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Counting his breaths.........Verse

Updated on October 15, 2014

He turns to look to the right and sees a hundred people
laid across colored beach towels up the
sandy shoreline

Some of them beautiful women who'd not
raised an eye to his passing smile
and the rest men or boys
really posing as something more
for the benefit of
life's games

Then to his left along the emptier sands of
time that he always enjoyed more
or fit into the best at least
the occasional lone surfcaster
the passing fishing boat
the aging commercial wharf
covered in

And then straight on to the rising surf
and sun where it all began
and where it all
ends today..........
a few peaceful moments

One of the more observant beachgoers to
his left looks out at small incoming waves
just in time to see a man's upper body
and head disappear forever
into a peaceful sea
and wonders
how soon he will


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      ahorseback 3 years ago

      Thank you all ! I apologize for not being around much , it's nothing serious , it's just life ! Each of you are so treasured to me and my attempts at wording my way through life ! Thank you !

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      shanmarie 3 years ago

      How sad. Lonely too.

      On another note, hope you are well. Miss seeing you around.

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

      What incredible imagery in this poem. I love how the images take the reader onto the beach and then into the moment of questioning at the end. Great job! Jamie

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      Audrey Hunt 3 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      This beautiful poem reminds me of another place and time. (sniff...sniff.) I always relate so to your poetry. Thank you my friend.

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      Eric Dierker 3 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Poignant comes to mind friend. Deep and dark and yet somehow serene.

      (as an aside I think he pops back up in two minutes fully refreshed)