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barely audible

Updated on February 14, 2015


Still wearing her little red boots,

she was half sunk deep

amongst the giant tree roots,

all the spirits around her would weep,

as the insects swarmed about her

in the reeking water,

head crushed by the river stones,

and the earth bugs picking her flesh

from the bones,

the river passed through the soul of the city,

but it was a damn shame, a pity,

that her body was yet to be found,

and if they looked carefully,

it was only half buried in the ground,

then came a sound

of spirits crying,

barely audible above the soft river breeze,

where all the emotions would just freeze.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Til and tobusiness for visiting my page bless you both

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 

      4 years ago from Lincolnshire, U.K

      Frank, you've surpassed yourself! It's been a pleasure reading your work, watching your talent mature. Once again you've taken us to the most horrendous of places, but with such authority!!

      Excellent work.

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      Mary Craig 

      4 years ago from New York

      "where all the emotions would just freeze"... the same place our emotions freeze when we read this traumatic poem so beautifully written.

      Voted up, awesome and beautiful. Your talent is amazing my friend.

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you

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      lovedoctor926 

      5 years ago

      Likewise Frank. It's good to hear that you had a good weekend too:)

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      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      :) you see LOL

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      Lissette 

      5 years ago from Central Florida

      What a wonderful idea! :)

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      then take my hand and Ill pull you up!!!!

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      Lissette 

      5 years ago from Central Florida

      I am a bit short. Top notches are rarely within my reach but I am happy with peaceful. :)

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Moms I hope your weekend was top notch :)

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      Lissette 

      5 years ago from Central Florida

      If there were a button for sad or haunting I would use it a lot for your works. I can see things in my mind always painted in grays and white when I read you tales that are not as fictional as I would like.

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks Doc..:) hope you had a great Labor day W/E

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      lovedoctor926 

      5 years ago

      Wonderful imagery. You paint a picture with words that makes it come alive in my vivid imagination. up++

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much justateacher

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      LaDena Campbell 

      5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

      Such a sad story - I'm surprised I missed this one! Of course, it's wonderfully written, as always.

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      5 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Phdast for reading my barely audible :)

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      Theresa Ast 

      6 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Very nice. You really are accomplished at selecting just the right word to convey an image, a sound, a mood. I like both of them: there is such pathos in the one about the little girl. Theresa

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      Frank Atanacio 

      6 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Express 10 :)

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      H C Palting 

      6 years ago from East Coast

      I have to agree with Epigramman, a true master. Melancholy and beautiful.

    • Frank Atanacio profile imageAUTHOR

      Frank Atanacio 

      6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for reading Poetvix

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      poetvix 

      6 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

      Silver River Breeze tugged at my heart, that poor child suffering all alone. You really know how to pack a punch with the poetry.

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      Frank Atanacio 

      6 years ago from Shelton

      thanks so much guys for reading my death crimes

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      Sky9106 

      6 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

      Maybe I also died in my sleep when this one came around.

      I like the bugs picking the flesh off the bones and:

      The rive r ran through the city. A pity .

      Hope you are not the mayor there . I await, don't hold back you encourage me.

      Bless

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      epigramman 

      7 years ago

      ....I see that you are paying your literary respects to the Murder ballad genre - and you are a true master at it - I write quite a few murder ballads myself and some of my readers get creeped out because I often write in first person pronoun and they think I did it - lol

      What you are writing here my friend is true art and I will post this to my Facebook page with a direct link back here so maybe you can gain a wider audience.

      Also please check out some of my buddies and they will definitely come back here and do likewise:

      CLAIREPEEK

      SADDLERIDER 1

      A.K.A. PROFESSOR M

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