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Brooklyn's 44th

Updated on September 27, 2012

The body was found,

less than a mile from downtown,

and on the fringes

of the better part of the city,

Brooklyn’s 44th,

and what a pity,

a mentally challenged female

was the victim,

butchered on her left side,

eyes opened, mouth wide,

she was hitch-hiking,

just looking for a ride,

robbed, raped, it would seem,

as the lead detective

was the last one at the scene,

she was strangled with jumper cables,

as the rich looked on,

as they lingered at small tables

on restaurant terraces,

sipping coffee and tea,

some whispering glad it wasn’t me,

a retarded young woman left on the curb,

and they felt bothered, disturbed,

as they chatted on their lap-tops,

and cell phones,

bubble gum pops,

voices with rich people tones,

hoping it’ll all end soon,

so they could go back to the sunny

warmth of a lovely July afternoon.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Ruch for reading my stuff this evening bless you :)

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      Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

      gosh...you just me ponder on how cruel mankind can be.

      intricate description, well done, Frank!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much mck :)

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Frank you highlight the distain the rich seem to have for people in their plight. You cloaked it in one of your award winning poems, but this seemed to have a duel message.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks again VG ...:)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Frank, this poem contain wonderful dramatic irony.

      Great read.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      I will check it out Our Ms Brooks..:)

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Hey sweet friend.. here is a a special hub. you are a star. in fact my first star

      https://hubpages.com/community/My-200th-Hub-Spread...

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      b. Malin thank you so much that meant alot bless you

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      b. Malin 4 years ago

      Don't rain on their Parade, or in this "Case" (pardon the pun)...their Sunny Day. Frank you are the Master of this form of Poetry. A whole story, from start to finish, in just a few lines. One again, you are Amazing!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank Jlava.. what a wonderful comment bless you :)

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      Jennifer Vasconcelos 4 years ago from Cyberspace and My Own World

      Frank,

      Everytime I read a piece of yours I am captivated. How you explore the dark recesses of inhumanity and cruelty - never denying the potential - ever shedding light on apathy and fear and mankind's wish to turn a blind eye on it all.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Eddy bless you :)

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Amazing my friend.

      hoping it’ll all end soon,

      so they could go back to the sunny

      warmth of a lovely July afternoon.

      A great ending too.

      Enjoy your weekend.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for stopping by thelyricwriter :)

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      Richard Ricky Hale 4 years ago from West Virginia

      Frank, wow! This was very vivid, scary even! It can happen at any time, any day, any hour. I just always wonder how someone can have the capability of watching another person die? That would have to be a stone cold trait. Always great Frank. Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      I couldn't have said it better Gypsy Rose Lee.. thank you and Faith Reaper Brooklyn is still and always will be the Garden spot of the world! LOL thanks for the visit and girishpuri thank for stopping by and commenting bless you

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      Girish puri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      sad poem, very well depicts the crimes in the night, very well presented hub, voted interesting

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Great write Frank! In the city in which I work and formerly lived, the crime is increasing in broad daylight, as they are so brazen, almost as if they are saying, look what I am doing, so what? Another vivid piece of awesome writing. Voted Up In His Love, Faith Reaper

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Know these stories well. Seems crime should happen only in the dark of night but cities will eat you up even in the light of day and no one ever knows for sure what lingers there. Your super poems could be made into a crime series for sure. Passing this on.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Our Ms Brooks and no I haven't seen CSI yet this fall.. :) and Jay thank you for visiting my Brooklyn's 44th good to see you and Jackie and Rosemay doggie and baby thank you for stopping by bless you all :) Frank

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      This was a hard hitter Frank. What can I say that already hasn't been said here. It's apalling but it happens, their lunches are ruined by all the bother, but never mind they will have forgotten all about it by the time they go out to dinner.

      You have a real gift of presenting such vivid imagery with these natative poems that always make us stop and think.

      Great job.

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      Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Isn't that just how it is? It really is.

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      Jaye Denman 4 years ago from Deep South, USA

      Frank....You captured perfectly within this poem the apathy of the haves for the have-nots, the lack of compassion even for victims of brutal crimes if the unpleasantness of a dead body detracts from their "rich people's" activities.

      I'm generalizing, of course, which is always dangerous, but there are far too many whose lack of empathy is characterized by your verses--feeling "bothered" and "hoping it will all end soon" so the ugliness won't intrude on their own lives. This attitude prevails, not only in the cities, but all over this land, and it signals a frightening loss of humanity.

      Voted Up++ and shared. Jaye

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      another suspenseful and exciting and sad poem.. I love your poems.. Did you see CSI and criminal minds last night? they remind me of your poems.. hugs from Tennessee

      Debbie

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Joyce for making yet another appearence on my page.. and thank you X-man and Valleypoet for your wonderful comments.. and I really appreciate th visits.. Lathing you are just going to make my ego explode...LOL thank you and bless you

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      Such vivid report of a story, cleverly put in a poem! Impressive, Frank! Great job..... You should start writing a novel! :)

      Voting up and awesome!

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      'Not on our doorstep please' is the rallying cry from the inconvenienced bourgeois......appears to be the message emanating from this poem Frank. The privileged are 'bothered, disturbed'....because they have witnessed such a hideous crime, but they are 'hoping it will end soon'....so they can return to their otherwise ordered lives.

      I think most of us, do, to a certain extent, distance ourselves as best we can from the harsh realities of life, perhaps it is just human nature to do so. This one got me thinking Frank, let me echo Xstatic above and say Great hard-hitting writing...thank you:-))

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      The contrasts here are so well drawn. "The rich looked on" with their "rich people tones," and their rich people toys, phones & laptops, so put off by this distraction, the wanton murder of a young woman with few options in life.

      Great hard-hitting writing Frank!

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      Joyce Haragsim 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

      This poor girl shouldn't have hitching for a ride. I hope they have caught the butcher.

      Vote up and AWESOME great writer, Joyce.