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A Harlequin Romance In Poetic Form

Updated on January 9, 2017
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My Thought Process Leading Up to the Poem

This poem is inspired by the theme of love. It's one of the themes I like to write. I draw on inspiration from my own life, because poetry, to me, is best in the form of personal feelings and experiences.

When I started jotting this one, I got the inclination of a harlequin romance novel. I decided to use the poetic words of thee and thy in place of you and your, so my mind whisked off to Harlequin land in poetic form.

When I had a lot of time on my hands, when I was much younger, I read a lot, and my fingers would trail the books in the library and unfailingly always stop on a dramatic romance novel. I always thought I would write a romance novel one day. Who knows? Maybe I will find the time and the courage to start that in a few years.

For now, poetry is my forte. I have grown to love it. Honestly, I'm not good at picking out the genre, because there are so many genres in writing poetry. I tend to think mine are all lyrical, they seem to tell my story in rhyme more than any other type I have researched. Even so, I put them under the category of poems and poetry period. I don't pick out a genre other than that. It's safer that way. I wouldn't want to look like an inexperienced poet, but I am; I'll just be honest! :)


It's Just Artistic Vision. My Creative Process and My Way of Sharing It

I hope you enjoy my poetry and please comment if you like. Negative or positive, all comments are welcome. I do like the constructive criticism. Although, If it's negative that you find in my words, please know that there is a pleasant professional way to spill your advice to me. Lately, I've had a few run-ins with some very disrespectful advice givers in the forums, and it just seems harsh. Remember, it's not about crushing dreams. It's about helping others in a positive manner, even if you have a negative critique of something. I should give an example; if you say, " You really need to take lessons, you have no talent when it comes to writing." Well, that's a bit harsh, isn't it? However, if you say; "I think your poem has promise, although I do notice a few minor mistakes that grammar sites like grammarly or whitesmoke could help you with. In saying that, please keep writing, practice makes perfect, and you have great potential." See, isn't there a good way to give advice??

Anyway, again, I hope you like my poem. I hope it reads well as you recite it aloud or silently. I appreciate everyone who stops by my page and takes the time to read my words. Thank You!

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A Passionate Praise

A beautiful bit of

chaos is what thee

are.


A ferocious uninhibited

spouting of harsh

words.


Yet, I love thee for

when thee are so

boldly bound, to set

thy point like lightning

to the ground.


Thee are that beautiful

thunder that trembles

my flesh on dark rainy

nights.


Thee are that violent

wind that carries my

breath in flight.


Floating across the

oceans blue, coming

to rest softly on thy

lips.


Touch it there when

thee feel it land, and

know it’s my spirit

thee touch with thy

hand.

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A Passionate Praise Continued

Thee are so dear to me,

but thy anger ceases

thee to see how I cherish

our union in its beautiful

misery.


Thee sometimes leave in

a vast of rage, carrying

with thee my slaughtered

heart.


One day, I fear that thee

won’t come back, and my

chest will be forever empty

and black.

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Constructive Criticism In a Polite Way Please...

Do you feel my poem would sound better with the you and your instead of thee and thy?

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A Passionate Praise Conclusion

Therefore, I beg of thee

now to slow down. Stop

and listen to every sound.


Every sound our souls

speak. I know thee

hear and see our

uniquely rare true

Love story.


Look in my eyes of

hazel, thee will

capture within

thyself my aura.


It knows the truth

beyond vision and

words. It knows

destiny that waits

for us beyond this

earth.


Hold that vision within

thyself. I bequeath my

love to thee to lock inside

thy memory.

© 2015 Missy Smith

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      Thank you Deb! I'm going to agree with you. They just don't have to read it if they feel it's not worthy. :)

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      Deb Hirt 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      I have never seen this style before, and I like how it flows. It also appears to capture what other types of poetry cannot. The way that I look at it, if someone doesn't like it, they just don't have to read it.

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      Surabhi Kaura 2 years ago

      Never change yourself for the sake of others, Missy. You are beautiful the way you are (inside and out). I am so glad to hear your feedback. You are a proud Momma, and of course, a lovely person :) God bless you too, my dear Friend! Enjoy the festive season! Merry Christmas :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      It always means a lot when I have your approval, Frank. You are a tremendous talent, so it's just a true honor when you like my work. :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      Many thanks Sujaya! Take care!

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      Wow! What a great comment and compliment Surabhi. I thank you for your kindness. I am, indeed, a die hard romantic. I think for a long time in my life, I didn't like myself, because as others had their certain identity and personality, I could not pick my niche of just who I was. I always loved so many things and felt so many ways. Now that I'm older, I have realized just how great it is to be this way. It's really good to be me! Many Blessings to you Sweet Lady!!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Love the pitch.. soft words in your romantic effort.. awesome Missy, simply awesome

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      sujaya venkatesh 2 years ago

      height of romance

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      Surabhi Kaura 2 years ago

      Wow!! Missy!! Lovely poetry… beautiful… beautiful! I’m in love with this hub… full of Romance, yeah! The pictures are just…. you know what I mean (he he). I LOVE it. You have used Shakespearean language very well. It doesn’t matter how we use it. The main concern should be that how exactly we are expressing the message. You have expressed it in the most passionate way. I see, you have a romantic side too. I like reading Romance :) Romantic poets are very down to Earth; very emotional and sometimes, they can easily become sentimental. It’s in their nature. So one must always make sure to talk politely with a Romantic poet :)

      Thank you for writing this. Lovely pictures! Write more Romance :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      Thank you, John. I think when I write something and I come up with these bright ideas of mine to make them a certain theme, sometimes I may not be correct on my choices. However, I think it's all a part of my creative process. I explore things. I take chances. If I didn't, I don't think writing would be fun at all for me. It would be quite boring. lol.

      I'm glad that you understand my creative process bad or good! :)

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      The pictures you used are perfect Missy...very erotic, but they are meant to be to suit the style of the Harlequin books. I realised they were from the covers and I like them :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      I actually have a daughter and a son, Manatita. Hugs to you from my family. :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      Thank you, Venkatachari. I used the pictures I used because I wanted it to be a passionate piece. And I went with a Harlequin Romance theme; or attempted to. So, these pictures are from covers of those books.

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      manatita44 2 years ago from london

      Thank you, Missy. All valuable experience. Let us return to the Christmas Spirit. My very best wishes to you and family. Two girls, did you say? Hugs to them. Much Love.

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      Venkatachari M 2 years ago from Hyderabad, India

      Beautiful expression in a new style. I do not find any awkwardness in the usage of 'thee' and 'thy'. They are as good as 'you' and 'your'. Pictures are too much romantic to suit the context. A great hub as always.

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      Thank you, Dana. Yes, I was trying to make the point of; if you see a mistake or two, or even three or more, just tell them the ways to check their work before posting. Go run it through those sites. I certainly do this every time I post, because I know I'm not so good at grammar. I love to write, yes; however, I have some trouble with punctuation and things such as that. There are just some really harsh so-called advice givers who seem to hang around the forums ready to give negative feedback to everyone who visits there. It's a little distressing. I can say I won't be back to post a personal forum question, but I might answer one or two now and again.

      Thanks for stopping in and Merry Christmas to you! :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      I believe I have learned a lesson about visiting and interacting in the forums, Manatita. I really let the bad aura of those few people draw me in. As I haven't posted much in the forums myself asking questions, I often read others asking for help there. Really minor little questions, a little constructive criticism in a nice manner, but what they get from these handful of people is just harsh words; really only drowning dreams and trying to derail their continuing here on Hubpages. I really do not understand why the hubpage employees who keep up with the site, have not noticed this group of individuals. I think I wanted to take up for some of the nice people who just wanted personable advice, and I went too far. I did have the good grace to apologize though. Of course, they still wouldn't accept it, and in true bully form pointed out my badness instead of theirs and had me banned for a day. It didn't bother me. I had no intention of going back anyway.

      Yes, the pictures are alluring. They are covers of Harlequin Romances; I thought it fit. I have to admit I have an alluring side to me, so it's easy for me to write this type of poem and posts those pictures. I do apologize for interrupting your spiritual practice. I would not want to do that. I think you know this.

      I wasn't sure I wanted to write for a little while since the forum fiasco, but I started typing, and as I should have known, it became my self help therapy to get myself over the emotions of that run-in.

      Thanks for stopping by and reading my work. You know I always love to hear your feedback. :)

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      Missy Smith 2 years ago from Florida

      I went over this poem like 30 times probably, Jodah. I get confused with the Shakespearean theme, and Harlequin is in normal font, but I thought I would bring the two together as they both are of dated romantic themes. I'm still undecided if I want to change the thee's and thy's to you's and your's. lol... That link you sent should be interesting, since I don't know many more words than these I used here. I really showed my inexperience on this one, but that's what I like to do. I like to show my vulnerabilities. Thank You!

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      Dana Tate 2 years ago from LOS ANGELES

      I loved the poem and found either thee, thou, or you, yours to be quite nice either way. As far as people making comments about poetry, as far as pointing out grammar mistakes is crazy. I always found it to be an expression of someone's heart and passion expressed in words. I never looked to see if it was Grammarly correct but paid attention to the meaning. Oh, well that's just me and my opinion anyway, Merry Christmas to you and yours.

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      manatita44 2 years ago from london

      Your writing remains as beautiful as ever, and your poetry is exquisite!

      As to the pictures ..well, they are quite stunning and for me, very alluring! Still, I ran through them quickly as, relating to my spiritual practice, I have to be so careful! I'm still weak.

      I'm telling you all this, only because I treasure you as a Friend, and feel that you'll understand.

      Your points and entreaties earlier in the Hub are very valid. It can be so painful when we are seemingly or consciously attacked. I know of one friend who do not like to visit those particular forums or Q's &A's. They can be quite vicious.

      I support you, yes, but what I do when I get there is at most to give one comment, as I can quickly sense antagonism, and would afterwards mostly practice 'Silent Love.' Responding in an effort to be polite or give an honest viewpoint, can sometimes produce more pain, from a feedback coming from what can be essentially a dim Light. Happy Christmas!

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Missy, I love that you wrote this in "Harlequin" or even "Shakespearean" language. The images are stunning and add to the atmosphere.

      I have always had problems deciding when to use "thee" or "thou" as well as "thy" and "thine". Here is a short article I came across recently that helps: http://unenlightenedenglish.com/2009/07/thou-thee-...

      I think you have used "thee" and "thy" correctly though and in fact Shakespeare apparently confused people by using all forms (including you and I) in the same work at times. The only time I have really thought about using this "old style" writing was in my "Tales of Murder and Suspense" sonnets and my "Masterpiece" hub...and even then I shied away from using "thou, thee, thy etc." Your poems often inspire me to try different things and this hub may do the same. Thanks, and well done.

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