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Tragedy: Chapter 1

Updated on May 29, 2017
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I had a very happy teenage life and the most cherished memory of it was my passion of writting.

The atmosphere contained nothing except the thunderous beats, when each time my feet stumbled upon the jagged surface as I ran. I had cold feet. My breathing was hard and smoldering, legs ached and trembled and lungs ripped apart with heavy metal claws. My head was drumming against my skull, and heart throbbed dreadfully, giving me thumps on the ribs. Exhaustion took over me but I made bold and ran to a bitter end, with a thought circling in my floating brain. I was fleeing from someone and the fret and agitation depicted that someone was after me.

My breath was fainting. I started to throttle. It became hard to manage more running; my pace slowed. A bitter electric shock went through my feet, originating from the toe, instantly. I fell on the ground, producing a thud. I couldn’t get up because of fatigue; had fallen upside down and crept forward.

Dragging my exhausted body, my stretched hand touched something hard and cold. Felt more like a huge rock. I dragged further and somehow, hardly, managed to rest my back on the rock. I couldn’t feel my legs now. My throat had dried. It was dark. Nothing was visible. I starred at it. Squinting didn’t help.

The fear ruled over me. My breath was escaping. I could hardly keep my body and soul together. At every instant, the howling of fear increased. My eyes tried to search and ears to hear. The air was tranquil. There was not even a hum. More fear. Suddenly, slow and gradual footsteps started to drum against my ears.

I was breathing my last breath. There wasn’t else to save me and I was all alone on my own. The exhaustion and formidability got better of me; my body paralyzed. I was half dead; the soul has to go now. “Hope for the best and get the worst”. The footsteps were loud now, loud enough that I could judge, it was close. I heard breathing; the rhythm and pace wasn’t mine, someone else was breathing.

It was close…

A sigh,

“Bloody Marry… Bloody Marry,” a stone heavy voice struck my head. The rhythm in the voice was fearful. Why would someone take the name of a ghost? What was happening? I was unable to think more.

The air started to blow; atmosphere became chilly. My body frozen in its place started to shiver. A squeaking laughing sound ran past my ear. I couldn’t see anything but gave my head a jerk to look. I turned it straight again slowly. The fear had already burst my head but now my eyes exploded into tears. A beam of light suddenly tore apart the darkness and landed into my eyes. I couldn’t blink, instead, my eyes widened and stared into it. Nothing was visible to me but I was visible to someone behind that small round light source. A portion of warm air gradually warmed my freezing veins at the side of my neck but it was no pleasure. There was someone breathing close to me, so close that it could touch and kill in a jiff. I didn’t turn my head to look. There wasn’t one I was running from_ there were two; one behind the light and one_ Bloody Marry.


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      Maryam Rehman 2 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank you So much Sarvat! :)

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      Sarvat Peerzadi 2 months ago from Pakistan

      Great Story! Keep Writing!

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      Maryam Rehman 2 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank you so much Najam!

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      najam997 2 months ago

      Hello Maryam!

      I started reading first paragraph just to get the idea of whole story but somehow after sometime I realized I am reading the last sentence of chapter 1...couldn't resist myself from reading whole chapter.

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      Maryam Rehman 2 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank You so much Tamara!

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      Tamara Yancosky 2 months ago from No Idea Where

      Great Hub! Glad you are here!

      Tamara

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      Maryam Rehman 2 months ago from Pakistan

      Hi John! thank you so much for the advice. this is my first ever try of writing a story and I'm really glad to have an advice from you! You are a great writer and i surely will try and act upon it. :)

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      John Hansen 2 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Maryam. Welcome to HubPages. This is a gripping story and your short, sharp sentences add to the tension. I felt you tried to be a little too descriptive however..just let your writing flow a little more naturally. Too many adjectives tend to overpower the reader a little. Just my bit of advice. I do look forward to reading chapter two however.

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      Maryam Rehman 3 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank you Kyle!

      Wish you best of luck on Hubpages! :)

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      Kyle Stark 3 months ago from Chicagoland Area, Illinois

      I'm with your audience. There's a lot of potential here. I'm glad you write. Welcome to HubPages

      -The real new guy

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      Maryam Rehman 3 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank you SO much Flourish! I will try my best to please my readers.

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      FlourishAnyway 3 months ago from USA

      Welcome to HubPages! I look forward to reading more chapters. I liked this.

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      Maryam Rehman 3 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank you so much Galaxy! :) you are great!

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      GalaxyRat 3 months ago from The Crazy Rat Lady's House

      Maryam, I bet you'll do awesome. Keep writing!

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      Maryam Rehman 3 months ago from Pakistan

      Galaxy:

      I didn't draw this picture but i am thinking of drawing pictures for more chapters I am writing!

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      GalaxyRat 3 months ago from The Crazy Rat Lady's House

      Maryam-

      Did you draw the picture? It's really good!

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      Maryam Rehman 3 months ago from Pakistan

      GalaxyRat:

      Thank you so much for appreciating my writing. The character is not really dying but I tried to leave it as a mystery; whether the character dies or lives. And I guess that works! :) THank you again!

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      GalaxyRat 3 months ago from The Crazy Rat Lady's House

      Maryam-

      This is awesome! Don't change a thing, but I do have a question. Is the character dying? Who is following here? You might find my article https://hubpages.com/literature/How-to-Write-an-Ex... useful. If you are to reveal the answers in later chapters, then this is a story worthy of a award!

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      Maryam Rehman 4 months ago from Pakistan

      Thank you soo much :)

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      Sheena Hutchinson 4 months ago from NY

      Love it! And congrats on your first Hub!