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The Jumper (3 AM Epiphany: Point of View - Imperative)

Updated on November 7, 2016
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The Jumper

“Shhhhh…listen closely. Hear the sounds all around you at this very moment. Notice the intensity of the wind, the sound of fear in the air, the loudness of the passing vehicles. Focus on the moment of impact. Think about what it will feel like to hit the ground. Consider your family’s reaction when the cops walk to their door and ring the bell. See your daughter’s face as she looks at your wife and asks “Where’s Daddy?” Think of your son’s cries as he realizes you are not coming home. Feel your wife’s pain as she tucks them in tomorrow night and explains you will not be back to tuck them in because you felt life was not worth living.”

“Back away. Think about what you are doing. Consider how I may respond to the situations you just described. Reflect upon how you would feel if I jumped prematurely. Judge whether you want to be responsible for me not being in the right mind when I step off this ledge.”

“No, do not think of jumping. Think of all you have to live for: family, friends, future activities. Picture the roses and candlelight you can bring to your wife to revive you marriage. Visualize your children’s baseball games and dance recitals. Remember that no news is worth doing this. Do not do jump.”

“Listen to yourself. Hear the tone in your voice as you dictate my actions and rattle off commands for me to implement in this moment. Go over to the left and take a seat. Do not look up until you have considered the last time you were ever convicted of your belief in anything. Assume you were about to make this decision. Sense the trembling within me as I make the final moves toward my action. Imagine that you did not always go with the ‘right’ things or the safe things, but instead wanted to go out on a ledge and make a statement. Think of how it would feel to stand up for your convictions. Believe that your voice can be heard.”

“Know this is not the way to get noticed or be heard. Record a statement and give it to radio stations. Carry a banner around a parking lot. Boycott stores or management techniques. Whatever you do, BACK AWAY NOW and forget you were about to do this.”

“Pick up your phone. Call your wife and let her know you will not be coming home tonight. Notify her that I have decided that you have something to do before you can step foot into your house again. Wipe that look of confusion off your face. Feel what I am feeling since you came all the way up here only to try to talk me down. Imagine how I would look if I let you go now. In fact, get the suit on, get your equipment ready, and deal with the butterflies in your stomach. Suck in your breath and let out a scream. We are about to jump together.”

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Interested in buying the book? See the links below for this and other Kiteley writing inspiration books. If you buy it, share your results with us here on Hubpages and let us grow with one another as we improve our writing through this challenging yet fun exercises!

The Background

LABrashear directed me to 3 AM Epiphany: Uncommon Writing Exercises that Transform Your Fiction by Brian Kiteley. Instead of reviewing the book for you, I will lead you to LABrashear's excellent review here.

Upon encouragement from LABreasher, I have decided to share my responses to Kiteley's exercises with the Hubpages Community. I know that you are honest and will provide valuable feedback so I implore you to read and provide constructive feedback to help me improve. I will remember to thank you in my first book's Acknowledgements page!

If you would like to join along, provide feedback with the link to your hub or site so I can enjoy your work as well! Let's grow together as we become better writers. If you are not a writer, please share how you feel about the work as a reader! Thank you for your feedback and support as I go through this challenge.

The Challenge

This challenge, Point of View Exercise 2: Imperative, is to write a 500 word story using only commands. No observations. No details. Just commands. Talk about a challenge! I wrote about three different stories halfway before I could finally finish this one and like it enough to post. Who knew learning to write from various points of view could be so challenging?

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      Dee42 5 years ago from Beautiful Arkansas

      Wow, I never read anything like this. So different, I just had to keep reading, you are a great teacher. Great hub.

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Oh no. I don't bungee jump!! I just thought it would be fun to make it seem like a person jumping and then you find out it is a friend who is trying to talk him out of bungee jumping! My sick sense of humor I guess. Thank you for reading. Three will be up soon. I just have to finalize it and will post by Tuesday.

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      Donaisabella 5 years ago from Fort Myers

      I am finding your challenges very interesting. At first I wonder if it is true or something that happened to you. I like the twist at the end of this one. You are doing pretty fine. Way to go. http://hubpages.com/@donnaisabella

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you, Krystal! I am definitely learning from reading the book and doing the exercises. Join the "club" and share with us! It will be fun. I know I love doing an exercise and then jumping over to LAbrashear to see how she did hers! It is great to see the various styles of writing.

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      Wow. I love this idea. I have been looking to work more on my fiction writing as well. This sounds like a very helpful book to that aim. I thought youe writing was sharp and very engaging. I read it from beginning to end and almost wanted more it was so rich and yummy. Wonderful job. These exercises are sure to sharpen your skills!

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Sally, it is interesting to figure out what to name the story. I figured I would go with 3 AM Epiphany and the title of the exercise because it clearly illustrates what I am doing. I have only been able to find one writer (LABrashear) who made it past exercise 1, and that is hard to believe in a community of writers. So I figured naming it so anyone would be able to find it later would help. However, you are right that it causes you to think about the challenge first and then fall into the story. Thank you for the comments.

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      Sherri 5 years ago from Southeastern Pennsylvania

      What a great introduction to 3 AM Epiphany, which I hadn't heard of. I think your "imperative" story is compelling. Once I stopped thinking "imperative", the story simply sailed on its own. Up and interesting.

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you! The photo was taken out of my room window at The Corinthian Suites. I remember saying to my teenager that I didn't know how people could do it... We were on the 59th floor if I remember correctly. I was looking for a free picture of two guys bungee jumping but couldn't find one that fit the ending for the story. The more I read it the more I think I did okay. This third one is harder though... Still in progress because it is stumping me a bit!

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      LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      So glad you posted this. I thought this was a very creative POV. The photo is dizzying! Voting up!