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A Poem- Paradise

Updated on June 02, 2012

The path through paradise.

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Find who you are to find paradise.

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So this must be paradise?

It is a bitter day in paradise,

As the mood penetrates through skin

There is a desperation lurking in the silence,

That makes itself known within the screaming of hollow winds.


I walked alone through the streets of paradise,

Wondering if truth even still exists?

A paralyzing fear takes over,

That this is the best that there is.


Touched by the illusions of paradise,

As the real world settles in.

It isn’t much like paradise,

When you are just trying to survive the life you live.


A smoke of clouds moves over me.

Tears drop from my eyes.

Each are washed away by the purity,

As it rains in paradise.


The rains of paradise

leave me shivering and torn.

I lose my hope on the streets of paradise,

I can't see me anymore.


I walked frustrated and afraid,

Unable to recall if I there is a way home.

Before my eyes; a rainbow appears in the sky,

Paradise reminds me I am never all alone.

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      ahorseback 4 years ago

      HC . I was reminded of my own affliction throughout life when I read this ! I had a long standing and untreated affair withh depression and anxiety . Spending my time and existance walking and living in paradise , and yet never able to see through my fogg! I love your writing , It shows that you know both "sides "....awesome!

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      thanks you so much ahorseback; for the kind words and for taking the time to read my work. I am glad that you were able to understand the meaning within these prose perfectly. I am often apprehensive that I am not relaying the meaning correctly- you just settled my fears on this one. Thanks again!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      wow HC I was so entertained here with your paradise.. the clever grouping of words to convey a message this was pretty good voted up and wow...

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      Lakepoet 4 years ago

      I think the poem conveys a sense of guilt about how we do all live in paradise, comparatively speaking, to those in the world who are less fortunate. Yet even so, our lives, at times, lack hope and bring us nothing but despair. Your poem is beautifully written. Voted up

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      Joyce Haragsim 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Wonderful poem and a little sad.

      Voted up and beauitful.

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      Dorsi Diaz 4 years ago from The San Francisco Bay Area

      Beautiful and poignant. Well done!

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Thank you Frank- I am so glad that you thought so and I appreciate you taking your time this morning to read my work and leave the feedback.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Lakepoet- first off, I like the screen name, I too live at a lake. Secondly, thanks for giving your perspective on the meaning of the poem, or what it means to you. This is what I love about poetry, it is very much personal regardless of if you are the writer or the reader.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Thanks writer20- glad you liked the read. :)

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Dorsi, Thanks for the comment, and the encouragement. I appreciate your feedback :)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      This is so beautiful..i really love your poem...it reminds me of wishing and wanting paradise and never really finding it....voted way up....debbie

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      Rolly A Chabot 4 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Hi Holly... wel written and a place I think we find ourselves occasionally in life but you know the rainbow contains a promise od something far better...

      Hugs from Canada

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      Maree Michael Martin 4 years ago from Northwest Washington on an Island

      "Wondering if truth even still exists?" I love this question and the ways your beautiful poem conveys our feelings. Wonderful photography, giving light to the subject. Well done, great expression, love it, love it.

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      Parks McCants 4 years ago from Eugene Oregon U.S.A.

      Touching...

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      Jessee R 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Brilliant Verse! Intelligent on the devices and craft

      On the abstract front.. I was moved... very moved by each words and its placement which is so perfect

      Great poetry!

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      iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

      You will find yourself again...I promise!

      Beautiful words from a great soul!!!

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      I guess if you are going to be lost, the streets of paradise is the place to be. Now the rain has washed away the tears. You can see clearly now. The pictures are great.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Deborah, thanks for the comment. That is a lot of what I was trying to say, without coming out and saying it.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Rolly- those rainbows provide the hope that there is still paradise left to discover. Thanks for your comment!

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Ruby, thank you for your feedback- I am glad that you enjoyed this poem. I have been working on my poetry in an attempt to make it more focused, so it is great to receive feedback.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Thank you Parks McCants

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      rahul0324- as always, thank you so much for your support and feedback!

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      iamaudraleigh-thank you hun. I know that life will be fine and that being lost only allows us to find ourselves more so than we ever thought possible... and because of this, I am okay :)

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      mckbirdks- thanks for the comment and compliments. I suppose you are correct, paradise is far better than hell, specially if you are going to be lost.

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      michael ely 4 years ago from Scotland

      Really good HC.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Thanks Michael, I am glad you stopped by to comment :)

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      Dr Funom Makama 4 years ago from Europe

      Beautifully and well written... Thanks for the share

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      Joshua Zerbini 4 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Great poem! :)

      A smoke of clouds moves over me.

      Tears drop from my eyes.

      Each are washed away by the purity,

      As it rains in paradise.

      Awesome imagery! :)

      Voted up and shared! :)

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      alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

      An evocative poem with matching pics. Voting this Up and Beautiful.

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Dr Funom Makama- thanks for the comment, and for sharing! I appreciate the support!

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Alocsin- thanks for stopping in and commenting- Thanks for the good marks, I am glad you enjoyed the poem!

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Josh3418- Thank you sir for taking the time to read and comment on the poem! I try to bring people into the poem with imagery, sometimes it works- glad it worked here :)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      wow Holly.. my kind of poetry.. just amazing.. and simply beautiful.. Blessings

      debbie

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      Holly 4 years ago from Lone Star State

      Deborah, thank you- I am greatly humbled by all your kindness and continued support. Thank you so much for reading my work! :)

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