seat. I'm glad you decided to write a poem instead of a story. I really enjoyed. Voted it this one up.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad to scare you anytime Kim..you are welcome. Thanks for agreeing with Jackie that this could be a good children's book too. Happy Halloween.

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      John,

      I agree with Jackie. This would be such a cool children's book. Since my own kids are grown, I don't really get into Halloween. Thanks for making me smile, and of course...for scaring the beejeezes out of me. Smiles.

      Voted Up and Shared.

      Happy Halloween,

      Kim

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Yes we used to be full of foolhardy bravery savvy dating, how times have changed. I always loved a good horror movie too..the scarier the better. Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed.

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      Yves 2 years ago

      Ah, the bravery of young children. Well, sort of....

      I enjoyed your poem very much. I could imagine you and your friend as youngsters getting the bejeezus scared out of you! It made me remember how I loved being spooked when I was a kid.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading Kim. I take it you aren't a fan of rats? :)

      Glad you enjoyed this, and I appreciate the Dr Seuss comparison. I wish!

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      இڿڰۣ-- кιмвєяℓєу 2 years ago from Niagara Region, Canada

      I might have taken the living dead over the rats, John! Ewww! This was entertaining and fun. Perhaps, we are looking at the next Dr. Seuss?

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Shauna, glad you joined in the fun with this one. Happy Halloween back at ya.

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      Shauna L Bowling 2 years ago from Central Florida

      John, this is awesome! It flows beautifully. I was with the boys with every word. The suit of armor full of dead mice was a nice, comical touch to a scary story. Well done, my friend!

      Happy Halloween!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad you enjoyed this travmaj. Yep, what kids aren't scared on the inside but appear the total opposite when others are looking? I know I did.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Frank, I appreciate your comment greatly and wish you a wonderful scary weekend.

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      travmaj 2 years ago from australia

      Great poem for Halloween John, loved the tone of the kids being so scared and so brave. And yes, what a tale of bravery to tell when they are safely home. What an adventure indeed.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      a perfect read for the darkest weekend :) awesome my friend

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Audrey if all those things appeal to you, I can see why you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for your kind comment.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Which video RQ, "Monster Mash" or "5 Most Haunted Places" ? I have to read your hub. I feel Halloween is mostly for kids hence my poem is kid friendly. Thanks for reading

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      Romeos Quill 2 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

      Jodah;

      Your video is the same one as the one I already have on my Hallowe'en poem lol! It is quite a popular song I suppose.

      Anyway, a great, kid-friendly rhyme.

      Have fun;

      R.Q.

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      Audrey Hunt 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      I love scary stories and poetry about spooky houses. Guess this is left over from my childhood.

      And Halloween affords us all the chance to be a child again. Something we all need do to more often. Great poetry as always Jodah!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Alicia, that was the intention. Appreciate you reading this.

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      Linda Crampton 2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

      This poem is great fun, Jodah! It's a great story for Halloween.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Faith. Halloween is all about having spooky fun isn't it? I am glad you enjoyed this poem and that it captured the spirit (excuse the pun).

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      Elsie Hagley 2 years ago from New Zealand

      Perfect poem for Halloween. I read all the way through it, it rhymed well.

      It was like ready a story not a poem, enjoyed it. Thanks.

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      This is such a fun and spooky poem with a great flow that keeps one on one's toes! Perfect Halloween poem. There is no "perfect" button. You have captured that Trick or Treat night of Halloween so well in going places we should know better but we still do it. Great imagery too.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Wow Jackie, what a great comment. My original poem at school was displayed on a classroom wall and I went back years later and it was still there..I was amazed. Thanks again.

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      This really entertaining and fun; it really should be in a children's book somewhere. It could become a classic! Which of course many of us adults love to read too!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for the kind comment Jo. This was fun to write, glad you enjoyed the read.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Hello Nellianna, thanks for reading. Now I have to go and check your Halloween hubs, especially "House on a Hill" :). Thanks for the vote up too.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Ruby, thanks for reading, sharing, voting and tweeting.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Jamie, same to you and yours. Glad you had fun with this.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad you enjoyed this Mel...yes you are right, "Happy" and "Halloween" seem like contradictions but I don't think "the Munsters" would think so.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading firstday. Yes I guess the rhyme and rhythm was along the liners of a Night Before Christmas..guess I could have called it Nightmare Before Christmas..but that's taken too :) Gladvyou found it a fun read.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Wow.. this was fun to read. Loved all the spooky images. Absolutely brilliant!!

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      Nellieanna Hay 2 years ago from TEXAS

      Jodah - good poetry! I voted it up in all the fitting categories. And . . . I knew we must be kindred spirits. I just reprised some Halloween hubs into the 'featured' hubs on my profile page. The first one is somber poetry, named "The Resident Evil"; the other five are the five chapters of one of my first-ever completed fiction storytelling, also some of the first things I've ever written for a Halloween; titled (are you ready for this?) "House On A Hill"!! - It has a pleasant ending, too, by the way.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I loved it! Your rhyming is excellent. What an adventure! Up and sharing on Twitter...

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

      AWESOME fun! Happy Halloween John. Jamie

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      Mel Carriere 2 years ago from San Diego California

      Interesting touch there at the end. Very enjoyable read. Happy Halloween, although I'm not sure what that's supposed to mean on a day dedicated to ghouls and diabolical horrors.

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      R Beggs 2 years ago from Lincoln, Nebraska

      This is a fun poem for Halloween. In the beginning, I sort of found myself reading the poem with the rhythm of the night before Christmas. What fun!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Eric, I wanted this to be able to be read and appreciated by all ages. Thanks for that kind comment. happy Halloween.

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      Eric Wayne Flynn 2 years ago from Providence, Rhode Island

      Perfect Halloween feel, classic scares, no gore or guts, classy fun.

      EWF

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      Hahaha - I am staying inside this Halloween.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Oooooh that is scary Phyllis. Watch out for black cats and ladders.

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      Oh noooooooo ! Your reply to my comment is #13. Woe is me!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading Phyllis. I am amazed at the number of comments already, but I guess it is a topical subject with Halloween upon us. Yes it's quite new here but we tend to embrace things with gusto. Glad you enjoyed my fun poem. Thanks for the vote up and share.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you so much for reading Nikki and for your kind comment.

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      Jodah - this is a wonderful poem full of tense and spooky expectations. How brave of the three to enter the house at all. The poem ran right along in a quick and smooth pace. How delightful and creative for Halloween. This may be a new thing for you Aussies, but, you sure have a good handle on it. I love it.

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      Nikki Wicked 2 years ago from Louisiana

      good job! really well done. good rhyme and story.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you DDE, I'm always trying to write about different subjects to keep my hubs interesting. Thanks for the vote up too.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks Bill, just thought I'd get in the spirit and try something different. Tried to add as many spooky things that sprung to mind. Glad you enjoyed it.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad you enjoyed this Paula....we are also too far out of town to get trick or treaters as well. At least there is a Halloween fun night there. You have to go visit Tumulty House now and tell me all about it. Thanks for the vote up.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey MizBejabbers, yes you would think HP would introduce a "scary" vote especially for Halloween. Glad you enjoyed this scary little adventure. Thanks for the vote up and share.

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      Devika Primić 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Amazing! A fantastic poem from you on Halloween. You are writing on different aspects in your poetry and that is a great move. Voted up!

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      If that was your first Halloween poem, John, you just set the bar pretty high for your second. Great fun. I think you covered just about everything spooky in this one. Love it!

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      Paula 2 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Jodah.....This is Spooktacular....I miss out on the little Trick or Treaters who come begging, due to where I live. However, this little town always has a Halloween Fun Night for the kids, complete with a parade and costume-judging contest. BOO !!!

      Your poem is delightful. I like the picture of The Tumulty House in D.C. It's always nice to have a hub friend from Australia introduce me to an historical building right here under my nose! LOL Thanks, Jodah! UP+++

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      MizBejabbers 2 years ago

      So interesting and funny and, except for the ending, so Edgar Allen Poeish. I love your adventure, John. Voted up and funny and shared. Too bad they don't have a "scary" category for Halloween.

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for being the first to read this bit of halloween fun Eric. Glad you enjoyed it...and the ending especially.

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Fantastic poem. Really fun and timely. Bats and rats are just scary enough for me. I just love the ending.