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The Perfect Day (3 AM Epiphany: Point Of View - The Unstable Self)

Updated on September 4, 2012
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The Perfect Day


The music played softly in the background as her heart began to skip beats. This was the day she had dreamt of since childhood. She had filled days of her life clipping magazines, visiting bridal boutiques, envying each engagement ring she came across, and planning every detail of this day. December 13, 2014: it was the last day for the next 89 years that a couple could get married on a date that had consecutive numbers.

I hope he sticks to the vows we practiced or else we will miss our time, 12:13:14. Oh what if he talks just a second longer?

She tried not to think about it as she fluffed the beautiful white dress and looked around the room for her father.

Where is he? I cannot have a single delay. Everything must be perfect.

Choosing not to panic, she listened to the peaceful music and wondered what her soon-to-be-husband was thinking at the moment as he stood in front of 600 people who were about to witness the best moment of his life. Her father approached her, “Are you ready for this?” She took his arm and replied, “Yes, I am Daddy.”

They opened the doors as the music changed to her father’s favorite song: Butterfly Kisses. One foot in front of the other, just as they had practiced, the lovely young bride made her way down the aisle.

Do not cry. Be strong. I am a strong woman. I can't ruin my makeup. This day will be perfect. This wedding will be perfect…well, except for that hideous dress Mrs. McKinnon decided to wear. Who chooses to wear green to wedding? Oh, and those shoes Mr. Murray. Please tell your wife to get the cataracts surgery so she can see clearly again. Okay, pull it together. There he is waiting for me. My future husband.

As she approached the front of the hall, several guests noticed a painful look appearing on the bride’s face. They wondered what was wrong. She looked beautiful in her ivory and red satin dress. Her bridesmaids wore red satin gowns with ivory corsages and heels. The groomsmen wore ivory tuxes with red fedoras and pointed shoes. The entire wedding was a throwback to eras past and exquisitely designed to provide every guest a day they would remember. What could she possibly feel was not right?

He looks so amazing standing here before me. I wish I could just tell him. My first act as a wife cannot be to say such a thing to him. Oh, but how can I go through the entire wedding and reception like this? Let’s get this over with so we can handle this.

The painful look continued on the bride's face. The guests worried she may run off. The minister provided the usual words and the couple exchanged beautiful vows that brought tears to each guest’s eyes. Then, as they were pronounced man and wife, the bride left the altar.

I can’t do this. I have to fix this right now. I must let him know so we can enjoy the rest of the day.

The bride walked over and reached next to her mother. She grabbed something out of her purse and returned to the altar. The guests were beginning to stir and whisper. Many of them began to think it was quite a unique ending to an already different wedding. The groom reached out his hand toward her and turned away from the crowd toward the minster, who had lost all color in his face. The couple then looked at one another, the groom smiled wide and leaned in to kiss the bride. The couple then turned back to the crowd and began walking toward the entrance as Lady Antebellum’s “Just a Kiss” played over the speakers.

Thank you that he was able to do that so nonchalantly. I could have never stood through the next five minutes of saying hello to everyone knowing that my poor husband was unaware that he had broccoli stuck between his teeth. This day is now perfect.


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The Background

LABrashear directed me to 3 AM Epiphany: Uncommon Writing Exercises that Transform Your Fiction by Brian Kiteley. Instead of reviewing the book for you, I will lead you to LABrashear's excellent review here.

Upon encouragement from LABreasher, I have decided to share my responses to Kiteley's exercises with the Hubpages Community. I know that you are honest and will provide valuable feedback so I implore you to read and provide constructive feedback to help me improve. I will remember to thank you in my first book's Acknowledgements page!

If you would like to join along, provide feedback with the link to your hub or site so I can enjoy your work as well! Let's grow together as we become better writers. If you are not a writer, please share how you feel about the work as a reader! Thank you for your feedback and support as I go through this challenge.

The Challenge

This challenge, Point of View Exercise 4: The Unstable Self, is to write a 500 word story in which I switch from first person to third person without confusing the reader. Did I succeed? Were you clear throughout the story when I was relaying the event, when the bride was thinking, and when someone was speaking? This was not as difficult a challenge as I thought it was going to be other than I had too many ideas. I started at least four stories before sticking with this one and seeing it through. I hope you enjoyed it!

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      LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      Adorable! I was on the edge of my seat. I had absolutely no idea where you were heading at the end. I loved it. This was a hard one for me...you did well! Voted up and across and sharing.

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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Excellent hub! I would say you succeeded all the way. Had me guessing right up till the end.

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you guys! I love to write in this voice so this was an easier one. I realize if you look at The Table, which I share on Faithwriters, it is this voice. I think it is the one I tend to migrate to. Now the next one... Well this will be like 3 was for me...challenging!

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      LABrashear 5 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      I wanted to compliment you on explaining the challenges. I couldn't decide if I should or not. You are doing very well and I know exercise 5 will be great!

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thanks, LA. I decided to do so to encourage others to hopefully join in and also so people will understand what I was trying to accomplish. As others join in, I can link to their hubs and hopefully help support them.

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      KrystalD 5 years ago from Los Angeles

      You succeeded in my book. I love these writing exercises and I definately think it incpires other writer's, lik myself, to step out of out comfort zones. AwesomeZ! You're couragous!

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you, Krystal. I am enjoying them!

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      Jennifer Arnett 5 years ago from California

      You are an excellent story teller. What kept the story moving along was the sense of urgency and conflict. The character was torn between two things she wanted: marrying just the right time, and helping her husband not be embarassed. Love your style. Vote up!

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      Shell Vera 5 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you Availia! I liked writing this one. I had fun with it.

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      Devika Primić 3 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      The Perfect Day (3 AM Epiphany: Point Of View - The Unstable Self) so nicely put together your hubs are informative and useful.

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      Shell Vera 3 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you, DDE!

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