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Adding Inches to the Drift

Updated on March 18, 2015

She was hoping the storm would lift,

snow swirled around the window

adding inches to the drift,

cold air penetrated the house's wooden frame,

it was a blast of winter

Mother Nature could never tame,

the wind blowing and the snow turning and turning

as the fireplace kept burning,

the warmth kept heating her face,

as she put another log into place,

making a crackling sound,

the heavy snow on the roof,

made it come crashing down,

then there was smoke,

bile surged in her throat,

she'd choke, and choke,

as the cold air would coat,

dodging wood and sheetrock from above,

while tripping over logs from the fireplace,

she would pull and shove,

then the fire would burn her face,

her sanity snapped,

her body trapped,

it was a winter's defeat,

and a sudden shriek

sent her to her feet,

the smoke was dense,

and she'd lost any pretense

of good sense in her desperation,

her eyes blood-shot and the whites red,

and she shot up from that nightmare,

her husband sleeping peacefully in bed,

by her side,

curtains open extremely wide,

the sun shining on the outside...

© 2015 Frank Atanacio

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      Ann Carr 2 years ago from SW England

      Great poem! Kept me going to the unexpected end. Your writing is superb, as ever, Frank. I was there with the fire - then it was gone.

      Up+ and shared.

      Ann

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you ann art for being the first to comment

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      It was just a dream? Amazing! Frank you are soo good at this type of genre. I was sure the house was burning. I like your poetic words throughout. Voted up and away..

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      its always a pleasure having you explore my poetry bless you dear friend

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      Patricia Scott 2 years ago from sunny Florida

      O so glad it was a nightmare...and sometimes vivid ones like that 'stick'.

      enjoyed the read , Frank.

      Angels are on the way to you this afternoon. ps

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Poetry or prose? Which is your best medium? I'm beginning to think you are just so talented that you defy classification.

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      Frank you're really trying to grab us by the throat with this one. I was beginning to worry about this poor soul and if she would be able to get out of the house! You are quite the Poe, I mean poet.

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much PS.. Billybuc and Tillsontitan for sharing your comments.. my pages would be empty without you guys bless you

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      I can see that this New England winter has had an effect on you. Way to take advantage of real life to set up and deliver another winning poem. Up and shared.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Cam... :)

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      You give me the same feel as my young literature classes. Always a surprise and always looking forward to what was next!

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Dramatic, intense, compelling and startling all rolled into one awesome piece here! I am so glad it was a dream ...whew. You had me sweating there for a bit.

      I love it when something is not predictable. You certainly are not predictable, and that is a good thing to not be, believe me.

      Up interesting and awesome, tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

      Maybe in her subconscious, she wanted all that snow and cold to be gone for once, and so a heated dream helped her mind to melt it, but it got out of hand : ) or maybe it was you who wishes for the snow to be gone.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Jackie for reading and commenting on my drift.. and as always Faith thank you for being just you.. filled with Faith.. bless you both

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      Eric Dierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      I caught you drift.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you eric :)

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      I always look forward to read your latest hub Frank, whether it is a short story or poem you never disappoint. Well done once again, voted up.

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      Ruchira 2 years ago from United States

      Oh gosh! she wanted to warm her body from the friggin cold...alas! the heat captured her and dragged her towards a totally new dimension.

      Loved the indepth words, Frank!

      sharing it across!

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      Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

      Loved the poem Frank, thank goodness it was a dream! voted up and shared, nell

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      Clive Williams 2 years ago from Nibiru

      as usual i am transported inside your writing looking around like a ghost watching the events unfold. Good work bro.

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      Peggy Woods 2 years ago from Houston, Texas

      I would call that a nightmare for sure! Sadly people's roofs have been collapsing because of the weight of snow this year particularly in the northeast. Riveting job as usual, Frank! UI votes and will share.

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      This is the kind of nightmare that one remembers long after. What a job you did, Frank, of leading us on and then waking us up with her. You're blessed with amazing talent!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Jodah, Nell-Rose and Ruchira for reading my drifts, also thank you MsDora, Peggy W and Clive-Williams good to have you guys on my page bless you..

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      Angela F 2 years ago from Seattle, WA

      That would be a hellish nightmare ! So glad I read this one in the a.m. as opposed to just before I went to bed for the night. ;)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you shegets...:)

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      FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

      The bright sunshine on the outside and the sleeping husband makes me wonder if he doesn't have a real cold heart, if he's not the source of her wintry nightmare. A very compelling poem, Frank! Voted up and more!

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Glad it was a nightmare--but scary write Frank! Loved this!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much Flourish and Audrey for visiting my drift.. bless you both

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      Sara Sarwar Riaz 2 years ago from Michigan, USA

      Such a greatly descriptive piece relating the helplessness of being trapped in a gruesome nightmare. You have a special talent of joyously relieving a reader from something as visually dismal and turbulent, by the anchorage of your words.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Sara, thanks so much :)

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      Ghaelach 2 years ago

      Morning Frank.

      Although I'm not the biggest fan of poetry, I have to admit I enjoyed this hub. I read it as a story, with a great twist at the end.

      Have a great weekend Frank.

      Jimmy.......................................aka Ghaelach

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Ghaelach for stopping by bless you

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      Lee Cloak 2 years ago

      A super piece of work, really enjoyable, sublime words, thanks , voted up, Lee

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Lee

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      I can't believe I almost missed this one. Wow! Your poetry draws a terrifying nightmare…from which we all awake in the end. Excellent writing, Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Genna East good seeing you Happy Passover :)

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      Just came back for a re-read--really well done Frank! Sending this around

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Audrey

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      Smilealot 2 years ago

      Don't think I'd be able to get back to sleep after a dream like that....intense and gripping, well written Frank :-)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      hey smilealot good to see you bro..:)

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