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A Silent Cry

Updated on July 20, 2012
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HL Keeley has received a Bachelors degree in middle grade education. She is currently teaching high school.

Do you ever feel so lost?

Just wondering in life.

What does it cost

To live in strife?

Where do I begin?

What is my path?

Where have I been?

Is this God’s wrath?

I want to be loved

By that certain someone,

The one who stands above


All those who have won.

I want to be happy,

One thing to go right

Instead of a crappy

Disgruntled sight.

Am I destined to heartache

Or is this just a test?

How much will it take

To earn a peaceful rest?






Disclaimer:

You can see this poem how you like. I am not going to go into details about the inspiration to finally try to write a poem. I just wanted to let you know this is my first poem on HubPages. I try to write poems, but they never turn out well.

I decided to publish this because for once, it actually says how I am thinking and how I am feeling. I do not know much about writing poetry. I can dissect poetry, but not my own. Reading this out loud, I did stumble, but now I understand what another writer on HubPages was saying about the rhythm not being perfect. The stumbling I had while reading is this is how I feel. I feel like I keep stumbling and picking myself up just to stumble again.

I most likely will not publish another poem because for me to write a poem, it takes a lot of work. I am not good at picking a few words to describe everything.

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    • CrazedNovelist profile image

      A.E. Williams 

      6 years ago from Hampton, GA

      Awesome work Heather!!

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      myownlife 

      6 years ago from london

      Entertaining writing, I believe writing me sharing feeling and thoughts with the help of words.

      Awesome.

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      lilmama4273 

      6 years ago

      I think you did well for your first poem. I really enjoyed it. And poems don't necessarily have to rhythm, but have to state how you feel in that moment. You have to feel it and then put it to paper.

      Thanks!!!

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      HL Keeley 

      6 years ago from Charlotte, NC

      Thank you that means a lot. I hope I will be able to do this more. This time was different because the words were already there.

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      Patty Kenyon 

      6 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Awesome Job!!! Keep up the great work!!!

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      cleaner3 

      6 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      Heather, wow, this is so cool. I knew you could do it.!! I am so proud of you and now you are unstoppable.! first this is a beautiful poem because it comes from your heart. that is what poetry is . you have let the words come from your soul. it is what you needed to say that is why you wrote it. it is just like therapy!! Poetry is beautiful when it is natural, and this is beautiful!!!

      Michael

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      whonunuwho 

      6 years ago from United States

      Keep writing because you have heart.

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      Bill Holland 

      6 years ago from Olympia, WA

      You did very well here; lovely piece of writing.

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      Bobby 

      6 years ago from New Jersey

      I enjoy writing poetry and I don't really adhere to a rhyme scheme. Life has no rhyme scheme why should our most powerful poems?

      It is a wonderful first poem but you cannot force poetry. Poetry is to be written naturally and from the inner workings of your current emotional state. Perhaps you will give poetry another shot sometime.

      In my opinion, poetry is just like anything else, the more you're introduced to it the better you will become at it. You'll never find more emotion and hardship in anything else than during warfare therefore this is one of my favorite poems:

      http://www.warpoetry.co.uk/owen1.html

      Have a good one! Never doubt yourself!

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      Mr. Happy 

      6 years ago from Toronto, Canada

      I have one question which I ask myself if I am not sure which way to go, or what to do. I stop and ask myself: "Does my path have heart?"

      If the answer is "yes", I keep going, if the answer is "no", I go back to the drawing-board (so to speak).

      I think You are on a good path just from the fact that You are asking the questions. Sometimes, it is my opinion that asking a good question may be more beneficial than even getting an answer.

      Food for thought is always good, again in my opinion ...

      Cheers! : )

    • HLKeeley profile imageAUTHOR

      HL Keeley 

      6 years ago from Charlotte, NC

      Oh thank you...yeah I haven't been in this place in a long time, I try not to question why I have so many trials in my life. I guess it could be seen as a quest, but for me it feels that I have to prove something, do something with my life. Right now, I don't know what that is and whether I am living my life the way I should.

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      Mr. Happy 

      6 years ago from Toronto, Canada

      "Where do I begin?

      What is my path?

      Where have I been?

      Is this God’s wrath?" - Powerful words. I have been there and I still go there sometimes.

      "Or is this just a test?" - Perhaps it is a quest and not so much a test ... or both maybe.

      "the rhythm not being perfect" - I do not read a lot of poetry but I do read a lot and as such, I would say that the poem's rhytm is just fine. I read it out loud twice ... just my opinion.

      I love this poem - I apreciate thoughts and emotions ... honesty.

      All in all, Mr. Happy smiles even when he's bleeding: https://hubpages.com/education/Smile-While-You-Ble...

      I wish You all the very best. Have a wonderful week-end! : )

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      HL Keeley 

      6 years ago from Charlotte, NC

      Thanks to both of you. I needed to write this. People tell me that poems are created with emotion and right now I am nothing but a massive ball of emotion. So I had to give it a shot.

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      Joshua Zerbini 

      6 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Keeley,

      Nothing to worry about here! This is exceptional for your first poem and I salute you for being brave and writing it! The beautiful thing about poetry is that it can be written in several different ways and also taken in several ways! Everyone learns different things from poetry.

      Poetry is a way to express one's self. And that is what you did here, express yourself and what you are currently feeling. So bravo and like I said, no worries! :)

      I say keep on writing them, and you will only get better! This community is encouraging and helpful and will support you along the way!

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      Ghaelach 

      6 years ago

      Morning Heather.

      I am not a poet, so I won't say it is good or bad. What I will say is that enjoyed your poem.

      To me poetry is like Jazz music you can play or write anything you want to. Naturally to some Jazz is a load of bull and really isn't music, just a load of noise and that's the same with poetry.

      I have written a couple of poems myself and I'm happy with them.

      I feel that if you are happy with what you have written , then OK. You aren't writing for a living, so what the heck.

      Take care and just keep on writing.

      LOL Ghaelach

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