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Darkness Was Claiming the Sky

Updated on August 28, 2014



She discovered that life came in all flavors,

Benign, cruel, incompetent and gifted,

In all of that she sifted,

Torn clothes,

No shoes on her feet,

She wandered aimlessly

Down a busy street,

Nothing left of the hope

She had earlier in the day,

All that remained was a hollow dread,

A vague sense that

Life and death were coming to a head,

Her own life would fade she’d fear,

And on that chilly gray day,

There was death floating in the air,

She was much too sad to cry,

And the rains came,

As the darkness was claiming the sky,

She was feeling the full dose of dread

That dogged her all day,

Clinging and there to stay,

It was very clear,

She could not suppress the fear,

Her heart would race,

Blood smeared across her face

As she fell to her knees,

Then the memories came back,

Fully armed and started the attack,

She couldn’t stop her child from crying,

And after hours of trying,

She did the unthinkable,

Cupped the infant’s nose and mouth,

She would kill,

Her husband tried to stop her,

But the infant would remain still…

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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      Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much poeticmc :)

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      MD Johnson 2 years ago from San Diego, CA

      Your poetry to me is reminiscent of Edgar Allen Poe's in the sense that it is dark and sinister, and takes us to places of the human psyche most dare not wander into, but your poems have a depth to them, for realizations sake and exploration and above all to understand the mindset of those we'd label monsters... You cast a light on the forsaken and downtrodden of society, the stories unheard and unseen, and your work is awesome! I like it and fear it at the same time, it's disturbingly necessary... Thanks Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      thank you again Uban :) bless you

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 3 years ago from Lagos

      what a wonderful story told in rhymes. Sad and tragic encounters scribed by the wonderful storyteller.

      yes, she did the unthinkable...

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      Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

      Oh Jackie you stay the kindess things LOL :) bless you girl

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      Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Dreadful... but I will take you over Steven King any day! ^

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Lady :)

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      Joanna Chandler 4 years ago from On planet Earth

      I see you are at it again. Thumbs up to good poetry :)

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks for catching that storytellersrus :)

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      Barbara 4 years ago from Stepping past clutter

      OMG. How terrible that it comes down to this. Anti-abortion folk would best serve unborn children by never allowing a woman to get to this point. So powerful, Frank.

      (By the way, you might want to edit this sentence: "She was much to sad to cry...")

      Thanks for the Sunday wake up call.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      aaawww you're amazing Til...:)

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      Frank you paint pictures in our mind with poetry and words. You chill us to the bone and lead us suspensefully to an end we don't expect. We need an amazing button just for you my friend!

      Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Anna Haven and Vin for claiming the sky here :) bless you

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Frank,

      I have read news about mothers killing her child. I cannot understand the mother's motive.

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      Anna Haven 4 years ago from Scotland

      Dark and tragic; written with skill which chills the blood.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thanks so much Valley for commenting have a super week bro...:)

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      Valleypoet 4 years ago

      You drew me in right from the start, and it never felt as if it was going to end well.....but the end was worse than I imagined...one of your darkest pieces Frank, but very well told:-))

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thanks Ruch :)

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      Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

      you always grip my heart by your vivid tales

      sharing it across!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Express10 :)

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      H C Palting 4 years ago from East Coast

      This is chilling and well done.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much tobusiness :)

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Frank, you danced so nimbly on the edge...brilliantly done, you always manages to take us to the pain.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you Ocfireflies.. )

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      "But the infant would remain still…"

      Powerful!

      Best,

      Kim

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Faith you're the best... and Ms Dora thank you for popping on by :)

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 4 years ago from The Caribbean

      A tragic ending, but you caught my attention at the very beginning with those different "flavors." Now I'm thinking that's what happens when there is such a strange mix.

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      LOL Dearest Frank, I know, bless you . . . missed one ... : )

      Hugs dear one,

      Faith Reaper

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you Eddy.. and thank you Mister C and the Cats ... keep the mounties behind you bro :)

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Again a title to die for and did I say that you are one of my all time favorite writers - well I always do and I never miss an opportunity - as a writer you are an artist with a brush and such a great storyteller.

      Amen and blessings to you as always

      Mister C and the cat crew

      Somewhere in Canada eluding the Mounted Police, lol.

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Tragically gripping Frank ;wonderful as always and of course voted up. Have a great day my friend.

      Eddy.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Bless you my dearest Faith and I miss following you too.. well I do follow you.. so I don't miss it.. what??? never mind sweet dear one..:) oh and thank you Ziyena for commenting too bless you both

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Sueswan, Vincent Moore and Audrey for stopping by and reading my darkness...:)

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      ziyena 4 years ago from ... Somewhere Out There ...

      I don't know whether to hug you or throttle you ... great work! UP

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      Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

      Hi Dearest Frank,

      Your title there literally describes our skies here this day in southern USA, as darkness truly did claim the sky!

      Sigh . . . your line, "She was much too sad to cry" well, almost your line, but anyway, I have been there, so very sad, that the tears would not even flow. That's pretty sad.

      Very good flow which keeps one reading and then . . .

      Chilling to bone poetry here once again, and with that surprise, dreadful ending too! Geez!

      Hugs and love from . . .

      Voted up +++

      Your faithful follower, Faith Reaper

      Missed you and your faithful following . . .

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Sad write--and yes--dancing on the dark side!

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      Frank you can take a scene and capture it in your head and then lay it down before us all to read and be fed. Your mind is energetic, your thoughts may be dark and dreary for some, yet you blind out the sun and bring out the wolves when the moon is high. The blood will pour, your victims set free, for you sir are a storyteller that everyone must read. Bravo, sad, dark yet metaphorically excellent.

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      Sueswan 4 years ago

      A sad and tragic story told only in a way you can Frank.

      Voted up and awesome

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      thank you so much Marlin55 and wayne barrett

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Such a tragic setting that it is hard to reply, but really...your creative, descriptive wording in this piece is brilliant. Very sad but oh so well written.

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      Marlin 55 4 years ago from USA

      Good job of dancing on the dark side of poetry, Frank. You always do a good job of stirring up the emotions, good and bad. Great poem!