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Brooklyn 2 A.M.

Updated on February 12, 2015


The garden spot of the world,

yet there wasn’t a single flower,

Brooklyn 2 A.M. a demented hour,

the homeless bag lady

huddled in the corner, sits,

as the cold air hits

without a warning,

it was the bite and chill

of another winter morning,

the sadness stacked,

the 24 hour diner, packed,

waitresses popping pills,

but were always on top

of the free refills,

a stranger staring into

a stale cup of coffee,

nursing it sip by sip,

thinking about stealing

another man’s tip,

listening to the crowd,

human left-overs, losers,

night-shift workers, drunks, all very loud,

evening girls walking in with chronic fatigue,

gum-smacking, lips pursing,

pimps following, spitting and cursing,

talking the talk,

as cigarette butts littered the sidewalk,

and time stood still

seemingly oblivious of the sadness until,

darkness had its fill,

Brooklyn 2 A.M. humanity at its core,

for real, for sure.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Nathan K 4 years ago from Kansas

      Love the picture you make. Great poem!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks mad...

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      Terrye Toombs 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

      Frank, you have an amazing gift to paint vivid pictures with your words. Beautifully done. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      well Ttombs hub pages thinks I am in violation.. hmm I guess my language may be to harsh for them.. but I am so glad you liked it Frank

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Great gritty write Frank! Just great word painting!

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      snakeslane 4 years ago from Canada

      Frank, I read this earlier and was impressed with the realism (should have commented). You've got that late night Tom Waits blues scene going on. I am shocked that you've been moderated, this is mild compared to some of the stuff that gets published daily here on Hub Pages. Keep up the good work. Regards, snakeslane

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      Hubert Williams 4 years ago

      A poem worthy of Dragnet, Mickey Spillane or the Naked City. Voted up

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Yes, the Dragnet prologue came to mind, as did a set-up for a Raymond Chandler novel. A rhythm of a different place and time most of us would wonder at if we were suddenly transported there. UP!

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      LaDena Campbell 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      Another great one Frank...as always I love the way you make us feel as if we are a part of the scene..

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Wow frank I always love your poems.. they described the city of Brooklyn so well..I have never been there but I can see it with your words.

      Love it Frank

      voted up

      Debbie

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and intriguing. I agree with your very accurate description of Brooklyn at 2AM. Not to mention maybe a derelict or two crawling about smelly garbage cans. However it also depends on where you live. I was born and raised in Bay Ridge. At that time the neighborhood was the greatest. 2AM in the wintertime would find absolutely deserted streets. 2AM in the summertime might even find people sitting on door stoops or by buildings looking to cool off before the heat of the day hits. Unfortunately I've heard the neighborhood has changed and there are lots of Arabs, Russians and other Middle East immigrants and I wonder what it is like now. Especially after reading you descriptive poem.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Audrey and snakeslane for stopping by.. bless you guys :) Frank

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Hubert and X-- and Writer20 oh and Our Dear Ms Brooks, Just a teacher and Gypsy thank you all for having stopped by this diner and leaving a wonderful tip ( your comments ) bless you all

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      Brenda Barnes 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      Your words made it all come alive. I am happy to be in my tiny town at 2 am, especially after reading your raw and gritty poem. Thanks Frank. You never fail in your poetry.

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      Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Frank this is definitely one of my faves in your crime/city noir poems. Felt like i was on the night streets in Taxi Driver or something. Wish i knew poetic terms better but you've got 'em righteous in this classic my friend.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Im so glad you're in a tiny town too H--LOL thanks for popping by, and Alastar always glad to have you visiting the diner at 2am LOL thanks for your loyalty bless you both

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      Richard Ricky Hale 4 years ago from West Virginia

      FRANK!!! Your poetry is so awesome my friend. I really like your stories also. You are a talent that one day will get what he deserves. You are big time Frank, so keep reaching for the stars pal.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      LOL thanks thelyricwriter you deserve the same fate..:)

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      Charles Hilton 4 years ago

      Wow! That was nice! Very evocative and well paced!

      Way up!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for reading Charles :)

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      On the outside looking in. I see most of the world like that and wonder...

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      hey moms good seeing you :)

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      Lissette 4 years ago from Central Florida

      Always good to see you Frank...

      I was raised in Bklyn. Thankfully, I was never at a diner at 2am.

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      raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      the imagery is so vivid as if i'm actually there...

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      goodmorning Raci thank you for visiting Brooklyn at @ 2am..:) bless you

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      Barbara 4 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      Now I am VERY glad my daughter did not move to Brooklyn!!!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Brooklyn is still the Garden spot of the world LOL :) thanks for reading storyteller

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      lovedoctor926 4 years ago

      Brilliant Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Marlene

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      Cynthia B Turner 3 years ago from Georgia

      Wow, Frank. This was dark, dark with some knockout verses like "...the sadness stacked, the 24 hour diner packed..." and "...seemingly oblivious of the sadness until darkness had its fill..." Your verses made me feel like I was there and very glad that I wasn't.

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      SandCastles 3 years ago

      It's a very good poem but a sad poem. There's sadness is suburbia too; it's everywhere. But there is also happiness, even if it comes in small doses.

      At a coffee shop, I saw man drawing pictures and he was really good. I learned that the waitresses let him sit there and draw as he sipped on a coffee. I think they gave him free re-fills. I don't think he had anywhere to live; I'm not sure. He drew a picture for me and wouldn't accept any payment.

      Coffee Shop

      "Nobody asks why you're here, not alone, not at home, a place to disappear. A woman with a baby, a man, a book, a lady in tattered clothes, an old man telling war stories, everyone with a story, some talk, some don't, everyone with a story and no place to go".

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for the visit Cyndi and Sands thanks for your entry bless you both

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      Betty (Alawine) Overstreet 3 years ago from Vacaville, Ca.

      It is so sad, the homeless everywhere. Have Happy New Year!

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Bettyoverstreet10

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      Mary Craig 2 years ago from New York

      You've certainly described Brooklyn at 2:00 am and I have a feeling many other cities at 2:00 am. The time when all good folks are home and in bed but the city lives with its night people, the ones you've described so well. Oblivious to the sadness....

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

      Keep 'em coming Frank.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from St. Louis, MO until the end of June, 2017

      I just love how this begins,

      The garden spot of the world,

      yet there wasn’t a single flower,

      Brooklyn 2 A.M. a demented hour

      Made me think of tom waits' album nighthawks at the diner.

      just love how this begins,

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Cam :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      till thank you for stopping by the diner :)

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