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Crow Haiku

Updated on January 12, 2013

Yesterday I saw some crows on my fence; just sitting there in the rain. So wet that raindrops dripped from their feathers. They stayed put, not budging from the fence, only occasionally shaking off the rain from their wings.

Crow Haiku

The crows on my fence

Rain saturated blackness

Shake their tuxedos

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      Jools99 4 years ago from North-East UK

      Jen, Hi! And many thanks for your comment - they are always in my garden, often fighting with the magpies...now that's another hub in waiting!

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      Jen Card 4 years ago

      The crows on my fence

      Rain saturated blackness

      Shake their tuxedos

      I LOVE THIS! Excellent write up of those black birds I favor. Thank you for sharing this awesome haiku. Voted up!

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      unknown spy - many thanks for reading and commenting.

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      IAmForbidden 5 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up.

      Very creative! unique and lovely haiku about the crows.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      PDPoole - Hi :o) Many thanks for your kind comment.

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      PD Poole 5 years ago from Alexandria, Louisiana

      Fantastic! Perfect capture of emotion..I could feel the gray and smell the rain! How marvelous! With hands palm to palm I bow and thank your for this wonderful view!

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      Laura Brown 5 years ago from Barrie, Ontario, Canada

      I liked your description before the haiku just as much as the poem itself.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      fpherj48 - I find myself inspired by all kinds of things - the crows were just sitting on my fence getting drenched and I decided to write a poem about them - I find haiku quite difficult, I'm too wordy :o)

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      Paula 5 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      I was recently introduced to haikus. They're fun. This one is great. It's amazing what inspires us, isn't it? UP++

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Unknown Spy - great name :o), thanks for your comment, I appreciate it.

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      IAmForbidden 5 years ago from Neverland - where children never grow up.

      Great haiku!

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Annie, thanks for passing this on - I hope your daughter likes it. They do like they wear tuxedos sometimes.

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      Annie Fenn 5 years ago from Australia

      I will be sharing this with my daughter who loves crows and claims "they are misunderstood". Lovely hauki!! I can visualise those crows in formal gear. My votes and sharing!

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Audrey, thanks so much for your kind comment :)

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      Loved this!

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Rolly, yes, I can understand why they might dislike days like these it's a bit like that today here in my neck of the woods - rain, rain and more rain! Thanks so much for your comment.

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      Rolly A Chabot 5 years ago from Alberta Canada

      Love it and sadly they dislike these kinds of days...

      Hugs from Canada

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      John, thanks for your comment!

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      Jonathan McCloskey 5 years ago from Cinnaminson, New Jersey

      Nice haiku, very mysterious.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Vinaya, thanks as always for your kind comment.

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      Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

      wow, this is lovely!

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Hyphenbird, thanks for commenting. I'm now thinking that these crows were like the Rat Pack - 'The Crow Pack' Mmm...not as cool but you have caught my imagination now :)

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      Brenda Barnes 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

      I really do like this Jools. Shake their tuxedos. Perfect lines...makes me think of Frank Sinatra for some reason. lol

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Movie Master and Moonlake - Many thanks for your kind comments!

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      moonlake 5 years ago from America

      Very good. I love crows and ravens, we have them all over here and I'm always watching them. Voted Up.

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      Movie Master 5 years ago from United Kingdom

      Hi Jools, fantastic Haiku, love it and voted up!

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Eddy, thanks for stopping by; thanks for your comment!

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      Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

      Very creative indeed.

      Thanks for sharing.

      Take care,

      Eddy.

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      Theresa Ast 5 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      You are good at Haiku; I never was when I was in school. Maybe I will try it again some time. I could picture the crows, the fence, the rain. Nice work.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Thanks Flora..I still have a long way to go but you're right...it's addictive!

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      FloraBreenRobison 5 years ago

      Second haiku in a row. What fun. Yes, this isan apt description of crows.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Cheers PoshCoffeeCo, I get lots of birds in my garden but the crows are the most interesting - last week one of them was fighting a magpie on my lawn!

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      Steve Mitchell 5 years ago from Cambridgeshire

      I have often seen this, but would never have thought to put it into words.Cool.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Thanks for your kind comments Nell.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Thanks for your kind comments Nell.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Thanks for your kind comments Nell.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Snakeslane, thanks for commenting, my brain is in 5-7-5 overload at the moment...

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Russ, thanks for your kind comments.

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      Jools99 5 years ago from North-East UK

      Just Ask Susan, thanks for your comments-I'm still learning Haiku but I love (and also fear) its compactness (not sure if that's an actual word?. Flora said haiku would become addictive!

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      Nell Rose 5 years ago from England

      Hi, really liked this, and it described them exactly!

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      snakeslane 5 years ago from Canada

      Really enjoyed your crow Haiku Jools, beautiful image, love the photo too. Regards, sankeslane

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      Russ Baleson 5 years ago from Sandhurst, United Kingdom

      Nice one Jools, great imagery and wonderfully crafted lines. Thanks. Russ

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      Susan Zutautas 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Awesome Haiku. Can see the picture without the picture.

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      cre8ivOne 5 years ago from Midwest, USA

      Very cool observation!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Jools.. very creative Haiku.. almost like a picture