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A Night, a Porch, the Sky, and the Moon ( written 2/17/11 )

Updated on February 22, 2011

A night...


A porch...


The sky...


And the moon....




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Its 9:48 in the evening , it feels later than midnight

A full moon floating above, to fill my impaired sight

Free roaming clouds surround a distant globe so bright

The darkness around me surrenders to moonlight


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On my desolate porch I’m standing

A long day’s memory subsides

My full attention, the moon demanding

This interstellar creator of tides


The sky never ceases to amaze me

Boasting vast shades of blue, black, and grey

On nights like these, I fear that I’m crazy

My wandering thoughts tend to draw me away


Away from a planet infested with demons

Toward a dreamlike state, enveloped in bliss

Separated from an Earth filled with omens

Comfortably drifting into lunar abyss


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Its 10:18, and heavenly stars are aligning

I’m in awe of these inner thoughts that I’m finding

Upon my porch, the moonlight is shining

I’m rather amazed that my words are still rhyming


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Sobriety left me when I walked through my door

Memories haunting luminescent horizons

Experience taught me, when it rains, it may pour

I’m reminding myself to let bygones be bygones


The past is behind us, but hearts have been broken

I am presently drifting in idle repetition

What was done is fulfilled, what’s said has been spoken

Beliefs have been twisted beyond recognition



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Its now 10:52, and my mind has never been clearer

Sunrise is approaching, drawing ever nearer

Behind my reflection, she lives in a mirror

She left long ago, but I swear I still feel her


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© copyright Ben D.A 2011


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      Brownpaperbaggirl 5 years ago

      Lovely... "Behind my reflection, she lives in a mirror / She left long ago, but I swear I still feel her."

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      nameless 6 years ago

      wow.. this was the first poem of yours you made me read.. im not good wit words so all i have to say this that it puts me in a peacefull and wonderfull state of mind and makes me wonder bout how smiple life should be.

      i’m reminding myself to let bygones be bygones

      The past is behind us, but hearts have been broken

      it puts me in aww how you can put words together like that.. and make them mean so much.

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Granny - Thanks for all your comments, and I appreciate the compliments

      sarahowen - thank you as well for all the comments, please feel free to follow me

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      sarahowen 6 years ago from uk

      intense beauty

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      Granny's House 6 years ago from Older and Hopefully Wiser Time

      Ben, Great write. i felt like I was on that porch with you. I think I have been there many times

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      blaise - that is flattering indeed! thanks a lot! :]

      I never even considered a sequel...hmmm

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      Fehl Dungo 6 years ago from close to you...

      You left me breathless. So beautiful! Me thinks I gotta read this again tonight..in the porch..with the moon..and the starry night..

      Loved it from the start til the end. You know what I'd love more? A continuation of this ;) I love to read more please :D

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Minnetonka - this remains my highest viewed and most commented poem

      one of my favorites, but I have been writing a lot lately...I mean a LOT haha

      Thank you so much

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      Linda Rogers 6 years ago from Minnesota

      Ben, this is the first poem I have read of yours and I am so impressed. This poem brought me through your journey on that eve with a full moon. I was captivated by your words and your ability to rhyme without effort. So glad I found you on Hubpages via Epigramman.

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      Paws For Peace 6 years ago

      Purrrrr. Whiskers are a twitching.

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Nellie - you flatter me :]

      Magick - meow meow meow, mew, meoww, mreow. :]

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      Paws For Peace 6 years ago

      Ben,

      This cat is a fan of heartfelt poetry. I agree with

      Twilight there is a maturity in the words. I totally loved it.

      Magick

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      Nellieanna Hay 6 years ago from TEXAS

      Rereading it, I'm still awestruck. And I like that you like it so much!

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Twilight - that was a wonderfully flattering comment, much appreciated. I absolutely love getting feedback like that from someone who has just started reading my writing. :]

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      Twilight Lawns 6 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

      Ben, I am amazed at the maturity and wit and depth of your work. I concur with the divine Nellieanna. She has said all I would have said... I am in awe of this, the first I have read of yours.

      This verse made me speak out loud to myself:

      Its 10:18, and heavenly stars are aligning

      I’m in awe of these inner thoughts that I’m finding

      Upon my porch, the moonlight is shining

      I’m rather amazed that my words are still rhyming

      One word, my talented friend: "Brilliant".

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Thank you verrrry much erth :]

      I am so glad you feel that way, this remains one of my favorites

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      erthfrend 6 years ago from Florida

      AMAZING!!!! Love it, love it, love it! I feel the same way as you, I can get lost in the mysterious, intriguing night sky. You kept me captivated throughout and I could feel what you were feeling. Excellent writing!

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Thank you very much :]

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      Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean

      Love the contemplative tone of this. My favorite lines were these:

      "Behind my reflection, she lives in a mirror

      She left long ago, but I swear I still feel her"

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Nellieanna - you're a pretty freakin awesome lady yourself :]

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      Nellieanna Hay 6 years ago from TEXAS

      How good that you visited and saw his writings on here, Geno and Cristy. He is obviously a pretty darn good kid, too! ;-)

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      Geno and Cristy 6 years ago

      If you weren't our kid, we might be crazy enough to flatter you and say you have some incredible talent. But since you are, we'll just say, "You're pretty darn good, kid"

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Thanks nighthag, this one is one of my very favorites ever :D

      And the inspiration for it came from simply standing on my porch, witnessing a moon surrounded by clouds..and the gears started turning...FAST

      I love that kind of random, raw inspiration to write

      Thanks again, if I recall you were the first person to comment one of my Hubs. Or one of the first, at least. :]

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      K.A.E Grove 6 years ago from Australia

      this was breathtaking, you are a true artist of words!

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      Wayne Brown 6 years ago from Texas

      You have done well to interwine you mindset with the moon and sky showing how the relationship takes you to another place beyond the world. I sense that your emotions bring you back inside yourself to share those feelings with the reader. You still have things to say there...let them go. Life experiences will start to season your work over time...just keep on writing! Check my hub..."Bar Reflections" and you will get a sense of changing perspectives that come over time. Thanks for sharing! WB

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      Nikkij504gurl 6 years ago from Louisiana

      your welcome. theres like 3 of mine i put up today you need to go read and comment on lol

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Nellie - I'm awed by your comment, your writing, and your apparently beautiful soul. You flatter me greatly!! Thank you sooo much :]

      Nikki - Thanks again, for all the comments you have left on my writings...and yes, this is my absolute favorite of mine, ever. :] :]

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      Nikkij504gurl 6 years ago from Louisiana

      this is definitely a favorite. wow makes me wish i was on that porch with you. the moon was beautiful last night. I loved how u described it. and i love the last lines "Behind my reflection, she lives in a mirror, She left long ago, but I swear I still feel her" simply amazing for lack of a better word.

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      Nellieanna Hay 6 years ago from TEXAS

      You are an amazing writer, Ben. I'm awed. wow. I'm seldom so in awe of someone's expressions. And I think how young you are and it's all coming from your innards without constructs or confines. It's awesome. You do with your words what artists do with canvases, brushes and paints and what virtuosos do with violins, notes and bows, what architects do with bricks, arches and foundations. It's breathtaking.

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      Mentalist acer 6 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

      Idle repetition,without ability of recognition,but for ?.;)

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      Cheyenne Barroga 6 years ago from Salt lake city, UT

      hmm, everyone has that fingerprint left on their heart by a person who had touched them long ago. your writing is like the pure flow of water streaming from a pool of gold. Bravissima, signore.

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      saddlerider1 6 years ago

      Yes Ben all writers will have pieces they feel attached to either immediately upon penning it or stepping back and coming back for a review time and time again, while asking ourselves did I write this brilliant piece? lol as well fill our baskets up with torn or crumpled of those we simply find disgusting and useless writes.

      enjoy the moment, you will have many of them my young man. Good night my friend, slumber calls me, it is 12:30 a.m and time for dreams. Good night, sleep well.

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      sligo - VERY nice :]

      saddle - Your comments alone are poetry.

      For some reason, I feel like I have never written anything quite like this. Something was just...different, and I can't stop reading it. Ever written something that you instantly fall in love with? haha

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      saddlerider1 6 years ago

      To linger on a porch under a moonlit night with the stars glittering around the mighty globe is awesome. The ebb and tides within our soul envelopes the water therein and moves our minds to intoxicating heights of ecstasy.

      I love open spaces and have many a time slept under the sky and witnessed moving moments in time. We are simple specks of star dust, atoms waiting to return back to the Universal thin vale that opens to another dimension. Loved this poem, well done, brilliant. Bravo.

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      sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

      Mezmerized by gold glowing moon

      Intoxicated lovers swoon

      Tides of time wash wavelengths of shore

      Timeless sphere doth romance implore.

      sligobay

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Thanks tndr :]

      I reread this 4 times. I rarely get so excited about my own writings haha

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      tnderhrt23 6 years ago

      very intense flowing write! I am impressed!

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      BenWritings 6 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee

      Pooh - thank you again. A long day, a long night, and some random inspiration fueled this one. After reading it myself a few times, it is my favorite poem I have ever written.

      Justin - thanks bro, love you

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      Justin Aptaker 6 years ago from United States

      That is truly amazing from start to finish. Nothing more to be said.

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      Poohgranma 6 years ago from On the edge

      "The past is behind us, but hearts have been broken

      What was done is fulfilled, what’s said has been spoken

      very concise words conveying emotions as deep as the sky you contemplate. really really good!

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