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A Cross Examination

Updated on March 23, 2014



Sonia Torres was literally shaking as she took the oath. The jurors had a clear view of that. She tried to sit comfortably, hands on her lap, her face staring into the prosecutor’s eyes. She was unwilling to acknowledge the alleged rapist at the defendant’s table.

It was the defendant’s attorney’s dream watching Torres collapsing from fear. She would be unable to answer, unable to tell the court anything about the rape. All he needed to do was create doubt. She sat there looking confused and somewhat disoriented. He had to play on that if he was going to get an acquittal.

After all the court formalities were completed the defense attorney stood in front of Torres. He took his time asking questions. It was deliberate and effective. He took her through the foundation questions and back to that night on Railroad Avenue.

“You let him in around 11:30 pm, yes?”

She nodded.

“Yes?”

“Yes,” she answered softly.

“Miss Torres,” the defense attorney started soothingly. “Try to keep your voice up so the ladies and gentlemen of the jury can hear you.”

“Okay.”

“So you let him into your apartment?” he continued. “A friend?”

“I thought he was my cousin.”

“Yes or no!” shouted the defense attorney.

“Yes,” she replied; her voice cracking and was just a little more than a whisper.

“Can you tell the ladies and gentlemen of the jury approximately what time it was when you realized that he wasn’t your cousin?”

She looked confused.

“Well?”

“I don’t know…”

“Can you point him out?”

Sonia Torres’s eyes broke from the defense attorney for a quick second, just long enough to follow her right hand in the direction of the accused.

“Him,” she said quietly, her eyes quickly moved back to the defense attorney.

“Tell us what happened that night.”

She started to tell the court what happened and it all began before she was falling off to sleep. She told the court of the knock on her door, and how the defendant came in and immediately took advantage of her. Her story was close to monosyllabic and the judge reminded her once again to speak into the microphone.

She was crying, it was just enough for it to show, but not enough for the defense attorney to stop. He continued trying to confuse her while the prosecutor objected.

“Over ruled!”

“Object!

“Over ruled!”

Several weeks passed and the defense attorney had worked all the corners using harsh tactics to rattle her story, and during the closing arguments he tried to nail home that the girl was mistaken, and that his client could not have raped her. He worked on her so hard prolonging her agony but doing little to change the essentials of her story.

The jury came back with a quick verdict. The defense attorney was surprised when the jurors came back in as quickly as they departed. The foreman stood and faced the judge.

“What say you?”

“Guilty.”

The defense attorney’s face was drained of color when the verdict hit him. He thought he did everything possible to prove doubt. He thought the jury would see the girl rattling and changing her story often was a clear indication of doubt. He was wrong.

Sonia Torres was crying and laughing in the same breath as the guilty verdict sunk in.

The judge looked at Sonia Torres for a moment. “Remember Miss Torres, the quiet embrace of truth is a powerful force.”

She nodded.

The defendant stared at Torres and there was a long silence that no one in that courtroom tried to fill.

Sonia Torres sat quietly thinking about what had happened that night. She remembered running down the hallway naked, heart pounding and her lungs burning. She was screaming rape at the top of her lungs.


She happened to be staring out of her second floor window while the accused was in bed watching her. She looked at him and smiled.

“What’s on your mind Sonia?”

“I was just picturing us living on Spring Street with two kids, a white house, flowers…”

“What?”

“Us, our future,” she added.

“Sonia, this was a one night stand, I just met you.”

“What?”

“I have no intentions of making this a relationship,” he said. “I thought you understood that. I told you I was moving to Philadelphia.”

“I thought I was going with you.”

He laughed.

Sonia Torres took on an aggrieved wounded look, and she removed her night gown and started for the door. She screamed into the hallway crying rape. A neighbor opened his door and saw terror and vulnerability in her eyes. She continued screaming rape at the top of her lungs…




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© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank u JPSO

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      JPSO138 3 years ago from Cebu, Philippines, International

      My godfather was a lawyer and I often come along with him during court hearings. I do agree that people lie despite the fact that they swear to tell the trut.ph. Now back to your hub. This is definitely great. It's like reading a novel with a great twist on the end. Uo for this one!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Pegcole :)

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      Peg Cole 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      Well that was an unexpected twist. You really built a chilling and realistic tale here, Frank. Engaging and well written. Very interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Lisa :)

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      Wow, I was not expecting that...at all! This is such a well written story! I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for posting, I voted up.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you thelyricwriter for visiting :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 4 years ago from West Virginia

      Frank, a wonderful creation you have here. Awesome ending and writing Frank. Big thumbs up. Voted up, awesome, interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Seeker good to see you again :)

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      Helen Murphy Howell 4 years ago from Fife, Scotland

      Another awesome tale from your talented pen - or keyboard!

      This is beautifully written with an awesome and shocking ending! There's only one thing worse than a rapist and that's a woman screaming 'rape' when there isnt - this gripping story is a warning to men on what not to do on a one night stand! I hope justice catches up with her one day!

      Voted up everything + shared!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Till...:)

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      You led us down the garden path like so many lead a jury! Splendid my friend and all too alarming.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      LOL silly Lady Trix are for kids LOL

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      Joanna Chandler 4 years ago from On planet Earth

      LOL what a MASTER PIECE you've written I enjoyed the read and the twist to the bottom. Sonia not easy with herself a a..........

      Thanks for sharing your talent Mr. Franky lymmon ooo wa ooo wa oo wa oowa why do fools fall in love lol

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks khmazz :)

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      Kristen Mazzola 4 years ago from South Florida

      So discriptive I felt like I was sitting right there in the court room! great writing!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Faith for reading my Cross..:)

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Wow, too close to reality is this one! Scary thought. One never really knows what is going on in the mind of another.

      Excellent write once again. Voted up +++ and sharing

      God bless, Faith Reaper

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Our Ms Brooks and Darknlovely.. bless you both :)

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      Annie 4 years ago from NewYork

      What a story indeed, I can't wait to read your book. enlightening... you capture my attention.

      blessed annie..

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      wow Frank.. what a story.. I thought I knew what was going to happen and then wow.. hit me in the face.. anyone can lie cant they?

      sharing

      Debbie

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Vin :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      I have visited court room for many years. I can almost picture your story.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks X-Man im glad you stopped by :)

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Quite a story here, could have gone either way, but the end was a surprise to me.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      I like to think I do Moms... but all I wanted was for you to swab my deck mateeeee..:) LOL Audrey you are indeed correct..

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Scary what can happen when one meets a psychopath--so well done Frank! Loved this!

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      A lot is hidden beneath waters that do nut run shallow Frank but you already know that. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      LOL a sailor hmm :)

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      It must be the day or something. Apparently hormones make me curse. I was once a sailor so I am good at it but it is not in my nature to use it regularly. LOL

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Moms.. go ahead say the B word LOL and thank you too Eddy for stopping by :)

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Wow an amazing story Frank with that twist at the end which I did not expect. Wonderful and voted up. Keep them coming.

      Eddy.

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      My honest initial reaction was... Oh, this lady is a crazy B* but then I am not sure that I am known for such fieriness yet or if I should say the b word on hubs. I don't use it often.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Alastar for visiting my Cross.. good to see you bro, and thank you Gypsy and Blossoms for also taking time out to visit my page bless you guys :)

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      A good story well told, including the twist at the end. Especially as it has the ring of truth and probably happens far more than we know.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up. That was one terrific story. WOW Talk about a woman scorned. Passing this on.

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      Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Far too many are falsely accused and convicted in these matters and far too many are never caught or get off. And nobody tells the story as well as you do my friend.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      LOL, yeah.. it was my intentions Valley, this was actually a longer piece that I chopped up just keeping enough to make it work.. glad you liked it my friend :)

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      Wow....you would have to be one twisted individual to pretend you are the victim for the duration of a rape case...the ending was a complete surprise, I was expecting the opposite..a guilty man getting a not guilty verdict...I think that was your intention...and it worked Frank!...excellent work buddy :-))

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Becky and tobusiness for stopping by :)

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      This is why so many genuine cases of rape goes unreported....brilliantly done. You're so darn good at these!

      Bring em on.

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      Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      This happens much more often than people realize. In other things as well as rape. Unfortunately, when people swear to tell the truth, they lie.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Justasksusan for visiting my Cross.. and Ms Dora it is always good to see you bless you both :)

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      Dora Weithers 4 years ago from The Caribbean

      No Philadelphia for him, now. People like Sonia make me not want to serve as a juror; make me not want to be a judge. Frank, you led us on like she led on the jury.

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      Susan Zutautas 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Wow! Makes one wonder how often this happens.