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A man without religion

Updated on June 27, 2014

I was passing by a man holding out his hand

and he asked if I could spare some change?

I replied,

only if you can spare some advice.

He said that

after trying to find his way in this life,

his only advice was to never make the same mistake twice.

I stood speechless while he continued

asking me questions like

if I had kids, a wife

and if I believed in Christ?

I gave no response and as I started to walk away

he grabbed my arm and said

religion is having vision without sight.

He was a tall man, black as night

that spoke with an overbite.

He removed the dark shades that covered his face

and he started reciting scripture,

telling me to listen and pay attention

but only then I noticed

that both of his eyes were missing.





Copyright © 2011 Daunt'e Loper


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    • Norma Budden profile image

      Norma Budden 6 years ago from Nunavut, Canada

      I know that feeling all too well, Daunte, and I look forward to reading much more of your writing.

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      Daunte Loper 6 years ago from Detroit Michigan

      I honestly don't know what my aim was in this piece Norma, but I was compelled to write it.

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      Norma Budden 6 years ago from Nunavut, Canada

      I don't think of it as being a pro or con of religion. I think the focal point is more along the lines of focusing on Christ and the Bible, as opposed to merely following an ordained religion with all of its rules and regulations.

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      Daunte Loper 6 years ago from Detroit Michigan

      Thanks Midianite

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      Midianite 6 years ago from Australia

      Wow dude, crazy! I was totally not expecting that ending. I really like your writing, more so than I do with most poets.

      - You now have a new follower.

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      Daunte Loper 6 years ago from Detroit Michigan

      Its nither

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      valeriebelew 6 years ago from Metro Atlanta, GA, USA

      Pretty intense. Can't figure out if its pro or con religion. (:v

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      Daunte Loper 6 years ago from Detroit Michigan

      Thanks Susan and Nellieanna

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      Nellieanna Hay 6 years ago from TEXAS

      Gripping from start to finish!

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      Susan Zutautas 6 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Very nice!

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      Daunte Loper 6 years ago from Detroit Michigan

      Thanks runrchic and Fossillady, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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      Kathi 6 years ago from Saugatuck Michigan

      Great Ending!!

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      runrchic1 6 years ago from Upstate New York

      Really great hub! Thanks for sharing.

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      Daunte Loper 6 years ago from Detroit Michigan

      Thank you all, I really appreciate the feedback.

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      stclairjack 6 years ago from middle of freekin nowhere,... the sticks

      well done.

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      The Suburban Poet 6 years ago from Austin, Texas

      Whew... that's some stuff right there... good job with this...

      Rhyming "advice" with "twice" is an example of rhyme that enhances the message; it's not forced...

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      LSKing 6 years ago from East Coast United States

      Wow! That was awesome! I voted this up.