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Dark Poetry--Annihilation of the Wicked

Updated on July 31, 2012
Source: My daughter Chrishell painted this picture and allowed me to use it.  This is to represent hope at the end.
Source: My daughter Chrishell painted this picture and allowed me to use it. This is to represent hope at the end.

Intro

This was truly the absolute hardest challenge I have ever had.

The theme was Annihilation of the Wicked. I had write the poem with the apocalypse in mind and without any religious tones.

Throughout the poem, there are underlined words that were chosen for me and had to remain in certain stanzas.

The poem had to be exactly 225 words and I had 6 hours to write this.

It took me 4 1/2 hours for the rough draft and after several revisions the poem took me 5 hours and 20 minutes. This was the final copy that was voted on by my challengers.

Thank-you for taking the time to read, Annihilation of the Wicked.

Annihilation of the Wicked


Phantoms of grey prolong the mists soft ribbon bands,

caressed gently across the shore’s velvety silk sands.

The moon but a crescent of the darkest night,

stars hidden through the shadows, offer no light.


Echoed in the distance, the voices of a thousand squalling birds,

with the heavy thumping and gathering of man less guided herds.

Whispers of roaring hissing through the thunderous looming air,

rustling are those who seek shelter or are left forever to despair.


Suddenly, the ocean roared with echoes of the waves,

as they crash through the caverns of the ocean caves.

The rocks were wet and shimmering, the tide was high,

the swells nearly of white horses as if they fell from the sky.


Caravanning across the waves, the Knight of Darkness came to play,

Eagerly, collected the souls that offered their spattered wicked display.

Those calloused by their selfish malicious greed,

Were swept away to the depths by the magnificent steed.


The time has come for Justice to appear,

The time for annihilation has drawn too near.

To rid the world of those filled with treacherous crime,

Gathered the soulless without reason nor rhyme.


Once the wicked were gathered, their souls no more,

The Knight of Darkness disappeared from the ocean’s shore.

Mists once present, now ebbed and faded away.

Those virtuous in heart were left here to stay.

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Sky Slave, Awww...Thank-you so very much for your encouraging comments!!! I truly do appreciate them!!! I look forward to reading your hubs!!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      shruti sheshadri, Thank-you soooo much for taking the time to read this and comment!! I do appreciate it so very much!!! I look forward to reading more of your poetry as well!!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Marcela, Thank-you soooo very much for your inspiring comments!!! I truly do appreciate them and look forward to reading more of your Hubs!!! Thanks Again!!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      mollymeadows, Thank-you sooo very, very much for your encouraging comments!!! I truly do appreciate the support!!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      rahul, WOW, Thank-you soooooo very much for your very encouraging and supportive comments!!! I do love writing poetry that conveys some sort of message!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Skyler DeCristoforo 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      This is really some fantastic work. The time spent was defiantly worth the outcome. Very impressive.

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      shruti sheshadri 5 years ago from Bangalore, India

      This is reaaly good patty, and the fact that you put in so much effort in it us really astounding! :) Well done indeed!

      voted up!

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      Marcela Arnaut 5 years ago

      Wow! You have created a delicacy for the senses here, Patty. It's my first time reading your work and I am glad I stumbled upon this work of art. I am a big fan of dark poetry and this one is just delightfully spine-chilling.

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      Mary Strain 5 years ago from The Shire

      Good work! This paints a very vivid picture and the fact you did this under such restrictions means you have mad skills. I'm impressed!

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      Jessee R 5 years ago from Gurgaon, India

      Powerfully haunting...... I wonder if a defaulter reads this and understand the power and intensity behind it... he will be scared to death by what he realizes he is in for...

      Epic... just Epic... blew me away

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Aisha, Thank-you sooo very much for taking the time to comment!! I do appreciate it!!!

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      Aisha Jilani 5 years ago from Lahore

      Very nice poem, great work keep it up.

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      nanderson, WOW, Thank-you soooo much!!! I truly appreciate that you took the time to read this even though you are not a fan of poetry!! That means a lot to me!!! My oldest daughter painted that picture and it is one of my favorites!! THANKS AGAIN!!!

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      nanderson500 5 years ago from Seattle, WA

      That was cool. I don't even like poetry, but I like this one. The picture is good too, very evocative.

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Deborah, Thank-you sooo much!!! I appreciate your encouraging comments and look forward to reading more of your hubs!! Thank-you and wish you the very best!!

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      I love this poem...great job..so good to meet you. blessings Debbie

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Olde Cashmere, WOW, Thank-you soooo much for your very kind comments!! I really do appreciate them!! I truly enjoy reading your Hubs as well!!! :)

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      Olde Cashmere 5 years ago from Michigan, United States

      Stunning image rich writing Patty Kenyon. Really enjoyed reading this poem, fantastic can't say enough. Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting :)

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      FemmeSpooky, Thank-you sooooo very, very much!!! I do appreciate your comments!!!!

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      FemmeSpooky 5 years ago from Massachusetts

      This piece is brilliant, Patty! Great work!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Ron, I am very excited about this challenge!!! :) I just started writing a few paragraphs, however, I am definitely going to take my time with it. This is the title I came of with: Short Story--The Little Frogs That Could

      THANK-YOU for giving me a fun challenge that I have never done before!!! :)

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      Ron Hawkster 5 years ago from United States of America

      @Patty,

      I like your spirit of adventure. Imposing time limits for someone who is disciplined is unnecessary. In fact, if I were to set a time limit it would be the other way: that you'd have to wait at least a week before starting to write, because the idea needs some time to ferment and take shape. But your choice. Do it whenever. That gives me some time to get the popcorn ready :)

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Ron, I am very intrigued by this challenge and love that there are no time limits!!!!!! lol

      I think I will take up this challenge; I haven't written an actually short story/story in awhile!!! Since, I can't interview the frogs in my yard because I never learned frog language(they didn't offer the language in my school), I will have to do just a bit of research and hope to have something by later tonight or tomorrow!! :) This seems like a fun one!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Mhatter, Awww, THANKS!!!! I do try!!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      IntegrityYes, Thanks Again for your Encouragement and Support!!! I do appreciate it!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Michelle, Thank-you soooo much!!! I always appreciate your comments and insights!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Martin Kloess 5 years ago from San Francisco

      You just keep getting better. Or is it my imagination? :-)

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      IntegrityYes 5 years ago

      WHOA! COOL! That is another fantastic one from the great Patty. I voted up. OOH,Patty. HAH-HAH!

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      Ron Hawkster 5 years ago from United States of America

      @Patty,

      That was really cool. Thanks for the explanation. Am I allowed to make a challenge? If so, write a story about a group of baby frogs who have to migrate from their pond which is drying to another pond before dawn or they'll risk dying. There are no word count limits, no time limits, and no requirement to use any particular rule. It will have to have the concepts of hope and despair. If you're going to use metaphors use cats and birds. The ending is up to you. One or more paintings from your daughter have to accompany and complement the story. And of course, whether you choose to take the challenge or not has no bearing on what we think of you. So, there is no pressure :)

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      Michelle Liew 5 years ago from Singapore

      An amazing topic, Patty, and you've met your own challenge. It's hard to talk about the Apocalypse without brushing religion, and you've done it! A poem with an important message that we should look after our own souls too. Shared!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      CyberShelley, Thank-you very much for your very encouraging words!! I truly do appreciate it!!! Thanks Again!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      tnderhrt, Thank-you sooo much!! I do appreciate it!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Frank, Thank-you sooo much!! I too am also impressed by the poetry you have been writing this week!! Perhaps we will make a new name for CT...lol

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Ron, The challenges come from friends that I have had for nearly 30 years. The history of the challenges started about 20 years ago when I wanted to be writer for a living because I enjoyed writing as a hobby.

      However, I didn't have the confidence to actually attempt to have anything published. One night my friends and I were camping and we were just making up stories, lyrics, poems etc. They really enjoyed my stories etc. that they wanted to encourage me to write.

      Life happened and I was going through years and years of really tough times. My friends wanted to continue to encourage me and started to challenge me. The purpose of the challenges is to remind me no matter what limitations are set for me, I will find a way. Kind of a metaphor that encourages me to write...lol

      The challenges stopped for awhile until I started going back to school and met new people that became friends with me on Facebook. The challenges were posted on Facebook and then new people started to challenge me. I haven't been on Facebook in over a year, so the challenges come through texts, e-mail, text, etc.

      In regards to my oldest daughter...she is extremely gifted in both art, music, and photography. She graduated from high school this year and had won several school awards for her photography. I am trying to encourage her to go to college either to learn new skills or perhaps learn graphic design. I would hate to see such a natural talent go to waste and truly hope that she continues on with her passion no matter what she decides!!

      Thank-you soooo very much for your continued support and encouragement!! I do appreciate it!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      dghbrh, My challengers are friends that I have had for nearly 30 years...lol...Thank-you sooooo much for your very kind and supportive comments!! I do appreciate it!!! THANKS AGAIN!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      rcrumple, WOW, Thank-you soooooo much for your very encouraging comments!! I do appreciate appreciate them sooooo very much!!! THANKS AGAIN!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      Josh, Thank-you soooo much for your comments!!! I truly do appreciate your support and encouragement!! THANKS AGAIN!!!

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      Patty Kenyon 5 years ago from Ledyard, Connecticut

      billybuc, Thank-you sooo much!!! The challenges come from friends that I have known nearly 30 years and I am told the challenge via text, phone call, or sometimes e-mail. They are fun but challenging!! THANKS AGAIN!!!!

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      Shelley Watson 5 years ago

      Patty, I am quite awestruck, this is a stunning, amazing poem - I love it!

      Up, awesome, interesting and shared!

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      tnderhrt23 5 years ago

      Very impressive! Nice job with this!

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      Reads like wickedness, crisp, compelling and really satisfying if you like darkness.. voted awesome!!!!!

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      Ron Hawkster 5 years ago from United States of America

      Patty,

      I like the poem. I have to admit when I read the introduction (as with some of your other poems) I was a little puzzled by all the restrictions. Why the limits, or why would one have to use certain words? After reading it, I think I have a clue about the use of the words, but I'm still not sure about the purpose of the word limitation. Are these challenges there because regular poetry is so natural to whoever the participants of these challenges are that they need something else, such as these rules, to force themselves to up the game? I like the result, but I'm also wondering, what would the result have been without any limitations? Would it have been better or not?

      Also, I'm intrigued by your daughter's painting. Not only is it cute that she had a purpose in mind when painting it, but it's actually impressive that she was able to accomplish that. I hope she continues it, because I like the result. Maybe the two of you should get into writing books of poetry for children and have her paint them. That would be a good selling point.

      The unique and original painting makes this a good candidate for "pinning."

      Voting it up and sharing it. Bravo!

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      deergha 5 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

      Whoever is the challenger has done a wise Job...thanks to the challenger for we would not have been able to read this. You are really very very good poet, Patty. Wonderful imagery of the darkness through this wonderful piece of poetry.

      Your daughter really is also very talented like you. Like mother like daughter. Well done.

      Voted up and sharing to the world, dear:-)

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      Rich 5 years ago from Kentucky

      A++++

      Fantastic. The visions you created would challenge the special effects artists of any production! To work this well within the limitations set is a true statement of your fabulous talent. Great Job!

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      Joshua Zerbini 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

      Patty,

      This was amazing! I am so impressed by your ability to write poetry. You are truly an awesome poet! I don't say that lightly either. Great job Patty!

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      Bill Holland 5 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Seriously good work Patty! What challenge is this? I'd say you scored big time. You really are growing as a writer before our very eyes and it is wonderful to watch.