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Betelgeuse

Updated on March 24, 2017

A Re-write

Those who were following me from my early years at HubPages may be familiar with this nonsense poem which was previously published as part of my hub "Verse for the Young at Heart." However, I had originally intended to write a sequel to it and had in fact written another four stanzas. Somehow, in my busy life I had misplaced them and try as I might I could not remember what I had written .. suddenly, voila .. during my recent move and packing and unpacking, I found them!

I have now added those four stanzas to the original poem 'Betelgeuse' and this is the finished product. May the child in you enjoy.

Poetry is the rhythmical creation of beauty in words.

— Edgar Allan Poe

Betelgeuse

The quamby sat and smoked a pipe,

Within a wandang tree.

A purple leaf fell on his nose,

And made him gently squee.


Three button birds flew swiftly by,

Towards the pea green sun.

The quamby flashed a furry paw

And caught the closest one.


He opened up his four-foot mouth

And swallowed whole his prey.

The button bird cried, "Let me out!"

But didn't get his way.


Upon the ground, in serpent grass,

Two fluff-puff kittens played.

Leaping high into the air,

The breeze blew them away.


Beside Lake Coolywillowong

The patchwork palm trees grow.

A myriad of colored leaves,

They house the galago.


The galago are flightless birds

Who bounce along the ground.

The fifteen-meter patchwork palms,

They scale with just one bound.

Poetry is what in a poem makes you laugh, cry, prickle, be silent, makes your toe nails twinkle, makes you want to do this or that or nothing, makes you know that you are alone in the unknown world, that your bliss and suffering is forever shared and forever all your own.

— Dylan Thomas

On rolling hills of chocolate grass

The tri-horned cattle graze.

A rota-dactyl spins on by,

Pursuing calves that stray.


With violet trunks and scarlet fronds,

Kaleidoscope palms sway

While bunches of their shining fruit

Tempt hungry boomaray.


The boomaray are herbivores

Who bound between the trees.

They leap ten meters in one bound,

Obtaining fruit with ease.


By night the moon is deep chartreuse,

the wolvercote howls,

And haunting wails sweep 'cross the plains.

The hoots of phantom owls.

Poetry is the journal of a sea animal living on land, wanting to fly in the air.

— Carl Sandburg

A wishworm flashed across the sand

And dashed towards its hole.

Two silver scooters took up chase,

But couldn't reach their goal.


If a wishworm's ever caught

It grants a wish, they say,

But nothing's ever caught one yet,

At least not to this day.


The silver scooters stood in awe

And dusted off their scales.

They thought with six legs they were swift,

To wishworms they were snails.


Oh what a world is Betelgeuse,

A wondrous place to be.

Fantastic creatures there abound,

The likes you'll never see.


Though one night when you're sleeping

You may just chance to dream,

About this distant never land,

And marvel at the scene.

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      John Hansen 4 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you Fullerman. That was my aim, to take readers to a fantasy world for a few minutes. Glad you enjoyed the experience.

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      Ryan Fuller 4 months ago from Louisiana, USA

      Thank you for taking me a trip in your imagination. Great work as always. Really had fun with this one and enjoyed it as well.

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      John Hansen 4 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you again, Tamara. I just have to be careful not to let generous praise like that go to my head. I appreciate it more than you know.

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      Tamara Moore 4 months ago

      This poem of yours caught my eye, again, due to initial, richly deep purple image that reminded me of the bright purple color of a Jujube. And, upon clicking your post in order to have a further taste, I was not disappointed in your lush words that further captivated me. I am glad we have such an author, as yourself, in the sparkling mist of our Hubpage community.

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      John Hansen 6 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for your generous comment, Tamara. Much appreciated.

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      Tamara Moore 6 months ago

      This is a rich and magnificent poem! I love to dream, and I love beautiful colors, and scenery. I marvel at all the wonders in your poem.

      Hugs,

      Tamara

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      John Hansen 6 months ago from Queensland Australia

      My imagination surprises me sometimes, Shauna :) I don't think "the little boy in me" will ever leave. Thank you for your continued encouragement.

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      Shauna L Bowling 6 months ago from Central Florida

      What a wonderful place this would be! Your imagination is astounding, John. The little boy in you shines through in this piece.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Mmm, Lawrence. I love chocolate grass too :)

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      Lawrence Hebb 7 months ago from Hamilton, New Zealand

      'Blades of chocolate grass?' sign me up!

      Very enjoyable.

      Lawrence

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you so much, Shyron. You humble me.

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      Shyron E Shenko 7 months ago from Texas

      Beautiful John, you are such a fantastic writer, I am in awe.

      Yes you should make this a children's book with tons of pictures.

      Blessings my friend

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Nell, thank you for the great comment. I had a lot of fun writing this poem. Glad you enjoyed it.

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      Nell Rose 7 months ago from England

      Awesome! LOL! I love these 'silly' poems! not silly in a bad way but in an amazing way! Nice one John!

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you very much, Audrey. That means a lot coming from you.

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      Audrey Howitt 7 months ago from California

      This was wonderful John--a magical adventure--I agree with threekeys--you should write poetry for children--you have a wonderful way with rhyme--

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading, Larry. Creating a fantasy world is challenging but a lot of fun. Cheers.

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      Larry Rankin 7 months ago from Oklahoma

      Interesting follow up.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Jo. We shall see. Maybe it will become a children's book.

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      Jo Miller 7 months ago from Tennessee

      I see a children's book here. Lovely place.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you so much, Devika.

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      Devika Primić 7 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      A beautiful hub!! Your creative mind has done it once again.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Chitrangada, thank you so much. I am happy you enjoyed reading this children"s poem.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, Genna. Glad you enjoyed the world I created. Let's go there.

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      Genna East 7 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

      What a delightful poem, John. I want to visit this beautiful world of fun, wonder and dreams. Well done!

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      Chitrangada Sharan 7 months ago from New Delhi, India

      As lovely and as bright as the children's World--full of innocence and lot of colours. You painted a beautiful picture and I enjoyed reading your poem!

      Thank you!

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad to hear that, John. Thank you for reading.

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      John Ward 7 months ago from Richmond, British Columbia, Canada.

      I am once more a child of Dreams and magic. Thank you John.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi, Chris, yes maybe you were following me when I originally published the first version of this. Thanks for the encouragement. I may have to actually take everyone's advice and find an illustrator and publish my own children's book with this.

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      Chris Mills 7 months ago from Maple City, Michigan

      That was a fun journey, John. Vaguely familiar. Maybe I've been following you long enough that I am recalling when you last shared it. Definitely great for children. Get an illustrator and go.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Marie, thank you for visiting my world Belelgeuse. I am glad it made you revisit your childhood. Pull out all those Dr Seuss books.

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      Marie Lawrence 7 months ago from New Hampshire

      A great and fun read John! Such a magical world you have created with artful rhyme and such images to make us want to return to our childhood days and read all of our Dr. Seuss books again! What a wonderful escape from the world of reality into the magical land of Betelgeuse!

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank Flourish. Dr Seuss is one of my inspirations.

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      FlourishAnyway 7 months ago from USA

      This imaginary world is almost Suess like.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad to hear it Nithya. Thanks for reading this.

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      Nithya Venkat 7 months ago from Dubai

      Enjoyed reading the poem and the quotes. The poem brought out the child in me.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Sakina, thank you for your beautiful comment. Your words humble me.

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      Sakina Nasir 7 months ago from Kuwait

      This poem is so beautiful Jodah! Loved reading it and it brought on a smile. You have an amazing talent and may God bless you! Keep writing such poetry. :)

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hello Debangee. Thank you for reading this poem and for your generous comment.

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      DEBANGEE MANDAL 7 months ago from India

      Lovely poem...really very imaginative..thank you for the poem.

      Have a good day..

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for enjoying this world I created, Martie. It would be a delightful place to live. Imagine snacking on that chocolate grass...mm.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      My pleasure, Eric. If what I write brings someone (e.g. Gabriel) joy I have succeeded.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for the encouragement, Mike. One day when I stop procrastinating it could become a children's book.

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      Martie Coetser 7 months ago from South Africa

      Betelgeuse is where I would love to live!

      A pea green sun

      and rolling hills of chocolate grass -

      What a world for a gal like me!

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      Eric Dierker 7 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Do not go in otherworlds where my son has just explored, he danced and laughed at all the joy that your otherworld enjoyed. We shared your wonderment of life that is too cool. Gabriel and I laughed and laughed because your tale so bold. We thank you uncle John for tales so wonderfully told. Thanks buddy.

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      mckbirdbks 7 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hi John - This is another excellent piece of writing. I can see it as a children's book. Hope you do the illustrations justice.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      MizB, so glad you enjoyed this little bit of fantasy escapism. The only things slightly borrowed from my own country is that "boomarays" are loosely based on kangaroos (boomer being a nickname for them and they bound), but apart from that it is truly a product of my imagination. I hope your grandchild enjoys this one day when you read it to her :)

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      MizBejabbers 7 months ago

      John, you had me fascinated and smiling all the way through. I just loved your "Beetle-Juice", and I hope someday when my great grandbaby gets a little older, I can read this to her and make her giggle. BTW, I don't really know Australian nomenclature that well, so I'm not sure what is imaginary and what you borrowed from your land. Some of the terms remind me of our own Native American terms. Goooood stuff, my friend.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hello Gwenneth. I am glad this all came together in creating an appealing fantasy world.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Buildreps, your kind comment is greatly appreciated.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you for the generous comment, Manatita. I had to delve into my imagination for this one.

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      manatita44 7 months ago from london

      Your rhyme and authors quotes are simply beautiful! Your country is vast and rich in words and different species.

      Thanks for the take on nature and different poetical expositions.

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      Buildreps 7 months ago from Europe

      Beautiful, John. You've got great talent!

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      Gwenneth Leane 7 months ago from Glen Osmond, Adelaide, South Australia Australia

      Loved your rhyming and the humour and the wild imaginings of a never land and capricious thought.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Bob, thanks for the comparison to Jabberwocky. By all means feel free to copy it and hang it up if it makes you pause and smile (I like the rhyme there too).

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Bob, thanks for the comparison to Jabberwocky. By all means feel free to copy it and hang it up if it makes you pause and smile (I like the rhyme there too).

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      Robert E Smith 7 months ago from Rochester, New York

      It reminded me of the cadence of "The Jabberwocky" and even more fun than that Alice In Wonderland verse. I loved it. I may copy it and hang it up a while, 'cause everytime I look at it I have to pause and smile. Thank you. Bob.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      We are all still children at heart, Ruby. The sense of wonder just needs reawakening from time to time. Cheers.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      I hope your boy enjoyed this, Eric. Did he question the strange words or just accept them?

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi, Luke. I greatly appreciate your generous comment..especially the word "AMAZING." Thank you for taking the time to read it twice.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      I really enjoy writing this type of poem, Venkat. Glad others appreciate it too. Thank you.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hi Marlene. Thanks for reading and enjoying my poem. Glad it brought a smile.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for that kind comment, whonu. Blessings.

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      John Hansen 7 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thanks for reading MsDora. Yes, I think it may be best to keep your distance and view many of these incredible creatures from a distance :) glad you found some enchantment here.

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      Dora Weithers 7 months ago from The Caribbean

      Wouldn't mind dreaming of Betelguese as long as the animals stay distant, but close enough to be admired for their beauty. The activity and the colors are enchanting.

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      whonunuwho 7 months ago from United States

      I enjoyed your work here my friend. Well done and entertaining.Thanks for sharing this nice work. whonu

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      Marlene Bertrand 7 months ago from Northern California, USA

      I was smiling the whole time I was reading this fun-filled poem. I'm glad you brought it back to light.

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      Venkatachari M 7 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Very funny and entertaining poem. Enjoyed it a lot. The scenario becomes live with your words.

      Thanks for sharing it.

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      Luke Holm 7 months ago

      John, this poem is AMAZING! I enjoyed every word, line, and idea expressed. It was so much fun to read. I read it twice, which is a first for me on hubpages. Well done!

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      Eric Dierker 7 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Wonderful -- it will be read by my boy tonight -- he will delight. I won't tell him at first about the strange words.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 7 months ago from Southern Illinois

      John, you woke up the child in me, I loved all the colors and the different critters, but especially the rhyming. Bravo!

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      John Hansen 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Hey Bill, you and me too. I had to create a world that appealed to me and hope that others would want to escape there as well. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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      Bill Holland 8 months ago from Olympia, WA

      Aww, I want to live in that world. Maybe not forever but man, alive, a short visit would be spectacular. :)

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      John Hansen 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Three keys, that is excellent advice. Yes, kids love colour and adventure, and an art student would be a perfect illustrator.

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      John Hansen 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Glad this awoke the child in you, Tim. I do know one other Hubber who is an artist and illustrator. Thanks for the tip.

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      John Hansen 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Thank you, ThreeKeys, for the generous comment. I have written quite a bit of children's' poetry but never published any yet. Maybe I should.

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      Threekeys 8 months ago from Australia

      Yes..children love pictures and colours. Maybe you might find your Ilustrator in an aspiring art student or TAFE student. You help them to showcase their skill and you, in return get to save on your budget. Just a thought...

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      Tim Mitchell 8 months ago from Escondido, CA

      A fun read bringing a smile awakening the child heart in me. Maybe, find an illustrator?

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      Threekeys 8 months ago from Australia

      John this was soooo beautiful. I loved imagining this world. You should write poetry for children and take them on this flight to different worlds. Loved the use of colours.