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Beseeching the Heavens for Pity

Updated on November 12, 2013


 

The sighing winds carried off the moans,

the cries and the groans

of the dying soldiers,

as if beseeching the heavens for pity,

the battle took place in a war torn city,

the bodies ran too deep,

and children huddled up against the dead

trying to sleep,

it was either that or pray,

that the sun would go away,

because the sun was merciless,

drying up the water,

cooking the flesh of the dead,

staining the grounds red,

blazing in splendor,

it dried the tongues and throats

of soldiers too weak to crawl,

as fear coats,

and the soldiers choke,

from foul smoke,

coming from small fires smoldered

in the blood sodden grounds,

littered field with flutters of movement,

crying sounds,

trembling of limbs, fluttering eyes,

life and death fighting for supremacy,

who lives, who dies...

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Like reading Revelation, Frank; which makes yours seem an even more real read. ^

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      Valleypoet 3 years ago

      You have conjured up some horrific vivid imagery in the aftermath of battle Frank...in a way that only you can...Awesome and shared, well written my friend:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Jackie :)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      always good to see you Valley..thanks for the comment, bless you bro :)

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      Wow, just amazing! Horrific images. What struck me most were the children huddled against the dead and the stained ground.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Flourish bless you :)

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Well, my goodness, Frank, your words plant the images so vividly in one's mind, there was no need for any added imagery here for sure! Wow, that does sound a lot like the final battle there ... whew, war is hell!

      Up and more and sharing

      God bless,

      Faith Reaper

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      deergha 3 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

      I am following Faith here...your words create quite an eyeful....and what words here.....

      '....life and death fighting for supremacy,

      who lives, who dies..."''

      Thank you for this wonderful share.....sharing and votes all way up.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, only you are able to take something so terrible, and make it flow so beautifully. You've painted a truly horrifying picture here, but in your very own unique style. Very powerful!!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Faith, my dear Faith thank you so much for visiting my pity.. and toobusiness its always nyce to see you on my pages.. and DGH.. thank you for stopping by again bless you wonderful hubbers :)

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      smartprincess 3 years ago from Nairobi, Kenya

      So deep. Made me tear up.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by smart princess :)

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      LaThing 3 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Incredible imagery! What a picture, so clearly painted with your words, Frank! And the emotions are running deep within..... Great work! Voted up and everything.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you lathing and good to see you :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 3 years ago from Nepal

      Frank

      After reading this poem I feel empty.

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      Frank, your poem conjures up such heart felt images! Very powerful indeed.

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for such a light hearted and funny poem Frank........not...just joking. There was nothing left to say that others hadn't already, so had to get your attention...lol, well done. Love your words.

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      Genna East 3 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      If anyone wanted to gain insight into what war is truly all about, they should read this powerful poem. Amazing, Frank; uncompromising and relentless in its depth and imagery. Superb.

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      SandCastles 3 years ago

      I love this poem!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Sandcastles, Genna, Jodah ( thanks for the laugh ) Vin and Blossoms for stopping by :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 3 years ago from The Caribbean

      Again, you engaged my senses of sound, sight and smell. I also feel the heat of the sun, plus the discomfort and confusion. Excellent!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you MsDora

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      A tribute to those who have truly experienced hell! nice work Frank.

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      mylindaelliott 3 years ago from Louisiana

      This is such good work. It is sad and heart rending. I love pictures of graveyards.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you wayne and mylinda for stopping by :)

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Great imagery and a most memorable picture. People tend to forget those who they should remember.

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      Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

      Wonderful read Frank and this gem shows off your talent brilliantly. Voted up.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much eddy and gypsy :)

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      Barbara 3 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      Frank, You startled me with your description of the sun's role on this battlefield. It was so real. I might have focused on its warmth but you made me see its damaging impact. In fact, the entire poem helped me feel the pain of this moment on all sensory levels. Nice work!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Story for stopping by :)

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      Lisa Williams 3 years ago

      Your words create such vivid imagery that one cannot be swept away with emotion. Absolutely beautiful!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Lisa :)

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      I don't know really what I can add to the comments above Frank--you use imagery so well to pull at the heart strings!

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      Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

      Brutal, vivid and sad. You captured the atmosphere and travesty perfectly with your skillful imagery.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank u so Much Audrey ( good to see you ) and Anna for commenting on my poem Bless you both :)

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      Mary Craig 3 years ago from New York

      How sad your words are so true! That children have to live with that horror everyday. Your ability to paint a picture with words is amazing, especially when you add all the emotion!

      Voted up, awesome, and beautiful.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Til thank you so much for the visit.. bless you

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      loveofnight 3 years ago from Baltimore, Maryland

      You really know how to put pen to paper. You paint a very vivid picture, well done. A good share indeed. Be well and happy hubbing.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you loveofnight for stopping by :)

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      To bring the 'dying fields of war' into a vivid and horrific scene of reality can only be done by a Master of Words -- and you are just such a one, Frank. You make your reader shudder at the reality of such happenings, yet do not deny us the sense of your brilliance. I know you are humble, but you are a great writer and I cannot say that enough. Voted Up and sharing. Bless you, my friend.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      Phyllis thank you for ur way too kind words bless you dear one :)

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