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Cries For Aid (tanka)

Updated on September 24, 2013

Hearing the voices

Cries for aid filling the streets

He ran to his home

And from is window shouted

Why doesn’t anyone help


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      Lee Tea 3 years ago from Erie, PA

      Guess it'd be easy to judge this guy at first, but the succinctness of your piece makes me envision a more chaotic situation where maybe the lines between right and wrong aren't so clearly defined. Like the universe, maybe this situation has no center or edge. Makes me wonder...

      ...which makes it a good piece :)

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Hmm...interesting and thought provoking. Lend a hand!

      God bless, Faith Reaper

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      FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

      I like this. It really makes you wonder what the situation is.

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      DJ Anderson 3 years ago

      Yes, this is a perfect example of what much of society has crumbled

      down to.

      But, when you put it into a tanka, it is quite funny!!

      DJ.

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      Phyllis Doyle Burns 3 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

      So much of a story and sorrow behind this short poem -- it goes much deeper than what meets the eye. Well done, Mark, well done.

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      A sad commentary, but so well said.

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      Victor W. Kwok 3 years ago from Hawaii

      It's a sad fact about life.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 3 years ago from Nepal

      This tanka is an inverted triangle with the apex pointing downward. The apex hits most.

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      Deb Hirt 3 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      It is often said that charity begins at home...

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