The Jumper (3 AM Epiphany: Point of View - Imperative)
“Shhhhh…listen closely. Hear the sounds all around you at this very moment. Notice the intensity of the wind, the sound of fear in the air, the loudness of the passing vehicles. Focus on the moment of impact. Think about what it will feel like to hit the ground. Consider your family’s reaction when the cops walk to their door and ring the bell. See your daughter’s face as she looks at your wife and asks “Where’s Daddy?” Think of your son’s cries as he realizes you are not coming home. Feel your wife’s pain as she tucks them in tomorrow night and explains you will not be back to tuck them in because you felt life was not worth living.”
“Back away. Think about what you are doing. Consider how I may respond to the situations you just described. Reflect upon how you would feel if I jumped prematurely. Judge whether you want to be responsible for me not being in the right mind when I step off this ledge.”
“No, do not think of jumping. Think of all you have to live for: family, friends, future activities. Picture the roses and candlelight you can bring to your wife to revive you marriage. Visualize your children’s baseball games and dance recitals. Remember that no news is worth doing this. Do not do jump.”
“Listen to yourself. Hear the tone in your voice as you dictate my actions and rattle off commands for me to implement in this moment. Go over to the left and take a seat. Do not look up until you have considered the last time you were ever convicted of your belief in anything. Assume you were about to make this decision. Sense the trembling within me as I make the final moves toward my action. Imagine that you did not always go with the ‘right’ things or the safe things, but instead wanted to go out on a ledge and make a statement. Think of how it would feel to stand up for your convictions. Believe that your voice can be heard.”
“Know this is not the way to get noticed or be heard. Record a statement and give it to radio stations. Carry a banner around a parking lot. Boycott stores or management techniques. Whatever you do, BACK AWAY NOW and forget you were about to do this.”
“Pick up your phone. Call your wife and let her know you will not be coming home tonight. Notify her that I have decided that you have something to do before you can step foot into your house again. Wipe that look of confusion off your face. Feel what I am feeling since you came all the way up here only to try to talk me down. Imagine how I would look if I let you go now. In fact, get the suit on, get your equipment ready, and deal with the butterflies in your stomach. Suck in your breath and let out a scream. We are about to jump together.”
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LABrashear directed me to 3 AM Epiphany: Uncommon Writing Exercises that Transform Your Fiction by Brian Kiteley. Instead of reviewing the book for you, I will lead you to LABrashear's excellent review here.
Upon encouragement from LABreasher, I have decided to share my responses to Kiteley's exercises with the Hubpages Community. I know that you are honest and will provide valuable feedback so I implore you to read and provide constructive feedback to help me improve. I will remember to thank you in my first book's Acknowledgements page!
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This challenge, Point of View Exercise 2: Imperative, is to write a 500 word story using only commands. No observations. No details. Just commands. Talk about a challenge! I wrote about three different stories halfway before I could finally finish this one and like it enough to post. Who knew learning to write from various points of view could be so challenging?
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- The 3 A.M. Epiphany - Exercise 2
This was a chin-up for me. Remember how important it is to have good relationships with your neighbors!