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Asleep (A coma that I'm in so deep) - A poem by Richard Mawby

Updated on January 17, 2015

Ever since I finished this poem, it never ceases to bring me back to the moment I wrote it. The emotion and love poured into these words was substantial and I can feel exactly how I did when I felt the need to write this poem.

Asleep is inspired by a sad moment from an odd source, that of a british drama series called Skins. Grace is left in a coma after a terrible accident and leaves her boyfriend Rich in an emotional state.

What is touching about these events is that despite her coma she is awake to him when he sneaks into the hospital room to visit her. I found it to be a rather emotional and touching ending, especially during her final appearance as he lay in bed and they shared one unique night together. In my opinion this was her spirit and in the morning he received a phonecall on a broken phone with her saying goodbye.

Her father visited the house and informed Rich that Grace had died that night he saw her. These events inspired me to write the following poem. I hope you enjoy and feel the same emotion I did as I wrote this piece.



Although I may seem fast asleep

A coma that I’m in so deep

Don’t worry for I can still see

And hear you as you cry and weep

Please realise I may not wake

While I lay still, I do not fake

But I can see you sitting there

Holding my hand with grief in your stare


Sometimes you may see me move

My eyes open and smile at you

And so I share some words so true

While my body lay still, I’m alive to you

Please do not grieve when I am gone

The end is near, a light shines from anon

And so my spirit begins to leave

But one last thing I must retrieve


To your surprise I am awake

You wipe your eyes, it’s no mistake

I lean to give you one last kiss

I lay back down, and I’m in bliss

I love you dear, I hold you close

‘tis why despite my eyes are closed

And my body has no life inside

Only to you I am alive, not ready yet to say goodbye…

… But to the rest of the world, I have just died;

By Richard Mawby ©



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    • RichardMawby profile imageAUTHOR

      Richard Mawby 

      4 years ago from United Kingdom

      That is great Susan, synchronicity at its best! =]

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      susan brinklow 

      4 years ago

      I don,t know why but I read this poem at exactly the right moment, to the very second in time.

    • RichardMawby profile imageAUTHOR

      Richard Mawby 

      5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you Audrey =]

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      Audrey Howitt 

      5 years ago from California

      Really lovely!

    • RichardMawby profile imageAUTHOR

      Richard Mawby 

      5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you Mary, much appreciated, and glad you were able to see it how I did :D

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      Mary McShane 

      5 years ago from Fort Lauderdale, Florida

      Although I am not familiar with the program named "Skin" after reading your poem, I didn't need to know about it. Your synopsis of the program was enough for me to understand your words and message. What a very distinct picture you painted with your words! Well done. Voted up, awesome and beautiful.

    • RichardMawby profile imageAUTHOR

      Richard Mawby 

      6 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you Bhargvi :D

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      Bhargvi Sharma 

      6 years ago from jammu ( India)

      Awesome... Voted up!!! :)

    • RichardMawby profile imageAUTHOR

      Richard Mawby 

      6 years ago from United Kingdom

      Thank you for the kind comment Jamie =]

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 

      6 years ago from Reno NV

      Very touching poem. Jamie


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