ArtsAutosBooksBusinessEducationEntertainmentFamilyFashionFoodGamesGenderHealthHolidaysHomeHubPagesPersonal FinancePetsPoliticsReligionSportsTechnologyTravel

Love to Last a Lifetime (3 AM Epiphany: Point of View - The Royal We)

Updated on June 15, 2012
Source

Love To Last a Lifetime


We had watched them for years. We observed the way they talked to one another, looked at one another, shared secret jokes we did not get. We noticed the way they held hands under the dinner table, the way they patted on another on the back or side when they walked by, and the way they went on dates every other Friday night. Yes, we believe they first identified what a truly happy couple looked like.

Jessica was always the first to point it out. We were talking one day and she giggled and nodded her head toward Mom and Dad. That’s when we looked and saw them sneaking a kiss in the corner. They caught us looking and blushed. We both giggled and ran over to them and started kissing them both all over their faces while they tickled us until we were laughing so hard our faces were red.

Sarah was pretty oblivious to Mom and Dad’s love for many years. Probably because she was busy with sports and after school activities. She would always act surprised when she felt my (Jessica’s) nudge or saw me giggle. Then we would go over to Mom and Dad and they would shower us with love until we couldn’t stand it any longer. It was always such a great feeling to have such an amazing family.

When we were in our early 50s, Dad began to forget things and act strangely. He would dial Jessica’s number and ask for me (Sarah). She would tell him that he dialed Jessica and he would become angry with her, as though it were me lying about who answered. It slowly progressed to him forgetting to show up to work, put on pants, or eat dinner. He would wander the streets of New York and forget where he lived. It became too scary for Mom to handle at home, so she admitted him to an assisted living facility.

Dad was so upset and felt as though we had abandoned him. He would tell me (Jessica) that he was feeling lost and that he just wanted his memory back. He could remember the day he met Mom, the war, even his childhood; yet, he couldn’t remember whether he had used the bathroom five minutes ago or brushed his teeth that morning. It was so hard to watch him deteriorate so quickly. Our hearts broke for him; but Mom’s heart broke the most.

We began reading about Alzheimer’s disease and how to help your loved ones through it. It became an obsession for us to go to the library and read for hours and then go visit Dad. We would take Mom places so she could feel happy, but it didn’t work. Her heart was hurting for Dad. Longing for the man she married nearly 60 years earlier. One time, we took her on a cruise and she cried the entire time because she felt bad for leaving Dad behind.

Soon Dad was nearly unable to speak and kept fracturing his bones from forgetting basic life skills such as walking and writing. He was unable to accept that he was dying slowly because he couldn’t comprehend how his brain would forget the easiest of tasks while remembering things that had happened so long ago. He became very sad and slowly let go.

One night Mom went to visit him and decided she would spend the night. She had become frail and was not doing well so she wanted to spend time with Dad while she still could. In the morning, we were at Sarah’s place when the phone rang. They had found Mom and Dad lying together in his bed, arms wrapped around one another, smiles on their face. Between them, the nurses found a picture of them in their 20s. They fell in love holding hands and died holding hands. They fell in love with smiles on their faces and died with smiles on their faces. They brought us into this world knowing their love would last forever and they died showing us that love truly does last forever.

Source

The Background

LABrashear directed me to 3 AM Epiphany: Uncommon Writing Exercises that Transform Your Fiction by Brian Kiteley. Instead of reviewing the book for you, I will lead you to LABrashear's excellent review here.

Upon encouragement from LABreasher, I have decided to share my responses to Kiteley's exercises with the Hubpages Community. I know that you are honest and will provide valuable feedback so I implore you to read and provide constructive feedback to help me improve. I will remember to thank you in my first book's Acknowledgements page!

If you would like to join along, provide feedback with the link to your hub or site so I can enjoy your work as well! Let's grow together as we become better writers. If you are not a writer, please share how you feel about the work as a reader! Thank you for your feedback and support as I go through this challenge.

The Challenge

This challenge, Point of View Exercise 6: The Royal We, is to write a 600 word story from the point of view of a closely-knit couple withing using "I" in the text. I had a really hard time with this one! I went through four story ideas before settling for this one. Not one of my favorites but I hope you enjoyed it. As always, please share your feedback! I appreciate it all.

I hope more of you will join in this challenge and share your writing. If you do, please remember to leave a note below so I can add links to your hubs from the ones for that challenge!

Comments

    0 of 8192 characters used
    Post Comment

    • Faith Reaper profile image

      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      This is so sweet and heartbreaking at the same time. My sweet mother has dementia now, and it is hard to see her this way, but she is still always so sweet, as she has been my whole life. This is a great piece. In His Love, Faith Reaper

    • Pamela Kinnaird W profile image

      Pamela Kinnaird W 4 years ago from Maui and Arizona

      Voted up and awesome but I was wondering how it was the same storyline as The Notebook. Now I see that you have done this as fiction.

    • Becky Katz profile image

      Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      This was a lovely story. I really enjoyed reading it.

    • EyesStraightAhead profile image
      Author

      Shell Vera 4 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you! As I was writing the end, I thought of The Notebook as well, which is why this isn't one of my favorites. It was a hard exercise for me since I could not use "I". But it is finished ad the next one is much better and not one about which you will say, "I have read this before!" Faith, it is a sad illness. I have a friend going through it with his grandparents. I used to provide Companion work for Dementia patients. Just love on her and tell her stories of the old days!

    • LABrashear profile image

      LABrashear 4 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      Ack! You made me cry! Then, I read it to my husband and you made his eyeballs sweat! That was so beautiful! Sniff, sniff...voted up and shared.

    • EyesStraightAhead profile image
      Author

      Shell Vera 4 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you Laura! I enjoyed writing it but wish I had done better with not making it like The Notebook.

    • LABrashear profile image

      LABrashear 4 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      I'm not much of a "chick flick" kind of person...I actually did see The Notebook. (And yes, I loved it.) I saw some similarities, but I really liked how you made it from their children's perspectives. My husband and I were high school sweeties and have been together many years...I could picture how we embarrass our kids when we hold hands or kiss. I hope we do not deal with the loss of memory, but I always tell hubby we better die on the same day when we're 99 years old. :) I loved it.

    • Faith Reaper profile image

      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Thank you, EyesStraightAhead, your comments to me are so precious, and I appreciate the wise advice. God bless you, Faith Reaper

    • EyesStraightAhead profile image
      Author

      Shell Vera 4 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you, Laura. I do believe I read once that we are required to embarrass our children! I hope to fall in love like that some day and be able to make my girls giggle with silly faces and say "eeeewwww!" LOL

    • EyesStraightAhead profile image
      Author

      Shell Vera 4 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Anytime, Faith. We are all supposed to encourage one another! Have a great weekend.

    • Marsei profile image

      Sue Pratt 4 years ago from New Orleans

      This is very touching and I enjoyed reading it.

      marsei

    • EyesStraightAhead profile image
      Author

      Shell Vera 4 years ago from Connecticut, USA

      Thank you Marsei. I am glad you enjoyed it. Please check out some of the others. My favorites are The Execution That Gave Life and The Perfect Day.

    Click to Rate This Article