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A Hollowness Inside

Updated on May 31, 2012

The child’s scream

was etched in his mind,

frenzied thoughts emerged,

driving him insane,

as they collided inside his brain,

it was an odd sensation,

and his face was dampened

with perspiration,

the only sound he could hear

was the child’s voice,

which sounded in his ear,

the child, pale skin,

dark hair,

small and very thin,

on the kitchen floor,

stabbed,

then stabbed some more,

all this sociopath could see

were the ghosts of the murdered children,

huddled in masses

yearning to be free,

day after day,

he felt consumed,

killing wasn’t a desire, but a need,

and after the murder,

the terror became his daily feed,

it was more like a command,

as he fought back the urge

to take the child’s lifeless hand,

he lured them with a variety of candies,

the wonderful shapes and sizes,

but only death became the secret prizes

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you flourish..bless you

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      This just makes me wonder what was done to him to make him like that. You capture his motives well, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Raci for stopping by :)

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, here you go again Frank, weaving a macabre so gross it makes our insides churn...fantastic...

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Sue.. just bless you :)

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      Sueswan 5 years ago

      Hi Frank,

      An excellent portrayal of a serial killer.

      Voted up and away.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      H-- thanks so much for actually reading between the lines :) Frank

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      Brenda Barnes 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      Ah Frank, you make me weep. The world can be a terrible place and the most innocent are at great risk. Your writing puts us there and makes us aware which is necessary is we are to rid the world of evil. Thank you Frank for sharing your writings with us. Even when painful they teach.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Andrea.. bless you girl :) Frank

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      Andera 5 years ago

      An 'awesome' read, for lack of a better... button.

      The ending really leaves us hanging, with no resolution, no anything. The murders will continue.

      Captivating, even if for a short while.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      wow clint eastwood is one of my favorite actors.. from Rawhide.. to dirty harry..:)

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      Voronwe 5 years ago

      Great portrayal of a sociopath's mind! Chilling really, so vivid. And I was just watching Clint Eastwood's "Changeling" a couple days ago. This could be written for the psychopath in that movie. Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by girishpuri

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      Girish puri 5 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      scary but true, voted up, Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I know you got my back Marlene.. bless you girl :)

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      lovedoctor926 5 years ago

      Great imagery Frank. You paint a good picture for your readers with your words. Looking forward to reading more of your books. Sorry for the late comments, I haven't been on hubpages too much lately. You know you are one of my favorite and greatest fans. Happy Friday!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Jackie for taking the time to read my entry and Rosemay yes.. I try to offer what might lay in the serial killer's mind and thank Rahul for leaving your footprints bless you guys :) Frank

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      What a cinematically thrilling verse this is my friend! Awesome to the core

      The way you bring about each word in the poem is fantastic...

      Brilliant from each point of view

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      This one hits hard because we read of things like this all the time. The world carries far too many sickos.

      Well written to get the feel of lays in this serial killers mind across.

      Has my vote too

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      Jackie Lynnley 5 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Wow, a horrible thing done up well. Definitely different.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Gypsy, Angelme and Our Dear Ms Brooks for stopping by my hollowness.. and Joyce its always good to see you bless you all

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Voted up and awesome. You have really written a scary poem and is sounds so real.

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Oh MY FRANK!! this is scary because it is so true.. You really described it so well.. I hung on with every word.. awesome and scary at the same time

      Blessing

      Debbie

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      Angelme566 5 years ago

      This line strike me most-killing wasn’t a desire, but a need,

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      Gypsy48 5 years ago

      Awesome poem about such a horrible reality. Voted up and awesome.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks tsmog

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      Tim Mitchell 5 years ago from Escondido, CA

      intense

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      I agree thank you cyndi10 :)

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      Cynthia B Turner 5 years ago from Georgia

      Hello Frank, great writing, as always. Too bad the world is full of - as Gypsy Rose Lee says - sickos! They give us lots to write about, unfortunately.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      good morning gypsy and thank you for stopping by

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. Wow talking about crazies out there and serial killers. This one's a real sicko. Unfortunately sometimes we read things like this in newspapers. Well done starts slow and builds up to many, many shivers.